4 Green Clergy Angin On A Wall
Havoc at church as a new pastor is sought12 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
This was great. Congratulations, and its well deserved. It reminded me of when our congregation had visiting ministers come while searching for a new minister. Your story was funnier, and a leader who can be inclusive to all without going against the word is a blessing,
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This was great. Congratulations, and its well deserved. It reminded me of when our congregation had visiting ministers come while searching for a new minister. Your story was funnier, and a leader who can be inclusive to all without going against the word is a blessing,
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your very kind words ... I enjoyed writing the story, and appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from Charlene0513
This was hilarious. I especially enjoyed the preacher with the zipper problem.
You filled the page with everyday talk as well as incorporated four diversified individuals. Their quirks and the pandemonium that came from a church of countrified folk who really wasn't sure what they were looking for.
Nicely executed.
Charlene
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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This was hilarious. I especially enjoyed the preacher with the zipper problem.
You filled the page with everyday talk as well as incorporated four diversified individuals. Their quirks and the pandemonium that came from a church of countrified folk who really wasn't sure what they were looking for.
Nicely executed.
Charlene
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you very much for your kind words.
Comment from ann33
I think your story started off well with a clear set up of the premise. However, I felt it started to collapse in sections with a stream of events stated with some awkward sentences. I found myself re-reading some parts to understand better such as "The visitor's service...own food next time." Why the capital on 'visitor'and why did they rush over to Megan and where was she? Also there were some awkward sentences such as "Holding his new born ...joined them." The birth of the baby does not seem to fit into the context of the premise.I also think more attention could have been given to punctuation for easier reading.
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I think your story started off well with a clear set up of the premise. However, I felt it started to collapse in sections with a stream of events stated with some awkward sentences. I found myself re-reading some parts to understand better such as "The visitor's service...own food next time." Why the capital on 'visitor'and why did they rush over to Megan and where was she? Also there were some awkward sentences such as "Holding his new born ...joined them." The birth of the baby does not seem to fit into the context of the premise.I also think more attention could have been given to punctuation for easier reading.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from thestylus
The story is interesting. This piece has a light tone that it makes me smile. The start isn't a conventinal way plus the image used directly gives the reader an idea that this one is a light story.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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The story is interesting. This piece has a light tone that it makes me smile. The start isn't a conventinal way plus the image used directly gives the reader an idea that this one is a light story.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from Cornelius2000
What an absolutely delightful story, and I can certainly believe the author notes that some of the incidents are actually true. I'm especially taken with the story, as I too have done a story about a church looking for a new minister. If you'd like to check it out you can find it in my portfolio. Its title is "The Call." Unlike yours, it concentrates on one particular candidate (who doesn't quite make the grade).
I loved it that the last candidate in your story shocked everyone by asking if it was Ok that he was planning a sex-change. My kind of preacher.
I have two brothers-in-law and a son-in-law who are preachers, and my college roommate became one too, so I know that they're all just plain guys who have devoted themselves to doing good.
Congratulations on a fine story.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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What an absolutely delightful story, and I can certainly believe the author notes that some of the incidents are actually true. I'm especially taken with the story, as I too have done a story about a church looking for a new minister. If you'd like to check it out you can find it in my portfolio. Its title is "The Call." Unlike yours, it concentrates on one particular candidate (who doesn't quite make the grade).
I loved it that the last candidate in your story shocked everyone by asking if it was Ok that he was planning a sex-change. My kind of preacher.
I have two brothers-in-law and a son-in-law who are preachers, and my college roommate became one too, so I know that they're all just plain guys who have devoted themselves to doing good.
Congratulations on a fine story.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your kind comments. Most of my life I have spent leading churches, so have seen quite a few strange things!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a delightful story, so unexpected. I've never read anytyhing with this theme. It rings true in many places, so it's clear that some of this did happen. Good job!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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What a delightful story, so unexpected. I've never read anytyhing with this theme. It rings true in many places, so it's clear that some of this did happen. Good job!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you very much for your kind words. It is always encouraging to get such reviews.
Comment from seren james
This story is very enjoyable. It is well written describing all that happens in a church with lots of humour added. You have told a very good story. Good contest entry.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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This story is very enjoyable. It is well written describing all that happens in a church with lots of humour added. You have told a very good story. Good contest entry.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the kind comments.
Comment from Elaine E
Hi, A nicely written story. It flowed well and I liked the fact that there were several characters to follow. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Hi, A nicely written story. It flowed well and I liked the fact that there were several characters to follow. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from MadameSparkle
This piece is very funny and well written. You have taken pains with the planning so it reads smoothly and I found myself giggling all the way through.
A lovely piece of humourous satire. Love the English humour.
Good luck with the competition.
Sparkles
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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This piece is very funny and well written. You have taken pains with the planning so it reads smoothly and I found myself giggling all the way through.
A lovely piece of humourous satire. Love the English humour.
Good luck with the competition.
Sparkles
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your kind words
Comment from Jean Lutz
Believable. I was hoping to read the comments of your others reviewers. Darn blind contests! Hasn't this site learned that Transparency is in? This is a winner with me!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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Believable. I was hoping to read the comments of your others reviewers. Darn blind contests! Hasn't this site learned that Transparency is in? This is a winner with me!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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Thank you very much for your kind comments.