Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from #1GRANDMA
How wonderful you can write. Your poems always touch my soul. Weather its funny or sad. Happy or silly. you always give me a lift. Oh yes & I like this pictrue of you better. It shows the IMP in you (LOL)
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How wonderful you can write. Your poems always touch my soul. Weather its funny or sad. Happy or silly. you always give me a lift. Oh yes & I like this pictrue of you better. It shows the IMP in you (LOL)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2005
Comment from Jaxson Phoenix
I kinda prefer fantasy myself, Reality blows!(LOL)
Another great work my friend. I did find one area that made me stumble just a bit,
an empty promise will not hold true,
when in the end don't see you through.
Perhaps it is me, but I just do not understand this stanza. Keep up the good work.
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I kinda prefer fantasy myself, Reality blows!(LOL)
Another great work my friend. I did find one area that made me stumble just a bit,
an empty promise will not hold true,
when in the end don't see you through.
Perhaps it is me, but I just do not understand this stanza. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2005
Comment from spades1
Thanks for sharing, that last stanza was great but then they all were. This was a very nice poem and I agree with your authors note totally but if only love could be like a romance novel, huh? As always your imagery was well recieved and the flow was wonderful, I am sure I will read this one again. Thanks again.
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Thanks for sharing, that last stanza was great but then they all were. This was a very nice poem and I agree with your authors note totally but if only love could be like a romance novel, huh? As always your imagery was well recieved and the flow was wonderful, I am sure I will read this one again. Thanks again.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2005
Comment from made2soar
That wonderful question between reality and fantasy. Fantasy is ok as long as you are living in the real world. Dreams are needed as long as you are being honest about dealing with the real you. You said it all very well. Jim
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That wonderful question between reality and fantasy. Fantasy is ok as long as you are living in the real world. Dreams are needed as long as you are being honest about dealing with the real you. You said it all very well. Jim
Comment Written 09-Mar-2005
Comment from Graceheart
This is so very touching and true! In the end the reality of holding a hand sure beats the heck out of a hundred fantasies about love! I as a romantic soul truely miss those little things, the looks, the smiles, the touches and laughter together! I dream about my true love daily, but nothing can compare with the real Her, having Her close for always! You are right on the money with aesome piece of gritty writing! Loved it and hated it! Bravo Jj!
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This is so very touching and true! In the end the reality of holding a hand sure beats the heck out of a hundred fantasies about love! I as a romantic soul truely miss those little things, the looks, the smiles, the touches and laughter together! I dream about my true love daily, but nothing can compare with the real Her, having Her close for always! You are right on the money with aesome piece of gritty writing! Loved it and hated it! Bravo Jj!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2005
Comment from Mastery
As usual, very clear, thoughtful, and emotionally charged poetry from you. " an empty promise will not hold true" "cannot mend a hurting heart" Good stuff all. Mastery/Bob
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As usual, very clear, thoughtful, and emotionally charged poetry from you. " an empty promise will not hold true" "cannot mend a hurting heart" Good stuff all. Mastery/Bob
Comment Written 08-Mar-2005
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Reality is reality and the truth, if not acknowledged will eventually bite you hard on the ass.
Words however poetic can never paste over the cracks. You always need to open up deep inside yourself to know if you truly understand youself and others, Is it really love or a fantsay i think i remember reading in a book.
At the end of the day, if you are fooling youself then you must be fooling others and then can never be worth it.
Good poem Jewell, as you say, read my poems and then you start to understand more of who i am.
Didn't you like my last poem, to be honest i didn't like to have written it. As you i can only write what in my heart at the time. Was great to get it out of my system. Tis odd what lurks in the back of your mind. can't believe i even posted it.
All the best peter
P.S was this poem a tribute to someone!!
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Reality is reality and the truth, if not acknowledged will eventually bite you hard on the ass.
Words however poetic can never paste over the cracks. You always need to open up deep inside yourself to know if you truly understand youself and others, Is it really love or a fantsay i think i remember reading in a book.
At the end of the day, if you are fooling youself then you must be fooling others and then can never be worth it.
Good poem Jewell, as you say, read my poems and then you start to understand more of who i am.
Didn't you like my last poem, to be honest i didn't like to have written it. As you i can only write what in my heart at the time. Was great to get it out of my system. Tis odd what lurks in the back of your mind. can't believe i even posted it.
All the best peter
P.S was this poem a tribute to someone!!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2005
Comment from sengwriter
I don't know how to take your poem, sometimes it's a stroke of stern reality to break your dream and your world of fantasy, while sometimes it is an appeal for having belief in possibilities which to me is a sort of a dream especially when one is in dire distress- possibilities for betterment is nothing but dreaming but one thing is very positive about it is that you impress others who are hopeless with a strong message at the end. Seek for someone who is practical, as of now what I'm in need of.
I will look for this courage of yours in your future ventures, I'm sure a poet often surrenders to fantasy to satiate his or her urge for expressing.
I still would rate this poem one of your all time best. All the best. Take care :)
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I don't know how to take your poem, sometimes it's a stroke of stern reality to break your dream and your world of fantasy, while sometimes it is an appeal for having belief in possibilities which to me is a sort of a dream especially when one is in dire distress- possibilities for betterment is nothing but dreaming but one thing is very positive about it is that you impress others who are hopeless with a strong message at the end. Seek for someone who is practical, as of now what I'm in need of.
I will look for this courage of yours in your future ventures, I'm sure a poet often surrenders to fantasy to satiate his or her urge for expressing.
I still would rate this poem one of your all time best. All the best. Take care :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2005
Comment from Cosette
Very strong rhyme schemes through out even if the line lengths are a tad off for a rigidly structured aabb verse. One possible improvement would be to change the word (don't) to (won't) in S2L4. Both the words (promise) and (end) are singular so would call for the word to be (doesn't). (Doesn't) doesn't sound as nice to me within the verse as (won't. ) Lovely sentiments in this one.
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Very strong rhyme schemes through out even if the line lengths are a tad off for a rigidly structured aabb verse. One possible improvement would be to change the word (don't) to (won't) in S2L4. Both the words (promise) and (end) are singular so would call for the word to be (doesn't). (Doesn't) doesn't sound as nice to me within the verse as (won't. ) Lovely sentiments in this one.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2005
Comment from Kingsland
this poem is top notch
how many stars can i give **************************
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well five is just not enough
you have everything right in this poem
and i love the message
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count them stars
you deserve everyone of them
********************************John
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this poem is top notch
how many stars can i give **************************
******************************
well five is just not enough
you have everything right in this poem
and i love the message
******************************
count them stars
you deserve everyone of them
********************************John
Comment Written 08-Mar-2005