Sir Knight Incarnate
Men of Honor still exist.8 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This has good descriptive phrases and is a generally good poem. There is one glaring flaw you really need to fix. None of the semi-colons are use correctly. Each should be replaced by either a comma or a period, depending on what is called for. Before you write anything else, take a look at this: http://www.getitwriteonline.com/archive/091701Semicolon.htm
Also, a dash is NOT a hyphen. If you are using a program like MSWord or others, you can create a true n-dash or m-dash, but here you cannot, so you must revert to the pre-computer style of making a dash, which is TWO hyphens together --
Now, if you can make one elsewhere, you CAN copypaste it here if you are unsing the advanced edit option.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This has good descriptive phrases and is a generally good poem. There is one glaring flaw you really need to fix. None of the semi-colons are use correctly. Each should be replaced by either a comma or a period, depending on what is called for. Before you write anything else, take a look at this: http://www.getitwriteonline.com/archive/091701Semicolon.htm
Also, a dash is NOT a hyphen. If you are using a program like MSWord or others, you can create a true n-dash or m-dash, but here you cannot, so you must revert to the pre-computer style of making a dash, which is TWO hyphens together --
Now, if you can make one elsewhere, you CAN copypaste it here if you are unsing the advanced edit option.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your informative review. It is most educational.I appreciate your taking the time to read it.
Comment from stanzasandstuff
Great Imagery but am not sure what you're trying to say.
Getting the message across is paramount according to a teacher of mine. He said "that's priority one and the rest, like imagery is an add on."
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Great Imagery but am not sure what you're trying to say.
Getting the message across is paramount according to a teacher of mine. He said "that's priority one and the rest, like imagery is an add on."
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review my work. It is appreciated.
Comment from Enrique28
A fine verse with a wonderful classic touch that enhances the theme. Superb imagery and poetic sounds throughout, and an excellent presentation. A knight of lofty ideals indeed! A most enjoyable poem very apt for recital.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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A fine verse with a wonderful classic touch that enhances the theme. Superb imagery and poetic sounds throughout, and an excellent presentation. A knight of lofty ideals indeed! A most enjoyable poem very apt for recital.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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WOW!! Enrique, Thank you for the 6 rating; and for the kind words. This was a fun poem to write.
Comment from guinea
Very good writing about the knights. Iliked it very much. The words flow nicely and direct. Shows deep thinking. The oicture goes well.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Very good writing about the knights. Iliked it very much. The words flow nicely and direct. Shows deep thinking. The oicture goes well.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Guinea, Thank you so much for your kind words. They are appreciated.
Comment from Cornelius2000
Asphalt? They had asphalt back then? But seriously, your poem reads very nicely, and other than the asphalt I don't have any suggestions to improve it. The picture, along with the black print on orange background makes a very nice presentation.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Asphalt? They had asphalt back then? But seriously, your poem reads very nicely, and other than the asphalt I don't have any suggestions to improve it. The picture, along with the black print on orange background makes a very nice presentation.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Cornelius, thank your for your kind words. Reviews help me improve my work. To help me continue to improve my work, please tell me how I failed to convey the transition to modern times in my work. Your help would be greatly appreciated.
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How embarrassing....I was afraid of that....and went over and over it. I think it was the "chariot" and the castle's moat that threw me. Sorry about that.
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That's okay, I just have so much to learn; and always look to ways to improve my work.
Comment from larry conner
This was one of the best free verse I have read in awhile, a true King Arther poem the meter was right on time with a great subject matter an outstanding ending.I take my hat off to you.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This was one of the best free verse I have read in awhile, a true King Arther poem the meter was right on time with a great subject matter an outstanding ending.I take my hat off to you.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Larry, Thank you for you kind words. They are greatly appreciated.
Comment from Fandoodle
Loved the picture with this. You told it well without much rhyme. I think you should change the word asphault to something of that century. Asphault didn't exist yet.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Loved the picture with this. You told it well without much rhyme. I think you should change the word asphault to something of that century. Asphault didn't exist yet.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Fandoole, I appreciate you taking the time to read this work. Thank for the suggestion of changing asphalt. However, since you made the suggestion, it would seem I failed to convey that the poem transitions to modern times. I learn from reviews; would you please tell me where I failed to convey the transition so my work will improve.
Comment from terry drake
Well I like stories about knights who fight dragons and save the beauty from sure death, and feats of valor to be rewarded on his safe return. Good story.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Well I like stories about knights who fight dragons and save the beauty from sure death, and feats of valor to be rewarded on his safe return. Good story.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Terry, Thank you so much for your kind words. They are greatly appreciated.