The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Farm Hideout"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
4 total reviews
Comment from LucyB
Now I am catching on how this is done! After I read one chapter, I get a prompt to move to the next! I'm really not slow, just still rather new around FanStory. I was going back to my messages and got a little turned around and out of order! I've got it now! Very exciting...what does he have in his pocket?
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Now I am catching on how this is done! After I read one chapter, I get a prompt to move to the next! I'm really not slow, just still rather new around FanStory. I was going back to my messages and got a little turned around and out of order! I've got it now! Very exciting...what does he have in his pocket?
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Thanks for your interest and patient reading. Welcome to Fanstory , like me you are new and finding your way around. Next chapters will tell you what is in his pocket and why.
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This is the one for which I'm waiting!!
Comment from bowls
What an amazing final sentence! You've done an excellent job of creating pathos in this chapter both with your description of Simeon's condition and chances and with your description of his daughter's reaction. Then, at the very end, you reverse the plot's direction and inject a ray of hope. Great technique! Just one apostrophe missing: third line from the end - patient's age.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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What an amazing final sentence! You've done an excellent job of creating pathos in this chapter both with your description of Simeon's condition and chances and with your description of his daughter's reaction. Then, at the very end, you reverse the plot's direction and inject a ray of hope. Great technique! Just one apostrophe missing: third line from the end - patient's age.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much for your continuing reading and kind reviews.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
What a sad chapter this is.I worked in healthcare and think burns would be the worst thing to have.Well written and interesting~DEbbie
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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What a sad chapter this is.I worked in healthcare and think burns would be the worst thing to have.Well written and interesting~DEbbie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your words. I appreciate too that from a medical point of view I got some things right.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I appreciate your making this short for easy reading and review. Simeon got a bath of petrol and fire, covering him up with that blanket make worsen the situation.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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I appreciate your making this short for easy reading and review. Simeon got a bath of petrol and fire, covering him up with that blanket make worsen the situation.
ola thomas
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.