Who?
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Comment from Sis Cat
THIS IS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! The same muse that whispered inspiration to my mother and father also whispered inspiration to you. I am flabbergasted by the poem's similarity. There are so many points where your poem overlapped my parents':
Fluid energy sculpting Earth's graceful curves
Who consigned the chemistry of fireflies' glow?
I read your poem with my mouth open and with tears in my eyes. I am astounded.
This is what I am trying to explain in my story: that poems represent connection. I am trying to find how my parents where connected through poetry. I have a sixth sense to see and feel what others cannot see. We are connected through poetry.
Reading your poem is the high point of my month. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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THIS IS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! The same muse that whispered inspiration to my mother and father also whispered inspiration to you. I am flabbergasted by the poem's similarity. There are so many points where your poem overlapped my parents':
Fluid energy sculpting Earth's graceful curves
Who consigned the chemistry of fireflies' glow?
I read your poem with my mouth open and with tears in my eyes. I am astounded.
This is what I am trying to explain in my story: that poems represent connection. I am trying to find how my parents where connected through poetry. I have a sixth sense to see and feel what others cannot see. We are connected through poetry.
Reading your poem is the high point of my month. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Hi Sis Cat,
Oh my, I didn't expect this. Yes, your story chilled me when I read your Mom's poem. I was taken aback. My poem, originally was very very long. I had so much to say, but realized no one would read it. I believe it was also chosen for pom, but of course, never won. I didn't mean to make you cry. Thank you very much for your continued support of my work.. Jimi
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Wait until you see my father's poem "What is the Right Chemistry?" in the next chapter.
Comment from Xylok
Who hung the moon so you could dream
And sprinkled stars for you to wish upon
Who told the moon to move aside
For you to wake when dreaming's done
pretty
Who draped the sun in golden rays
To nourish life and give us light
Who told it once its place to stay
Where it best proves its might
profound
Who taught the birds to spread their wings
And soar to mountains far and bold
And with its wings inspired all men
To soar with dreams to heights untold
i love it. this poem is riveting!
Who poured the seas in vessels strong
With life teaming in fathom's deep
Who drew the line where shores belong
Where far rolling waves should only creep
lovely
Who consigned the chemistry of fireflies' glow?
WOW
Who painted the sunset in gilded hues
And commanded the seas to ebb and flow
In syncopated time, like dancing shoes
As man stands in awe of twilight's show
beautiful query
Who calibrated the expanse of heaven's sphere
nice
A precision so precise, its genius plan
That stars and planets all adhere
To their order in the universal span
awesome
Who filled the lungs for new birth's cry
As a mother empties her womb of this tiny soul
This creation of life that surely vies
The moment love bonded in ecstasy's glow
what a series of epic questions!
Who dressed the landscape in its rich wardrobe
nice
With textures and heights that vary in style
cool
And decided its fabric would be a living lode
As its cycle would change in each season's while
every stanza is like a poem in and of itself, yet they all unify together so wonderfully! this is great stuff.
Who gave the elephant its wisdom and grace
nice properties to mention, creative, well put.
Who supplanted the salmon's rhythm and race
love it!
Who coaxed the spider to weave a design
With the finest silk she could produce
As each minute cord perfectly aligns
A captivating vision that will call and seduce
rad! spiders rock!
Who designed the living cell with a factory inside
With instructions to follow step by step
lol well put
Constant and sure, as the messengers would glide
To the next place of assembly in life's prep
creative rhyme!
Who dusted the butterfly with mosaic tiles?
creative genius! brilliant, beautiful.
Who sowed the desire for man to conjure and create
Music, art, words, and all that entertains his muse
what a super question
Who gave me the insight to share this with you
It's neither a riddle, nor a puzzle, to answer: Who?
creative end, i love it, this poem is magnificent. i imagine most people will say God, the next most popular answer would be the universe, and then others would say no one at all. stuff just happens. me? i favor the answer God, but then to me, the universe is God, Creation is God, so it works for me either way. i love this poem. you express ancient quandaries with avalanche eloquence.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Who hung the moon so you could dream
And sprinkled stars for you to wish upon
Who told the moon to move aside
For you to wake when dreaming's done
pretty
Who draped the sun in golden rays
To nourish life and give us light
Who told it once its place to stay
Where it best proves its might
profound
Who taught the birds to spread their wings
And soar to mountains far and bold
And with its wings inspired all men
To soar with dreams to heights untold
i love it. this poem is riveting!
