The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 92 "The Rescue: ch 92"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
4 total reviews
Comment from mandieleigh81
Still loving this piece starting to get in with the flow of the story and getting a better understanding of what's going on.
I did notice in the first paragraph your time is put in nex1.05 & 7.20 ...
Instead of a 21:05 and 7:20
In paragraph 5 there was a typo for 'Feck' I'm assuming meaning was 'heck'.
Overall cannot wait til the next page. :)
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Still loving this piece starting to get in with the flow of the story and getting a better understanding of what's going on.
I did notice in the first paragraph your time is put in nex1.05 & 7.20 ...
Instead of a 21:05 and 7:20
In paragraph 5 there was a typo for 'Feck' I'm assuming meaning was 'heck'.
Overall cannot wait til the next page. :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. The "feck" is an Irish swear word.
Comment from bowls
A great chapter - exciting and suspenseful, but I must admit I'm confused (not an unusual state for me). I thought, at the end of the previous chapter Sean was headed to Cork. In this chapter Sean and the narrator are on a plane to Cebu and then Sean is at home and goes to talk to the narrator who is eating breakfast at home. Am I missing some time cues? I can't figure out the time (or place) sequence.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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A great chapter - exciting and suspenseful, but I must admit I'm confused (not an unusual state for me). I thought, at the end of the previous chapter Sean was headed to Cork. In this chapter Sean and the narrator are on a plane to Cebu and then Sean is at home and goes to talk to the narrator who is eating breakfast at home. Am I missing some time cues? I can't figure out the time (or place) sequence.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your helpful review. I have added a few phrases to try to help the Timeline. Maybe it is a mistake to start the chapter on Tuesday and then flash-back, I will look again when I get back from looking after grand-son. I shant post till the weekend, so enjoy the break from The Eden Tree!
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Well that was compelling and then I was left without a conclusion. Tell me this has another piece coming attached. I loved it. Great tense read.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Well that was compelling and then I was left without a conclusion. Tell me this has another piece coming attached. I loved it. Great tense read.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your kind words. There are chapters to follow, but I am afraid that I am gonna be looking after my grand-son for a few days, so you may be kept waiting...sorry.
Comment from TammyGail
Excellent work once again vigournet
well written and expressed throughout
and indeed gave more insight after reading
your last chapter thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Excellent work once again vigournet
well written and expressed throughout
and indeed gave more insight after reading
your last chapter thanks for sharing
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated.