Andalusia
A Lachesis23 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely 'Spanish' poem! It is fiesta time here now, so we have dances and castanets and lots of sangria for the next few weeks. Your poem puts it all down nicely. Lovely swaying lyrical movement in the words, beautiful.xsx
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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What a lovely 'Spanish' poem! It is fiesta time here now, so we have dances and castanets and lots of sangria for the next few weeks. Your poem puts it all down nicely. Lovely swaying lyrical movement in the words, beautiful.xsx
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hello
Thank you very much for these kind words - I find them encouraging.
I wish you well
cheers
phill
Comment from elliejean
I love the poem. I think it would make a good song. I love the way you described the passion of the sex act. Not once did you mention sex, but it was very erotic, Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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I love the poem. I think it would make a good song. I love the way you described the passion of the sex act. Not once did you mention sex, but it was very erotic, Great work.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hello there
I am pleased you enjoyed the piece - thanks for the kind review.
I wish you well
phill
Comment from me_tudor
Wow, that is a great poem. You made love making into a beautiful art with your words. You have created a vision with your words that brings to mind beautiful images. Great job!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Wow, that is a great poem. You made love making into a beautiful art with your words. You have created a vision with your words that brings to mind beautiful images. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hello
Thank you for the kind review - I am encouraged that you enjoyed the piece.
I wish you well with your own writing.
Cheers
phill
Comment from Twomoon
Wow, this had me going, Phil, a beautiful write. One could dance with the the passion of this powerful write. I love the breeze and the olive trees, the ripples a tease and then the sleeping seas, just beautiful! xx twomoon..good luck
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Wow, this had me going, Phil, a beautiful write. One could dance with the the passion of this powerful write. I love the breeze and the olive trees, the ripples a tease and then the sleeping seas, just beautiful! xx twomoon..good luck
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hello there
I thank you for your very generous and kind review. It is encouraging that you connected to the writing.
I wish you well with your own endeavours.
Again, many thanks
phill
Comment from Ricky1024
Adjective Content-******
Color, color, color, these
Adjectives paint that mural so
deeply as hue penetrates the early
morning dew.
Flow-******
Nice and robust.
Grammar-******
Important but more on objectionably
and heart with a dash of soul of course.
Excellent.
Pronounceable-******
Coherent, no rantings, just puerility
{a Word?}
Pronounceable-
Stars here are for lesser, learning,
young, poets.
Good job.
Objective Content-******
You blend the insect with the Human well.
On a copulation level of 1-100,
YOu sir, have attained a 100.
Synopsis-******
I gave this piece a six based mainly on
the stirring of a human beings feelings
to mate.
I liked your choice of words.
I could re-write but I doubt that I could
attain your level of sustenance.
Completely spoctologically logically,
spoctological.
{A little trek to encourage].
Keep it coming I'm Hungry Phil.
Ricky 1024{Rich.}
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Adjective Content-******
Color, color, color, these
Adjectives paint that mural so
deeply as hue penetrates the early
morning dew.
Flow-******
Nice and robust.
Grammar-******
Important but more on objectionably
and heart with a dash of soul of course.
Excellent.
Pronounceable-******
Coherent, no rantings, just puerility
{a Word?}
Pronounceable-
Stars here are for lesser, learning,
young, poets.
Good job.
Objective Content-******
You blend the insect with the Human well.
On a copulation level of 1-100,
YOu sir, have attained a 100.
Synopsis-******
I gave this piece a six based mainly on
the stirring of a human beings feelings
to mate.
I liked your choice of words.
I could re-write but I doubt that I could
attain your level of sustenance.
Completely spoctologically logically,
spoctological.
{A little trek to encourage].
Keep it coming I'm Hungry Phil.
Ricky 1024{Rich.}
Comment Written 01-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Hello
Well, well.
I am not sure if 'puerility' might not be read as a derivative of 'puerile'!
Seriously, I thank you for reading the piece with obvious attention to detail - despite the small reward for so doing.
I thank you warmly for the encouragement and I wish you well
cheers
phill
Comment from Lobengula
Oh, what a treat! Another piece from the Master. Do I understand the poem? Yes. Do I understand the technicalities? No! It's quite simply brilliant. Very well done indeed.
Every good wish, Mike
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Oh, what a treat! Another piece from the Master. Do I understand the poem? Yes. Do I understand the technicalities? No! It's quite simply brilliant. Very well done indeed.
Every good wish, Mike
Comment Written 31-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Hello Mike
You are very kind.
I am glad you enjoyed the piece - it is not that technical to be honest and I would encourage you to look at the format for your own work, which I also enjoy.
I wish you well with your week and your writing
Cheers
phill
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Not that technical for you, but it's something I must really put more work into
Every good wish, Mike
Comment from Ure Connection
Thank you that you did not hinder the imagination by adding a picture. This is a treat when a poet allows the images to flow from the reader. Thank you.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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Thank you that you did not hinder the imagination by adding a picture. This is a treat when a poet allows the images to flow from the reader. Thank you.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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Hello
Good - I feel the same way too.
I thank you for your kind review and I wish you well
Cheers
phill
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
phill, I am partial to the culture, music and dance of Spain, and I feel like you captured it so perfectly with the subtle images, colors and sounds of that culture. I loved the style of this verse as well. Holly
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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phill, I am partial to the culture, music and dance of Spain, and I feel like you captured it so perfectly with the subtle images, colors and sounds of that culture. I loved the style of this verse as well. Holly
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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Hello Holly
You are very, very kind and I thank you for your review.
I will retaliate once my stars recharge!
phill
Comment from Peter Mansson
Hi Phil,I am again in awe of your technical prowess, and your painstaking commitment to achieving perfection. You have captured the passion and sensuality of the Spanish dance so well, with images like "her red, his black-their honeyed lust" and "his torso twists in arch and swerve". Well done, and a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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Hi Phil,I am again in awe of your technical prowess, and your painstaking commitment to achieving perfection. You have captured the passion and sensuality of the Spanish dance so well, with images like "her red, his black-their honeyed lust" and "his torso twists in arch and swerve". Well done, and a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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Hello Peter
I value your opinion and I thank you for the review
I wish you well with your own writing
Cheers
phill
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery and descripitve scheme.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery and descripitve scheme.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2012
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Hello there
Thanks for the review
Much appreciated
Cheers
phill
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You're welcome, Phill. Charlie