Who poured the seas in vessels strong
With life teaming in fathom's deep
Who drew the line where shores belong
Where far rolling waves should only creep
lovely
Who consigned the chemistry of fireflies' glow?
WOW
Who painted the sunset in gilded hues
And commanded the seas to ebb and flow
In syncopated time, like dancing shoes
As man stands in awe of twilight's show
beautiful query
Who calibrated the expanse of heaven's sphere
nice
A precision so precise, its genius plan
That stars and planets all adhere
To their order in the universal span
awesome
Who filled the lungs for new birth's cry
As a mother empties her womb of this tiny soul
This creation of life that surely vies
The moment love bonded in ecstasy's glow
what a series of epic questions!
Who dressed the landscape in its rich wardrobe
nice
With textures and heights that vary in style
cool
And decided its fabric would be a living lode
As its cycle would change in each season's while
every stanza is like a poem in and of itself, yet they all unify together so wonderfully! this is great stuff.
Who gave the elephant its wisdom and grace
nice properties to mention, creative, well put.
Who supplanted the salmon's rhythm and race
love it!
Who coaxed the spider to weave a design
With the finest silk she could produce
As each minute cord perfectly aligns
A captivating vision that will call and seduce
rad! spiders rock!
Who designed the living cell with a factory inside
With instructions to follow step by step
lol well put
Constant and sure, as the messengers would glide
To the next place of assembly in life's prep
creative rhyme!
Who dusted the butterfly with mosaic tiles?
creative genius! brilliant, beautiful.
Who sowed the desire for man to conjure and create
Music, art, words, and all that entertains his muse
what a super question
Who gave me the insight to share this with you
It's neither a riddle, nor a puzzle, to answer: Who?
creative end, i love it, this poem is magnificent. i imagine most people will say God, the next most popular answer would be the universe, and then others would say no one at all. stuff just happens. me? i favor the answer God, but then to me, the universe is God, Creation is God, so it works for me either way. i love this poem. you express ancient quandaries with avalanche eloquence.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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xylok, thank you my friend ever ever so much. I am truly humbled. I love it when you stop by. again thank you so very very much.
Comment from TammyGail
Oh jj this wow .... can't believe i never seen this ..this is what should win.. i hate my
poem they put in this contest ... its a bit
shitty but don't tell i said so :) best of luck.
sister you have vote :)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Oh jj this wow .... can't believe i never seen this ..this is what should win.. i hate my
poem they put in this contest ... its a bit
shitty but don't tell i said so :) best of luck.
sister you have vote :)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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you are so sweet and no yours was not shitty in the least bit!!! I will tell you though, the one who made the derogatory about the all the posts but you and Earl was uncalled for. He ruffled my feathers, most definitely for there were so many great great poets and poetesses in this contest. He was quite insulting. lol.. anyway friend, thank you ever so much. you are so sweet.
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I seen that too ... some of these people on here are ignorant bastards ....
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I am getting ready to start a thread about his comment. I am afraid it would discourage the newbies who have not ever been nominated before.. I will let you know..
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I'll jump on it with you
it was wrong and rude
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. It works without punctuation. The poem is one big question. Who?. Your poem speaks of the greatest wonders of nature. I don't care what you call who. We are all part of a greater thing. Great work.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It works without punctuation. The poem is one big question. Who?. Your poem speaks of the greatest wonders of nature. I don't care what you call who. We are all part of a greater thing. Great work.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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ellijean, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I did not realize how well received this work is. Again thank you ever so much.. jlsavell
Comment from Twomoon
my friend, this is glorious and so well written, it is beautiful and full of every lovly thing possible, your heart is so amazing and it spells the answer all over this work of art! good luck, xx twomoon
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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my friend, this is glorious and so well written, it is beautiful and full of every lovly thing possible, your heart is so amazing and it spells the answer all over this work of art! good luck, xx twomoon
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Twomoon, once again a big heartfelt thank you!!! I just logged on and wondered how you found these works since they are not promoted. Thank you for the review and the well wishes.... jlsavell
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not on so much anymore, but I like to check the voting booth and try to always check it out and vote! xx have a great day!
