Mama's Soul
An homage to the soul of the family.17 total reviews
Comment from Selestia
Very nice description of a soul. Nice dialect included. Great response to the writing prompt. Should this be categorized as a poem instead of prose? It has a very warm and gentle feel . . . like a mama.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Very nice description of a soul. Nice dialect included. Great response to the writing prompt. Should this be categorized as a poem instead of prose? It has a very warm and gentle feel . . . like a mama.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Selestia. I'm delighted you enjoyed. You make a solid point, but I am a prose writer, and don't feel comfortable labeling my work otherwise. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Charlene0513
A fitting words spoken to show your mama just how important she is to you and to the many wonderful God-filled things she does for others to keep the soul alive and flourishing.
Charlene
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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A fitting words spoken to show your mama just how important she is to you and to the many wonderful God-filled things she does for others to keep the soul alive and flourishing.
Charlene
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Charlene. I'm glad you connected to my little story. Peace, Lee
Comment from Meta~Mark
Mama's Soul is an excellent entry into this Soul Writer writing prompt, best of luck and I truly enjoyed this soulful faithful poem
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Mama's Soul is an excellent entry into this Soul Writer writing prompt, best of luck and I truly enjoyed this soulful faithful poem
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thanks so much, M~M. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Sweet,like early spring rain on a metal truth. Beauty, puriity and a celestial blessing to wash away winter grime.
Your poemslash story does all that. It's very soulful in it's simple recognition of a light touch.
Wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Sweet,like early spring rain on a metal truth. Beauty, puriity and a celestial blessing to wash away winter grime.
Your poemslash story does all that. It's very soulful in it's simple recognition of a light touch.
Wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Ingrid. You know me (I think), give me a big topic, and I'm going to try to bring it down to something I can understand. I love what you see in these few words. Thank you again. X
Comment from mossmouse
I believe you nailed this one! So much expression and feeling and genuine heart instilled in this work. I love the dialect and can visualize someone sharing that with the person that they love and does all that you state. A very amazing piece and I am officially envious! Mossmouse
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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I believe you nailed this one! So much expression and feeling and genuine heart instilled in this work. I love the dialect and can visualize someone sharing that with the person that they love and does all that you state. A very amazing piece and I am officially envious! Mossmouse
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you much, mossmouse. I really 'felt' this one, and I'm glad you did, too. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
Comment from sweetwoodjax
thisi s very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse prose about the soul of a mother that hold the family together. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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thisi s very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse prose about the soul of a mother that hold the family together. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you, sweetie. I'm so glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from poesyapprentice
wow, so unexpected! very cool. Wonderful flow! Awesome imagery. You just made this contest a tougher vote for me because until I got here only one stood out to me. The repeat at the end was great. Vs three was my fav I think. Only one question, why the switch off from yo' to your throughout? "Character" was strong in the beginning but faded towards the end a bit. Nice job though, and good luck: )
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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wow, so unexpected! very cool. Wonderful flow! Awesome imagery. You just made this contest a tougher vote for me because until I got here only one stood out to me. The repeat at the end was great. Vs three was my fav I think. Only one question, why the switch off from yo' to your throughout? "Character" was strong in the beginning but faded towards the end a bit. Nice job though, and good luck: )
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you, poesy. You bring up a very good point. See, I love to write in various dialects, and almost always do. Readers on this site, however, don't always have the patience, or the ear to decipher. So, since this is a contest I want to win, I relaxed the dialect. I hope that doesn't make me a sell-out. I had a message I wanted to convey to as many people as possible.
No dialect was unacceptible to me. But I thought I could live with a relaxed dialect. I hope you agree. Thanks for your very encouraging comments. X
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I understand your reasoning and I can't judge you a sell-out on that as one enters a contest to win it and does what one thinks best. However, having said that I will be honest and tell you that I ended up going with the another poem because of the fact that you didn't stay true to form with the dialect. It lost some of the realism which would have made it a superb work, in my opinion. Good news, tho, I seem to be in the minority because the work was doing well in the contest last time I checked, and I am happy for you that it is! Many blessings!
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I appreciate your integrity, and don't begrudge the vote in the least. I may have to rethink the way I approach contests. Thank you again. X
Comment from ennahanid
I love the telling and the voice of your 'Soul' entry here. It is beautifully done and different. I do wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I love the telling and the voice of your 'Soul' entry here. It is beautifully done and different. I do wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Dinah. 'Soul' is haed to capture. I just went with what I know. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from Sasha
This is so lovely and a marvelous entry for this contest. Beautifully written from the heart and a wonderful entry for this contest.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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This is so lovely and a marvelous entry for this contest. Beautifully written from the heart and a wonderful entry for this contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Sasha. I really felt this one. I'm glad you connected. Peace, Lee
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Moma is the soul of the family, and you've done an impressive job of showing us who Mama is. She's generous, hard-working, protective, and well-loved. Blessed as well as a blessing. Well written dialect. :) nancy
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Moma is the soul of the family, and you've done an impressive job of showing us who Mama is. She's generous, hard-working, protective, and well-loved. Blessed as well as a blessing. Well written dialect. :) nancy
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Nancy. Don't know much about 'religious' souls. Went with what I know. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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You've captured her essence, her inner being. By far the best written piece in the contest, and a beautiful character sketch. :) Nancy