A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
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Comment from Gungalo
I like this Bic. You seem to build to a crescendo of falling bricks to replace with new. The old soul now had protection from Jesus.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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I like this Bic. You seem to build to a crescendo of falling bricks to replace with new. The old soul now had protection from Jesus.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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You got it ...G...
Sometimes the bricks fall hard sometimes soft but they do fall, for some anyway...
Much appreciated my friend,
will read more when I can,
Enjoy.
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My pleasure Bic.
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Anytime...
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Sahweeeeeeeeeeeet.
Comment from MikoAmaya
Wow. That ending was really unexpected. This poem was great, especially since it was free verse. Great job and thanks so much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Wow. That ending was really unexpected. This poem was great, especially since it was free verse. Great job and thanks so much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Glad you can see it for what it is...
Comment from P. G. Simpkins
Hello, great presentation and theme! I love the depth you paint in your words, it is written in a unique style, you seem to have a mature poetic voice. It kept my interest through to the finish. : )
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Hello, great presentation and theme! I love the depth you paint in your words, it is written in a unique style, you seem to have a mature poetic voice. It kept my interest through to the finish. : )
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Excellent thanks for the review...this is free verse as I have it.
Comment from Onixxiya
I love the story here and the fact that old soul remains not pinned down to a name of an individual.
I am not sure i understand the structure though - is it in a formal structure? If so and you can share I would be thrilled as I am trying to learn some more about poetry forms.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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I love the story here and the fact that old soul remains not pinned down to a name of an individual.
I am not sure i understand the structure though - is it in a formal structure? If so and you can share I would be thrilled as I am trying to learn some more about poetry forms.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Will pop round for a visit...
Comment from Titanx9
You did a wonderful job, explaining how redemptive God's love is. It is definitely a choice one makes whether to follow Christ or the other bad one. You've devised a road map here that's plain to see for all those who choose the former. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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You did a wonderful job, explaining how redemptive God's love is. It is definitely a choice one makes whether to follow Christ or the other bad one. You've devised a road map here that's plain to see for all those who choose the former. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Excellent review T, many thanks...
Comment from misscookie
Aman, amen
9i love this poem very much
Your words so many of the readers can relate.
You had my attention all the way.
Thank God for His Mercy and His grace.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Aman, amen
9i love this poem very much
Your words so many of the readers can relate.
You had my attention all the way.
Thank God for His Mercy and His grace.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thanks misscookie always a pleasure...
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Your very welcome, until next time.
Comment from Oldsteamer
Thank you for this.
You could be describing me.
It is nothing but grace that has been bestowed me.
Poor old soul.
Poor in spirit.
Nice work.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for this.
You could be describing me.
It is nothing but grace that has been bestowed me.
Poor old soul.
Poor in spirit.
Nice work.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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You got it...and me also !
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Bic,
Most of this poem seems so bleak and I wondered if poor old soul would find his way. You have an uplifting ending which made me go back and read the poem again. I found it to be touching and evocative. This is a six star poem if only I had one. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Hi Bic,
Most of this poem seems so bleak and I wondered if poor old soul would find his way. You have an uplifting ending which made me go back and read the poem again. I found it to be touching and evocative. This is a six star poem if only I had one. Well done....chey
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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No worries, chey, sentiment shared, it does grow on you...I hope...
Comment from hari anand
Hi, this poem reminds me of a famous quote' respect yourself and you'll be respected'...I feel no soul is poor in this world if it knows it's worth....as I read somewhere 'people will treat you the way you want them to treat you, never settle for less than respect.....' I am touched excellent.....
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Hi, this poem reminds me of a famous quote' respect yourself and you'll be respected'...I feel no soul is poor in this world if it knows it's worth....as I read somewhere 'people will treat you the way you want them to treat you, never settle for less than respect.....' I am touched excellent.....
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Well sometimes that respect has to be earned, my friend....
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Very true... Thanks
Comment from Opal H.
This is such meaningful poetry. The beautiful story of a lost soul finding its way to happiness. If you can thnk of another way of describing the soul then "poor old soul", which sounds kind of comic (not suitable for this serious poem), especially repeated so many times. Just my opinion.
Very well written poem with a touching concept.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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This is such meaningful poetry. The beautiful story of a lost soul finding its way to happiness. If you can thnk of another way of describing the soul then "poor old soul", which sounds kind of comic (not suitable for this serious poem), especially repeated so many times. Just my opinion.
Very well written poem with a touching concept.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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"poor" in his condition:
"old" in his time of unrepentance:
"Soul" because thats what he is:
many thanks,
Bic.
