The Eden Tree
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Comment from mshirachot
Peter! Excellent "snap shot" descriptions. Those who have read and loved LOTR (and Brad Pitt LOL) will enjoy this chapter immensely with all those tidbits. Good work. No SPAG reports this time!
Thanks as alwasy for sharing!
Marsha
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Peter! Excellent "snap shot" descriptions. Those who have read and loved LOTR (and Brad Pitt LOL) will enjoy this chapter immensely with all those tidbits. Good work. No SPAG reports this time!
Thanks as alwasy for sharing!
Marsha
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2012
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Marsha...Thanks for your kind words and encouragement!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Exceptional description in this one, and my favorite line of the chapters I've read so far - after your wonderful description, it took me by complete surprise (and delight!)-MORE OF THIS PLEASE :) - "Liz pointed her wand at me..." It's my opinion that these little gems in our stories add warmth and are of universal appeal - it might not be Brad Pitt in other parts of the world, but it certainly exists in every woman's fantasy. And the fact that it was dialogue lends even more impact - it 's personal and compelling, easier for a reader to identify with, agree? Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Exceptional description in this one, and my favorite line of the chapters I've read so far - after your wonderful description, it took me by complete surprise (and delight!)-MORE OF THIS PLEASE :) - "Liz pointed her wand at me..." It's my opinion that these little gems in our stories add warmth and are of universal appeal - it might not be Brad Pitt in other parts of the world, but it certainly exists in every woman's fantasy. And the fact that it was dialogue lends even more impact - it 's personal and compelling, easier for a reader to identify with, agree? Great job!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your very kind encouragement.
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My pleasure.
Comment from THEHISTORYMAKER
Sorry I feel the story was too fast and did not go into enough detail about characters. I felt if it was a camera, it would be dashing about with one second shots of everything and nothing would be in focus. In the end you understand the story but nothing is memorable. But that only my view point, so do not take it to heart. I am no expert.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Sorry I feel the story was too fast and did not go into enough detail about characters. I felt if it was a camera, it would be dashing about with one second shots of everything and nothing would be in focus. In the end you understand the story but nothing is memorable. But that only my view point, so do not take it to heart. I am no expert.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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I am sorry that many of the descriptions are "snap-shots", but my readers know the main characters and I didnt want to major on new ones. I do, however, appreciate your comment and will think hard about it at my final revision.
Comment from Meta~Mark
wow..this is sort of like Lord of the Rings meets wedding planner meets disco nights..A finely written story where the dialogue is very entertaining!
EXCELLENT JOB!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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wow..this is sort of like Lord of the Rings meets wedding planner meets disco nights..A finely written story where the dialogue is very entertaining!
EXCELLENT JOB!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Haha, yes you are right! Thanks for your kind and great review.
Comment from bowls
This is a chapter rich in description. It's a nice change of pace from the earlier action. I'm afraid you've mis-spelled "canvas" once again (second last paragraph). In the previous chapter I forgot to mention you didn't capitalize Queen in God Save the Queen. Great party!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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This is a chapter rich in description. It's a nice change of pace from the earlier action. I'm afraid you've mis-spelled "canvas" once again (second last paragraph). In the previous chapter I forgot to mention you didn't capitalize Queen in God Save the Queen. Great party!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Thanks once more for your kind words. I will amend as your advice, and have now inserted the missing chapter at the start of 87 where it should be!