Comment from adewpearl
lovely use of abcb rhyme including proximate rhymes like upon/done
I like the parallel construction of your stanzas and the thoughtful questions you ask
good alliteration in phrases like dreaming's done
a wonderful litany of thoughtful illustrative examples
I love your closing to this beautiful poem of faith and appreciation for our Creator :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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lovely use of abcb rhyme including proximate rhymes like upon/done
I like the parallel construction of your stanzas and the thoughtful questions you ask
good alliteration in phrases like dreaming's done
a wonderful litany of thoughtful illustrative examples
I love your closing to this beautiful poem of faith and appreciation for our Creator :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Brooke, thank you very much for stopping by to read and review my offering. I appreciate you... jimi
Comment from Poetic Friend
Jimi, I wish I had fifty stars to give you for this poem. This is truly one of you best (if not the best). This poem will defintely be nominated as Poem of the Month.
Each stanza became better than the previous one. This poem has it all -- rich imagery, wisdom, personification, thought-provoking words, perfect meter/rhyme, original phrasing, mastering of word-wordweaving. This is a classic piece. Need I say more?
My favorite stanza is the one below. I am a butterfly lover.
Who dusted the butterfly with mosaic tiles?
After they wrestled from their safe cocoon
Who instilled the emotions that spill from a smile
Or tears from the eyes when life left too soon
I am bookcasing this one. I hope you don't mind.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Jimi, I wish I had fifty stars to give you for this poem. This is truly one of you best (if not the best). This poem will defintely be nominated as Poem of the Month.
Each stanza became better than the previous one. This poem has it all -- rich imagery, wisdom, personification, thought-provoking words, perfect meter/rhyme, original phrasing, mastering of word-wordweaving. This is a classic piece. Need I say more?
My favorite stanza is the one below. I am a butterfly lover.
Who dusted the butterfly with mosaic tiles?
After they wrestled from their safe cocoon
Who instilled the emotions that spill from a smile
Or tears from the eyes when life left too soon
I am bookcasing this one. I hope you don't mind.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Poetic Friend, once again a himbling review. I simply have no words to express my heartfelt appreciation for your support and wonderful encouragement of my endeavors.. a big thank you!!!!!! jimi
Comment from Hitcher
It was me, me, ME! I tell ya... Ok, ok, OK, maybe it wasn't me but it would have been, could have been, should have been BUT wasn't I know.
A Beautiful visually stunning piece of thought provoking poetic art Jimi, see ya in court :)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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It was me, me, ME! I tell ya... Ok, ok, OK, maybe it wasn't me but it would have been, could have been, should have been BUT wasn't I know.
A Beautiful visually stunning piece of thought provoking poetic art Jimi, see ya in court :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Hitcher, it was you!!!!! I'll be darn. I knew I liked you for some reason.. see me in court? oh yeah.. I am preparing a big case, would you care to be my assistant? I, also , think it is time to resurrect you know who... again thank you so much my wonderful friend. I will try to catch up to your port this week.. love you sir!!!!! Jimi
Comment from Arkine
Life's ultimate question I suppose, and one that people have fought over since they first started asking it. Although, I have to wonder if puzzling over it as some people do is really a good use of their time? Perhaps, they should just enjoy it. ;) Excellent job!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Life's ultimate question I suppose, and one that people have fought over since they first started asking it. Although, I have to wonder if puzzling over it as some people do is really a good use of their time? Perhaps, they should just enjoy it. ;) Excellent job!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Arkine, thank you so very much. I appreciate you so very much. I apologize for just returning with a thank you. Hope to catch up on reviewing this week.. again thank you so much... jimi
Comment from fictionwriter
I loved this. It really makes you think of all the wonderful little mysteries of life. If you consider how perfect everything is,you do wonder. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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I loved this. It really makes you think of all the wonderful little mysteries of life. If you consider how perfect everything is,you do wonder. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Joy, thank you ever so much. I love it when you stop in and I appreciate you very much.. jimi
