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The Heir Apparent

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A family learns their father is a serial killer

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Comment from rtobaygo
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THERE WASN'T ANYTHING TO READ EXCEPT YOUR EXPLANATION ABOUT JAMES MATTHEWS. DID YOU FORGET TO POST THE STORY TO THIS DATE? I GAVE IT FIVE STARS FOR THAT, ALONG WITH SIX STARS ARE YOUR NORMAL RANKINGS.

TAKE CARE,

RAY

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
    I was just updating the prologue and it automatically got posted.
Comment from fictionwriter
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Although the prologue doesn't read like anything is wrong, I hate to see that backstory upfront. Let the reader discover this stuff along with the character. If I do stuff like that my editor always takes it out. So her advise I'm passing on to you.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
    Thanks for the suggestion. I keep it in mind.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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All looks fine to me...
I've read this a few times...
and wondered why you are putting
it up again, since it is ususally
in your author notes anyway.

just wondered.

Margaret

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    I just decided to rewrite the prologue and it automatically got posted. I do put this in my author's notes to make sure the new readers understand the basis of the story.
Comment from InterestingRon
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Hi Smurphy
A short synopsis that could be quite useful.
I could see the dust cover of the hardback version of your book carrying this as a blurb. The paperback will probably print it on the back cover.
Ron

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    That sounds good to me. I believe that short, sweet and to the point is always best.
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Sasha,

I am a bit confused about this entry but then I am a bit retarded. Anyone who reads this prologue will be intrigued enough to hunger for the rest....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    I just cleaned up the prologue and ended up reposting it. I am pleased you feel it leaves the reader wanting to know more.
Comment from Realist101
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HI Sasha! Good job. I didn't know synopsis and prologue were the same thing, that's how ignorant I am! Well, at least I leaned something today! I think he will carry on the investigation. I wish I had this book on my shelf. Nice work Sasha. xoxo. Susan

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    To be honest, I'm not really sure if they are the same but what the heck.
Comment from Joan E.
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Your final version of the prologue is a terrific synopsis. It gives a clear preview of the storyline without giving away too much, and lends suspense since we wonder which way James will choose to proceed. Best wishes in developing your cover art. Hugs- Joan

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    When I edited this, I was surprised it got re-posted. Glad you liked it.
reply by Joan E. on 02-Jul-2012
    The FS site has a mind of its own sometimes--fortunately, you didn't add anything untoward! Hugs- Joan
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hi Smurphy, This has a more serious intro into your wonderful book. It is well written, concise and leaves the reader wanting to know more. Well done. xoxo deborah

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    During my recuperation I have been madly working on editing my book. Believe it or not, I found a chapter on my manuscript that I had not posted on the sight. Glad you found the into interesting.
Comment from Janie King
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Well, I'm a tad confused...are we starting over..we didn't finish the other book? did we? If so I've missed some chapters somewhere. God bless.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    I edited the prologue and it ended up being re posted. No, I've still got a few chapters to write before the book is finished.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
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The writer definitely grabs the attention of the reader with these few words. Makes the reader want to get started on the book, right now. Look forward to the first chapter.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    I am pleased this captured your interest. I re edited the prologue in the hope that it would gather interest in reading the book.