Tree Tag
A psychological trip.41 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
I can tell this story was put together carefully, the plot unfolds and is explained in the end, well written and full of intrigue, the theme is wonderful and the length is perfect for a one sitting read.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I can tell this story was put together carefully, the plot unfolds and is explained in the end, well written and full of intrigue, the theme is wonderful and the length is perfect for a one sitting read.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you, joann. Yes, this one was a bit ambitious and required some concentration on my part. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from RazberryBullet
Got a chuckle here:... He decided she looked enough like a psychiatrist. Severe hair, dark pant suit, minimal make-up. Probably a pole up her chute, too. LOL!!!
Loved this:..."Does Santa Claus count?" "You consider Santa Claus a lie?" "Well, if you don't, lady, maybe we should switch places." hahaha!
Whoa, what a twist! Loved it!!!!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Got a chuckle here:... He decided she looked enough like a psychiatrist. Severe hair, dark pant suit, minimal make-up. Probably a pole up her chute, too. LOL!!!
Loved this:..."Does Santa Claus count?" "You consider Santa Claus a lie?" "Well, if you don't, lady, maybe we should switch places." hahaha!
Whoa, what a twist! Loved it!!!!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much. I'm delighted you enjoyed my little psychological spree. I really appreciate. Peace, Lee
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I have to say that is one of the best story's I've read in a while. I just wasn't expecting the ending, and that's what makes a good read. The mind can protect itself my changing memories you didn't like, it just makes it harder to believe the truth when you are confronted with it. This is really well written, kept the readers interest and I really did enjoy it! xsx
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I have to say that is one of the best story's I've read in a while. I just wasn't expecting the ending, and that's what makes a good read. The mind can protect itself my changing memories you didn't like, it just makes it harder to believe the truth when you are confronted with it. This is really well written, kept the readers interest and I really did enjoy it! xsx
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, sandra. This is high praise, indeed. I'm always encouraged when readers are engaged. I really appreciate that. I'm so glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from kashmayank
adoctors job is a hard job but anyways a nice work ,kept the tempo high and was easy o read and undrstand ,liked it all the best
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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adoctors job is a hard job but anyways a nice work ,kept the tempo high and was easy o read and undrstand ,liked it all the best
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you, kashmayank. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from vfbryant
Fascinating story. I loved the personality of the President...Jack's wisecracks were definitely warranted and entertaining. I liked it that you kept us in the dark about the true story behind the story until the very last. Suddenly, what had appeared to be a regular, scripted session with shrinks turned into a truly valid revelation of A trauma in Jack's life. Great story.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Fascinating story. I loved the personality of the President...Jack's wisecracks were definitely warranted and entertaining. I liked it that you kept us in the dark about the true story behind the story until the very last. Suddenly, what had appeared to be a regular, scripted session with shrinks turned into a truly valid revelation of A trauma in Jack's life. Great story.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you, vfbryant. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
He also wondered if every patient routinely shrank his shrink. << Very clever insight!
This is a masterpiece. Wow, you are talented. If I envied any writer here, it would be you. But I'm not a competitive person... I just admire and enjoy excellence where I find it. I definitely found it here! Bravo!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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He also wondered if every patient routinely shrank his shrink. << Very clever insight!
This is a masterpiece. Wow, you are talented. If I envied any writer here, it would be you. But I'm not a competitive person... I just admire and enjoy excellence where I find it. I definitely found it here! Bravo!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you again, Phyllis. I really appreciate the kind words and encouragement. Now I have something to live up to. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from christianpowers
Hi Lee,
Brilliantly written, per usual for you. I thoroughly enjoyed it, also as usual.
The one note I'd offer is that the 'completeness' of the dialogue in Jack's account made his telling read more like a narrative w/dialogue and not like a patient telling his story.
There are many possible fixes, and even though I'm certain you're more than capable of devising and applying your own fixes, I'd like to suggest one. The doctor(s) listening could comment on how detailed his memory of the apple orchard is, so detailed that includes every word spoken, as if it were a movie playing out in his mind.
I had to come back and add this one pet peave. For a while, I suspected 'Jack' was JFK. As soon as the new doctor started calling him 'Mr. Presi.." (which I think should be written as "Mr. Presi--" to show an interuption, btw) I strongly suspected this would turn out to be the President of the United States... and the name Jack... well, you get my meaning. I'd rather he be called something different, only because the comparison is too easy. Stu, or Mike, or Mitt (LOL)... anything but Jack.
