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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Shirlena
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I'll also take two and I LOVE this. It's so catchy with words to live by, I know I could live by them and right on time since summer is ending very soon. One of my favorites of the day.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
    oh I'm so glad youfound this one Shirlena! :) Sharyn
Comment from jbravo46
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Wow. So many different types of poetry.Who knew? You format seems to fit perfectly. I would certainly take 2 summers and give up winter

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    thx so much jb!!
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
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An impressively beautiful Quatern... or poem... as I would have called it before reading author's notes.

But all in all a piece that touched me with it's rhythmic quality and repeating message. I am struck by the resonance of it and actually read it three times grasping at it's theme since in Interior Alaska big daddy winter will soon be here...

Congratulations... very, very good

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    So keep me in mind my dear when Daddy Winter descends! I've always wanted to go to Alaska - IN THE SUMMER!! :) Thank you so much for enjoying my poem and giving a magic '6'!
    Best wishes
    Sharyn
reply by Gregory K Shipman on 04-Sep-2012
    Summer is the best time to visit... some say the ONLY time to visit

    greg
Comment from mumsyone
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Hi Sharyn,

Congratulations! Easy to see why this was the winner of the quatern contest. It's light and bouncy, and it has a good message along with great form.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    thx Lois! :)
Comment from fictionwriter
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I'd take no summer and no winter. Give me the forever spring and fall and I'd be happy. I hate the high heat, and the freezing cold. Give me spring and fall. Well done.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    then write a pantoum just for spring & fall fw! I love those seasons too - somewhere else! :) S
Comment from Charlie Crewes
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Really enjoyed this form of poetry. The title immediately caught my interest and the style and that specific line was nice to read over and over. Timely and very well done. Fun to read.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    thx Charlie!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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You did a great job with this, Sharyn. Congratulations on your win! Your repeating line brings a smile. I'm not nearly the fan of hot, humid weather that the poet must be. I'm ready for a little cool and crisp. :) nancy

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    thx Nancy! Must admit I like to go VISIT places which have seasonal changes ... but it's awfully nice to come home to the warm!!
    Blessings
    Sharyn
Comment from robyn corum
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I like the idea of outrunning the passage of the season. It's cute and whimsical, and fun. I can see why this poem won the contest. Great job.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    thx Robyn!
Comment from jmdg1954
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I don't know about quaterns or any other for of poetry. But I know what I like when I read poetry and I like this one. I as well dislike the end of summer. We're closing the pool today so to me that signifies closure. Oh well. Great poem. I like your fourth stanza of going south and out-run the sun. Yea, I like it. Excellent. John

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    thx John! closing the pool ALREADY? Where do you live? Now THAT is a sad occasion! :) Sharyn
reply by jmdg1954 on 04-Sep-2012
    Unfortunately, not Hawaii. I live in NJ, but am leaving for a week in Florida to see my kids and granddaughter. No use keeping it up and running. Anyway, weathers changing.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Very nicely done! I'm not a fan of sun and surf and summer... too hot for me. But I appreciate your love of it. I'll take 3 springs and 2 falls instead. :)

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
    well if you have those kinds of beautiful seasonal changes, why not Phyllis? :) Sharyn