Comment from bowls

Excellent

Glad you allowed the wedding to be completed. Of course, you've further built up suspense about the identity of those two strangers, especially since one is armed. Excellent way to close this chapter with all the questions looming in your readers' minds.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012

Thank you for your comment. The next chapter may be a shocker!

Comment from marchapril

Good

This is well written. It felt as though I were reading a novel. The imagery and tone in the 1st paragraph is excellent. I like that you stay focused on the 2 men throughout. I wondered about them and will look forward to seeing what they're up to. The 3rd and 4th paragraphs could use a little work grammatically.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012

Thanks for your encouragement. I have made some brief changes, and will take a look at my final revision.

Comment from ScarletClearwater

Excellent

Thank you for keeping the chapters short for reviewing.
Blinding flashed - Doesn't make sense. This was all I found though. Good write. Easy read.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012

Thanks for your review, and well-spotted, I had missed "cameras"...