Dog Day Afternoon
A Day in a Hero's Life.16 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
Thank you for directing me to this story. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I am glad things worked out for all of the dogs in this story. Best wishes to you!
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Thank you for directing me to this story. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I am glad things worked out for all of the dogs in this story. Best wishes to you!
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from irishauthorme
What an amazing story! This look up at us from a dog's view is precious, funny, sad, and realistic. I really appreciated some of your rawer scenes, probably because I try to throw a few into everything I write.
"Being fifty-six(?), my mother's third litter by rape,"
"Park Avenue bitches love to nuzzle my chest,"
'I proceeded to make my mark on his face, head and hair." (Priceless!)
You are a much better author than you give yourself credit for.
irish
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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What an amazing story! This look up at us from a dog's view is precious, funny, sad, and realistic. I really appreciated some of your rawer scenes, probably because I try to throw a few into everything I write.
"Being fifty-six(?), my mother's third litter by rape,"
"Park Avenue bitches love to nuzzle my chest,"
'I proceeded to make my mark on his face, head and hair." (Priceless!)
You are a much better author than you give yourself credit for.
irish
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Again, can't thank you enough, I will see to the changes, it is one of my favorites.
Comment from Eunice Amero
There was a mistake wheee you say one and it should be on where you say eyes one me. Then another place where you say they go by it should be the. I hate it when anyone mistreats aanimal. You did a good job on being a dog. I didnt like it where you used the Lords name in vainbut then again thats your business you'll be the one who will have to give account for that when you get to the judgement seat of Christ. Good luck
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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There was a mistake wheee you say one and it should be on where you say eyes one me. Then another place where you say they go by it should be the. I hate it when anyone mistreats aanimal. You did a good job on being a dog. I didnt like it where you used the Lords name in vainbut then again thats your business you'll be the one who will have to give account for that when you get to the judgement seat of Christ. Good luck
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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thank you and I will fix the errors.
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You are welcome
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a sweet dog story with a real hero-type dog doing good deeds. I like his tough guy way of talking and his thoughts about getting old and going to his Maker. You do, however, need to read your writing aloud and be sure you wrote what you think you wrote. Because you have real talent as a writer, I have a long list of things you should correct starting at the top: . . . twenty-one, immaculately puffed(,) groomed(,) and . . . Bitches(') man . . . . . . body tighten(ed) and his eyes roll(ed) back. How did he untie Maltese from tree? . . . person(')s report. . . . . . screeching off (off). . . . kind-faced . . . How'd he get off the top of the cab without biting Maltese in half? . . . burst (though) the . . . . . . reflect on (no comma) why . . . . . . because (they) say all . . . Best of luck with this. It is interesting.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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This is a sweet dog story with a real hero-type dog doing good deeds. I like his tough guy way of talking and his thoughts about getting old and going to his Maker. You do, however, need to read your writing aloud and be sure you wrote what you think you wrote. Because you have real talent as a writer, I have a long list of things you should correct starting at the top: . . . twenty-one, immaculately puffed(,) groomed(,) and . . . Bitches(') man . . . . . . body tighten(ed) and his eyes roll(ed) back. How did he untie Maltese from tree? . . . person(')s report. . . . . . screeching off (off). . . . kind-faced . . . How'd he get off the top of the cab without biting Maltese in half? . . . burst (though) the . . . . . . reflect on (no comma) why . . . . . . because (they) say all . . . Best of luck with this. It is interesting.
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you, I will fix the errors.
Comment from barkingdog
This could very well be the dog himself talking. You have done a marvelous job showing how cruel it can be out there for the homeless and neglected. I loved him saving the little maltese and scaring the horrible boys. He is definitely his own dog.
I saw two typos:
-burst threw(through) the front door
- because the(they) say all doggies
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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This could very well be the dog himself talking. You have done a marvelous job showing how cruel it can be out there for the homeless and neglected. I loved him saving the little maltese and scaring the horrible boys. He is definitely his own dog.
I saw two typos:
-burst threw(through) the front door
- because the(they) say all doggies
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Oh I'm so glad you enjoyed this, I had a feeling you would, Thanks for the marvelous review
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You're welcome, joann.:) ellen
Comment from zlp22
Such a great, if somewhat sad story. Very interesting different type of dog story. Our dogs do many things for us, many have saved lives, and they all deserve to be treated well.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Such a great, if somewhat sad story. Very interesting different type of dog story. Our dogs do many things for us, many have saved lives, and they all deserve to be treated well.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I'm honored you enjoyed the story, The six was the cherry on top
Comment from GroundedAngel
Excellent piece ! Great inner dialogue and imagery. It's both sad and humorous. You did justice to all homeless, abused or neglected animals. Very enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Excellent piece ! Great inner dialogue and imagery. It's both sad and humorous. You did justice to all homeless, abused or neglected animals. Very enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I'm honored you enjoyed the piece, the six is the cherry on top
Comment from Misrael
Very interesting animal story and an interesting way to write as well. personally I like dogs but love cats but I used to hate dogs so I have come a long way. Good read,good job and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Very interesting animal story and an interesting way to write as well. personally I like dogs but love cats but I used to hate dogs so I have come a long way. Good read,good job and keep on writing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review
Comment from Cindy Warren
What a nice idea, a dog hero rescuing smaller dogs. I was kind of hoping he'd be rescued himself in the end, but your ending works. Nice work.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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What a nice idea, a dog hero rescuing smaller dogs. I was kind of hoping he'd be rescued himself in the end, but your ending works. Nice work.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thank you so much, glad you enjoyed it
Comment from TammyGail
Hey there girlie - this was some read and thanks for the notes as well - you have a poetic flow in your words its nice something you don't see often with novelists or poets these days - thanks for sharing always a pleasure to bask your ink
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hey there girlie - this was some read and thanks for the notes as well - you have a poetic flow in your words its nice something you don't see often with novelists or poets these days - thanks for sharing always a pleasure to bask your ink
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Oh but you are the Queen, your stuff is amazing, I cant believe the amount of poems you post, its really wonderful, dont ever stop, Thanks again for the stars
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I write like a mad woman - no drugs but my god the coffee is never left to spoil - haha :) always a pleasure
