The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Grandmother Shows Her Stuborn Side"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Alaskastory
'Grandmother Shows Her Stuborn Side' is a chapter that points out something new to concern James, his grandmother's odd attitude. You make readers suspect somethng wierd from her will happen. We are all anxious to know what it will be, Sasha. Good chapter! Marie
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012
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'Grandmother Shows Her Stuborn Side' is a chapter that points out something new to concern James, his grandmother's odd attitude. You make readers suspect somethng wierd from her will happen. We are all anxious to know what it will be, Sasha. Good chapter! Marie
Comment Written 20-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012
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Yes, Grandmother's behavior is causing considerable concern. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from cabinwriter
This is a powerful passage from your story. It reveals a lot about your characters, as well as move the plot along. The voices are strong and defining.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
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This is a powerful passage from your story. It reveals a lot about your characters, as well as move the plot along. The voices are strong and defining.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Veronica Grace
An enjoyable and well written chapter that drags the reader in with every word. Interesting characters and dialogue. I saw nothing to change or crit.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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An enjoyable and well written chapter that drags the reader in with every word. Interesting characters and dialogue. I saw nothing to change or crit.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Joan E.
I liked James' explanation of why his father went back for the journal and agree with his conclusion that the trial will be short. Grandmother's surprising comments add tension to the story. This is a good stand alone chapter. -Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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I liked James' explanation of why his father went back for the journal and agree with his conclusion that the trial will be short. Grandmother's surprising comments add tension to the story. This is a good stand alone chapter. -Joan
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much. We are almost at the end. Now James just has to figure out what Grandmother is up to. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from rtobaygo
SMOOTH WORD FLOW. WELL WRITING GOOD INTERACTION BETWEEN CHARACTERS DECENT. GOOD BALANCE BETWEEN SHOWING AND TELLING AND YOU LEFT THE READER WITH A SMALL MYSTERY; GRANDMOTHER'S POWER OVER DAD.
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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SMOOTH WORD FLOW. WELL WRITING GOOD INTERACTION BETWEEN CHARACTERS DECENT. GOOD BALANCE BETWEEN SHOWING AND TELLING AND YOU LEFT THE READER WITH A SMALL MYSTERY; GRANDMOTHER'S POWER OVER DAD.
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Grandmother is full of surprises. James is in a quandary over figuring her out.
Comment from adewpearl
He and Dark fought constantly, and - add comma
You have my dying of curiosity - is she going to cast some sort of Romani spell over him that will compel him to confess? Is she going to "execute" him with some dark magic power? You had better not keep me waiting for weeks to find this one out, my friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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He and Dark fought constantly, and - add comma
You have my dying of curiosity - is she going to cast some sort of Romani spell over him that will compel him to confess? Is she going to "execute" him with some dark magic power? You had better not keep me waiting for weeks to find this one out, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Your timing couldn't be better, I will post the next chapter in about 5 minutes. So far, you're the only one thinking like a Romani. I'm impressed.
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five minutes - now, that is what I call service!!! :-)
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I aim to please!
Comment from psalmist
Definitely and intriguing chapter. I am enjoying the way you are drawing out grandmother's personality. I have a feeling she is the only one who really understands and knows James' father. I will be interested to see how this plays out. As always, you leave me looking forward to the next chapter. Linda
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Definitely and intriguing chapter. I am enjoying the way you are drawing out grandmother's personality. I have a feeling she is the only one who really understands and knows James' father. I will be interested to see how this plays out. As always, you leave me looking forward to the next chapter. Linda
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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I am so pleased you like this one. Yes, Grandmother knows her son much better than anyone realizes.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, dear, Grandmother most
certainly has a mind of
her own. I wonder what power
she has over James' dad.
damn(e)dest
Everyone know(s) Alexandru - knows (unless deliberate)
Margaret
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Oh, dear, Grandmother most
certainly has a mind of
her own. I wonder what power
she has over James' dad.
damn(e)dest
Everyone know(s) Alexandru - knows (unless deliberate)
Margaret
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. We are very close to the end and Grandmothers strange behavior will finally be explained.
Comment from Halfree
The story continues to hold my attention. You are unfolding the story very well with just the right bit on tension. The way you close each chapter pulls the reader into the plot and opens the door for the next chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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The story continues to hold my attention. You are unfolding the story very well with just the right bit on tension. The way you close each chapter pulls the reader into the plot and opens the door for the next chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you. I am so pleased you liked this one.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
Grandmother seems to have caught James off guard, Until now she has seemed to embrace the changes that James and Angela have introduced into her life, but now she is going back to some of the secretive ways of the Romani,
Now I wonder how she can possibly have power over her son. Is this power real or imagined/
What a cliffhanger. I'm ready to learn Grandmother's secret.
Great writing that portends an amazing twist is on the way.
Love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Hi Valerie:)
Grandmother seems to have caught James off guard, Until now she has seemed to embrace the changes that James and Angela have introduced into her life, but now she is going back to some of the secretive ways of the Romani,
Now I wonder how she can possibly have power over her son. Is this power real or imagined/
What a cliffhanger. I'm ready to learn Grandmother's secret.
Great writing that portends an amazing twist is on the way.
Love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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We are very close to the end and you will learn what Grandmother is not willing to talk about very soon. Thanks for the great 6 stars, I always appreciate your input.