The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Jerusalem, Israel"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
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Comment from bowls
My goodness! This is getting really exciting! You've raised many questions here - who is it? why? will he be caught in time? I also enjoyed reading about the background of the dog.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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My goodness! This is getting really exciting! You've raised many questions here - who is it? why? will he be caught in time? I also enjoyed reading about the background of the dog.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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thanks for your faithful reading and kind comments
Comment from mshirachot
Reading and reviewing your work is revealing some things to me. I really LIKE the action chapters, more than the one that are more subdued! Funny thing for me to realize as a accountant-type female. I guess inside is the heart of a woman who would have been in the IDF if she had opportunity.
Your action chapters really are great!
This line here: "which was a boys-only school when I passed my 11+ and attended." seems a little repetitive...might be better to say, "which was a boys-only school I attended when I passed my 11+). But then this might be one of those differences between British English and American English. So, disregard if that is the case!
Blessings!
Marsha
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Reading and reviewing your work is revealing some things to me. I really LIKE the action chapters, more than the one that are more subdued! Funny thing for me to realize as a accountant-type female. I guess inside is the heart of a woman who would have been in the IDF if she had opportunity.
Your action chapters really are great!
This line here: "which was a boys-only school when I passed my 11+ and attended." seems a little repetitive...might be better to say, "which was a boys-only school I attended when I passed my 11+). But then this might be one of those differences between British English and American English. So, disregard if that is the case!
Blessings!
Marsha
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your continuing support. I am glad that the story still has your interest. I also appreciate your advice, and have changed the sentence you suggested.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Of course you know I'm going to tell you I liked the part about the dogs again - honestly though, this time it's not really the dogs, it's the action, the suspense! But I'm getting ahead of myself, let's back up a moment -there's plenty more before we get to that paragraph, and one IS the touching paragraph about Aunty ( the second) and Wesley - and then there are the gems: the revelations about James being forced to eat a bar of soap, his jump into a pond after a duck (and the hero's lack of knowledge about those incidents - makes one wonder what he's thinking, what he might have done had he known - great reader-involvement); the bride's shoe dropping as Goliath lifts her - these are the things that make it so real, so vivid. I loved this chapter, and I adore the ending description and suspense to lead into the next chapter. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Of course you know I'm going to tell you I liked the part about the dogs again - honestly though, this time it's not really the dogs, it's the action, the suspense! But I'm getting ahead of myself, let's back up a moment -there's plenty more before we get to that paragraph, and one IS the touching paragraph about Aunty ( the second) and Wesley - and then there are the gems: the revelations about James being forced to eat a bar of soap, his jump into a pond after a duck (and the hero's lack of knowledge about those incidents - makes one wonder what he's thinking, what he might have done had he known - great reader-involvement); the bride's shoe dropping as Goliath lifts her - these are the things that make it so real, so vivid. I loved this chapter, and I adore the ending description and suspense to lead into the next chapter. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you sooooo much for your kind words. I am really touched by your comment.
Comment from joseyphina
A very nice read. Written in simple language and setting. The narration as well as the description are good and very enjoyable. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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A very nice read. Written in simple language and setting. The narration as well as the description are good and very enjoyable. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much for your kind words!