The best exchange is as follows...
â??You consider Santa Claus a lie?â??
â??Well, if you donâ??t, lady, maybe we should switch places.â??
Great stuff. Thanks for the great read, and I hope this helped.
Christian
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Hi Lee,
Brilliantly written, per usual for you. I thoroughly enjoyed it, also as usual.
The one note I'd offer is that the 'completeness' of the dialogue in Jack's account made his telling read more like a narrative w/dialogue and not like a patient telling his story.
There are many possible fixes, and even though I'm certain you're more than capable of devising and applying your own fixes, I'd like to suggest one. The doctor(s) listening could comment on how detailed his memory of the apple orchard is, so detailed that includes every word spoken, as if it were a movie playing out in his mind.
I had to come back and add this one pet peave. For a while, I suspected 'Jack' was JFK. As soon as the new doctor started calling him 'Mr. Presi.." (which I think should be written as "Mr. Presi--" to show an interuption, btw) I strongly suspected this would turn out to be the President of the United States... and the name Jack... well, you get my meaning. I'd rather he be called something different, only because the comparison is too easy. Stu, or Mike, or Mitt (LOL)... anything but Jack.
The best exchange is as follows...
â??You consider Santa Claus a lie?â??
â??Well, if you donâ??t, lady, maybe we should switch places.â??
Great stuff. Thanks for the great read, and I hope this helped.
Christian
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
Comment from Cindy Warren
I never really thought about it before, but I imagine sending people to places like Vietnam would mess with a president's mind. No wonder the imaginary president was a little nuts.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I never really thought about it before, but I imagine sending people to places like Vietnam would mess with a president's mind. No wonder the imaginary president was a little nuts.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Cindy. The pressures of office must be brutal. That's what I was after. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from mumsyone
I don't usually care for written flashbacks, but you've done a good job with this throughout. You made it sound very real.
At barely eleven-years-old (omit dashes in eleven years old)(,) Ricky Satriano was the youngest among us,
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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I don't usually care for written flashbacks, but you've done a good job with this throughout. You made it sound very real.
At barely eleven-years-old (omit dashes in eleven years old)(,) Ricky Satriano was the youngest among us,
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you, mumsyone. I tend to agree with you about flashbacks, but some stories require them. Thanks also for the spag alerts.
Peace, Lee
Comment from Mike Battaglia
You read something of mine recently and I always try and return the favor. That said...
Bravo! What an engaging story! The droll sarcasm in the dialogue was alone worth the read. On top of that you painted a brilliant mini-mystery with absorbing characters, as well as a more than worthy twist (Presi... You slap yourself for not figuring that one out before the reveal!)
Your flashbacks to the orchard memory are brimming with nostalgic boy's life imagery, and the contemptuous flirting of Jack's opinion of his shrinks is not only damn near laugh out loud funny (best line: "He also wondered if every patient routinely shrank his shrink.") but also a subtle clue that jack is "smarter than the average bear."
Conclusion: A solid as steel, thoroughly entertaining quasi-mystery, utterly satisfying in its delevery and reveal. Sparkling prose and addictively readable. I never comment on spags, but if there were any at all in here they were lost in my absorbtion of the story. Well done indeed.
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--11g (Mike)
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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You read something of mine recently and I always try and return the favor. That said...
Bravo! What an engaging story! The droll sarcasm in the dialogue was alone worth the read. On top of that you painted a brilliant mini-mystery with absorbing characters, as well as a more than worthy twist (Presi... You slap yourself for not figuring that one out before the reveal!)
Your flashbacks to the orchard memory are brimming with nostalgic boy's life imagery, and the contemptuous flirting of Jack's opinion of his shrinks is not only damn near laugh out loud funny (best line: "He also wondered if every patient routinely shrank his shrink.") but also a subtle clue that jack is "smarter than the average bear."
Conclusion: A solid as steel, thoroughly entertaining quasi-mystery, utterly satisfying in its delevery and reveal. Sparkling prose and addictively readable. I never comment on spags, but if there were any at all in here they were lost in my absorbtion of the story. Well done indeed.
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--11g (Mike)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Mike, for this careful, and thoughtful review. I really appreciate you mentioning the 'mystery' aspect of the story. I get the impression that some readers would have wished me to be more forthright. But where is the fun in that?
I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. It's been nice running into you. Peace, Lee