The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Colleen comes to stay"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
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Comment from bowls
A very informative chapter. I was especially moved by the child's poem. I did love Lorna Doone when we read it in first year high school. I think, too, I'd like to pick it up and read it once more. Great description of the tram ride!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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A very informative chapter. I was especially moved by the child's poem. I did love Lorna Doone when we read it in first year high school. I think, too, I'd like to pick it up and read it once more. Great description of the tram ride!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your kind words. I was touched by the poem too, the Lynmouth flood affected many families...the museum there has graphic details and photos
Comment from TammyGail
vigournet you were right about this picking up the pace indeed it did and a bit more descriptive details throughout.. Loved your closing as well.. Thanks for sharing always a pleasure
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
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vigournet you were right about this picking up the pace indeed it did and a bit more descriptive details throughout.. Loved your closing as well.. Thanks for sharing always a pleasure
Comment Written 21-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your encouraging words.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Have I the audacity to try to rate this? Regardless of whether you are staying with this as it's written or revising it, as you mentioned you were doing with some of the chapters now, I think it works beautifully. I was a little confused by the start of the second paragraph but it made sense immediately as I read on -that was a bit jarring, so if it were me, I would put the title of the book in semi-quotes, but you might know better than I - fine piece of writing (again); characters easy to identify with and plot's believable. Great work.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
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Have I the audacity to try to rate this? Regardless of whether you are staying with this as it's written or revising it, as you mentioned you were doing with some of the chapters now, I think it works beautifully. I was a little confused by the start of the second paragraph but it made sense immediately as I read on -that was a bit jarring, so if it were me, I would put the title of the book in semi-quotes, but you might know better than I - fine piece of writing (again); characters easy to identify with and plot's believable. Great work.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your kind and always encouraging words. I have amended the second paragraph, as you suggested.
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It was my pleasure.