The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "The Confession"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
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Comment from LucyB
I read the last one too soon. I was wondering what I missed! Gog if now. Excellent! Gotta move on! Love the description of the poor duds whose head was blown off!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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I read the last one too soon. I was wondering what I missed! Gog if now. Excellent! Gotta move on! Love the description of the poor duds whose head was blown off!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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thanks for your encouraging words. I think that guy deserved to die!
Comment from bowls
A very exciting chapter, indeed. In addition, your descriptions are vivid. I am thinking of the shot kidnapper's pool of blood and Simeon's wounds, specifically. You've maintained a nice, fast pace here. Very well done. Just one apostrophe missing: "the blanket's fibres".
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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A very exciting chapter, indeed. In addition, your descriptions are vivid. I am thinking of the shot kidnapper's pool of blood and Simeon's wounds, specifically. You've maintained a nice, fast pace here. Very well done. Just one apostrophe missing: "the blanket's fibres".
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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thanks for your perseverance and kind review. you are helpful as ever!
Comment from TammyGail
vigournet you crafted another fine read
interesting and compelling, well written
great work on your closing and opening once again
as that is indeed key to keeping the readers eye
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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vigournet you crafted another fine read
interesting and compelling, well written
great work on your closing and opening once again
as that is indeed key to keeping the readers eye
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your great words of encouragement.
Comment from mshirachot
Another great chapter in the series. A question for you: what is the time period of this setting? Current? Future?
Just a few suggestions, when you mentiont the languages, the more correct term would be Hebrew versus "Jewish". In Hebrew the word is actually "Evrit" pronounced "E-vreet". I only mention this in case your goal is to also attract a Jewish audience.
Another suggestion would be instead of the words "private area" another tasteful word such as groin could be used.
Finally, (and the main reason I asked about timing of the setting) is that the "Red Cross" in Israel operates as the Magen David Adom, with the emblem being a red Star of David aka Magen David). However disregard this if your book is futuristic and you've already explained to the reader the symbol's change from Red to Green and from Magen to Cross. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Magen_David_Adom
I know I've said this before, but I do intend to make a more serious effort to go back and see your earlier chapters.
Excellent work once again.
Blessings and shalom,
Marsha aka Shira
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Another great chapter in the series. A question for you: what is the time period of this setting? Current? Future?
Just a few suggestions, when you mentiont the languages, the more correct term would be Hebrew versus "Jewish". In Hebrew the word is actually "Evrit" pronounced "E-vreet". I only mention this in case your goal is to also attract a Jewish audience.
Another suggestion would be instead of the words "private area" another tasteful word such as groin could be used.
Finally, (and the main reason I asked about timing of the setting) is that the "Red Cross" in Israel operates as the Magen David Adom, with the emblem being a red Star of David aka Magen David). However disregard this if your book is futuristic and you've already explained to the reader the symbol's change from Red to Green and from Magen to Cross. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Magen_David_Adom
I know I've said this before, but I do intend to make a more serious effort to go back and see your earlier chapters.
Excellent work once again.
Blessings and shalom,
Marsha aka Shira
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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thanks for your continuing support and advice. I have amended as you suggested. Embarassing, really, as I am a volunteer with the British Red Cross and should have known the variance internationally as it was part of my induction.
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You are most kindly welcome. Glad I could be of assistance! With such an extensive work as this it is easy to overlook small things.
Best wishes!
Marsha
Comment from OLA THOMAS
As steaming as before. Every new post has a new addition to make. Descriptive details full to account.Not surprising that the kidnappers threw petrol bomb on Simeon, to bait time.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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As steaming as before. Every new post has a new addition to make. Descriptive details full to account.Not surprising that the kidnappers threw petrol bomb on Simeon, to bait time.
ola thomas
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your kind appreciation.