The Eden Tree
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Comment from bowls
What an exciting ending to the chapter! It reminded me of something from Jane Eyre. You KNOW this will have our readers turning the pages to find out WHO and WHY. I have to admit I was confused by the shifting of the names back and forth ALY and ELY. Am I missing something here? Once again, you go back and tie up an earlier occurrence - the bet.Nicely done there. Should it be a bunch of "posies" rather than "poses"?I think all the words of a hymn title should be capitalized (The Lord's My Shepherd).In the third paragraph from the end "Wickham's" should be "Wickhams'".
Everyone loves a wedding and you've done an excellent job of describing this one.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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What an exciting ending to the chapter! It reminded me of something from Jane Eyre. You KNOW this will have our readers turning the pages to find out WHO and WHY. I have to admit I was confused by the shifting of the names back and forth ALY and ELY. Am I missing something here? Once again, you go back and tie up an earlier occurrence - the bet.Nicely done there. Should it be a bunch of "posies" rather than "poses"?I think all the words of a hymn title should be capitalized (The Lord's My Shepherd).In the third paragraph from the end "Wickham's" should be "Wickhams'".
Everyone loves a wedding and you've done an excellent job of describing this one.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much for your ever-diligent comment. Well-spotted about Ely, I had missed that!
Comment from pendle65
I never would have thought that a chapter of a novel with so little dialogue, and thus so much narrative summary as yours could be so engaging but it was. I enjoyed the omniscient narrator's voice, it's professional quality as well as a strong degree of equanimity. The sentences flowed well too.
Good luck with this,
Ron
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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I never would have thought that a chapter of a novel with so little dialogue, and thus so much narrative summary as yours could be so engaging but it was. I enjoyed the omniscient narrator's voice, it's professional quality as well as a strong degree of equanimity. The sentences flowed well too.
Good luck with this,
Ron
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your kind comment. Posts are smaller on FS, I am revising my novel atm, so when its ready for publishing it will have longer, diverse chapters I hope.
Comment from Gargantuan2
Well, my sister had a 'Bikers' Wedding' so I have seen some different ones too. The story still carries well, keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing the 'interruption' in the next chapter.. hehe
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Well, my sister had a 'Bikers' Wedding' so I have seen some different ones too. The story still carries well, keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing the 'interruption' in the next chapter.. hehe
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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thanks for your encouraging words