Wetlands Awakening
early autumn dawn in the wetlands33 total reviews
Comment from Writingfundimension
Oh my gosh, what an absolutely gorgeous free verse, Connie. The lush images you evoke with your words and the beautiful touches of alliteration throughout really make this a stand-out entry. This is the work of a mature, talented poet.
We have many wetlands near my home, and they are protected by law - yet folks continue to make inroads into their domain.
This is an evocative reminder of the power of nature and wild places. Good luck with this superb entry, my dear friend. Love ya, Bev
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Oh my gosh, what an absolutely gorgeous free verse, Connie. The lush images you evoke with your words and the beautiful touches of alliteration throughout really make this a stand-out entry. This is the work of a mature, talented poet.
We have many wetlands near my home, and they are protected by law - yet folks continue to make inroads into their domain.
This is an evocative reminder of the power of nature and wild places. Good luck with this superb entry, my dear friend. Love ya, Bev
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Oh, Bev, you spoil me, sweetie, with all your kind words and with a sixer too! I love getting sixes. I don't have enough of an active fan base to ever get 15 or more reviews, so when I get a six-star rating and land on the front page, then I'm more apt to at least get my 15. So thank you, my friend! Love ya right back, Connie
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Connie, you are so very welcome, and I am really glad that I left a six for such a special write! And I love seeing your name on the front page... Hugs, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I so enjoyed your free verse.
The words flowed smoothly throughout
and they painted nature at its best.
Good luck with the contest, Connie.
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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I so enjoyed your free verse.
The words flowed smoothly throughout
and they painted nature at its best.
Good luck with the contest, Connie.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, Margaret, for such encouraging feedback. I am honored when I receive such a nice review from you. Connie
Comment from mshirachot
What an amazingly stunning photo! Was this taken at the edge of those wetlands your mentioned in your notes? If so you've certainly captured a most delightful picture of it. Although it is a remarkable photo, it does make me wonder how beautiful it must have been utilizing all the other senses
You have it illustrated wonderfully in your free verse poem. You've summed the whole feel of this outstanding poem with these closing words:
"I realize no picture
will capture
the exhilaration I feel at this moment
as nature awakens
in all its magnificent glory"
Thank you so much for sharing this piece.Best wishes in the contest.
Blessings to you!
Marsha
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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What an amazingly stunning photo! Was this taken at the edge of those wetlands your mentioned in your notes? If so you've certainly captured a most delightful picture of it. Although it is a remarkable photo, it does make me wonder how beautiful it must have been utilizing all the other senses
You have it illustrated wonderfully in your free verse poem. You've summed the whole feel of this outstanding poem with these closing words:
"I realize no picture
will capture
the exhilaration I feel at this moment
as nature awakens
in all its magnificent glory"
Thank you so much for sharing this piece.Best wishes in the contest.
Blessings to you!
Marsha
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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What a wonderful review, Marsha! Thank you so much!
Connie
Comment from MelissaBickel
hmmm how can a picture truly capture such a wonderful experience as this? Every detail penned was as if the sun was rising on my face and I was watching the morning and nature come to life so early.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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hmmm how can a picture truly capture such a wonderful experience as this? Every detail penned was as if the sun was rising on my face and I was watching the morning and nature come to life so early.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you, sweet Melissa, for such a lovely review and for a six-star rating too! By the way, I am so impressed with your presentation yesterday. I had to miss part of it, so I will listen to it tonight. Thanks again, my friend. Connie
Comment from closetpoetjester
A pretty good effort here Connie with a very expressive and descriptive free verse about your enamour of the wetlands near your home. I found the flow a little sticky through the middle...I think some of it if rearranged slightly would give it a better flow...but at the end of the day, the end of the line signals the pause so I understand thats where you wanted them...I think the last stanza was much better and if you made a few of the lines a little longer here and there where it lends itself...I think it would scan a teency bit smoother. The content got you over the line for a fiver easy my friend and a fine effort. Maybe read a couple of times aloud and try some variations...its amazing how different something can sound when said in one breath, as opposed to two lines...hope I don't appear too harsh as you know, free verse NOT my strong point. Its what I get when I read it though. Overall a terrific job embracing your wetlands in poetic verse.
Lots of love Phillippa xoxoxo
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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A pretty good effort here Connie with a very expressive and descriptive free verse about your enamour of the wetlands near your home. I found the flow a little sticky through the middle...I think some of it if rearranged slightly would give it a better flow...but at the end of the day, the end of the line signals the pause so I understand thats where you wanted them...I think the last stanza was much better and if you made a few of the lines a little longer here and there where it lends itself...I think it would scan a teency bit smoother. The content got you over the line for a fiver easy my friend and a fine effort. Maybe read a couple of times aloud and try some variations...its amazing how different something can sound when said in one breath, as opposed to two lines...hope I don't appear too harsh as you know, free verse NOT my strong point. Its what I get when I read it though. Overall a terrific job embracing your wetlands in poetic verse.
Lots of love Phillippa xoxoxo
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Oh, sweetie, what an encouraging and helpful review you've written on my attempt at free verse. It's funny you would mention playing around with the lines and the lengths. I kept changing the length of the lines over and over and then decided to just post it. I missed your sweet voice last night in the call. I hope everything is okay and that your block is sold and you are a happy lady! Thanks again. Love ya, Connie
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Haha...I do that aswell...A LOT...LOL...talk soon Connie
Hugs Phillippa xoxoxo
Comment from adewpearl
lovely alliteration in phrases like wetlands where the silhouette of a sandhill crane catches
Vivid descriptions and specific detail make this scene a pleasure to visualize and you appeal well to senses not limited to the visual
and what a wonderfully meaningful message you deliver in your final stanza :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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lovely alliteration in phrases like wetlands where the silhouette of a sandhill crane catches
Vivid descriptions and specific detail make this scene a pleasure to visualize and you appeal well to senses not limited to the visual
and what a wonderfully meaningful message you deliver in your final stanza :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, Brooke, for your usual thoughtful review.
Connie
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Connie
Your author's note says you are trying to capture the feel of the wetlands in your poetry.
Let me assure you your beautifully composed poem does exactly that with its wonderful descriptions of nature.
I'm guessing that the stunning photograph is the one you took?
Ron xx
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Hi Connie
Your author's note says you are trying to capture the feel of the wetlands in your poetry.
Let me assure you your beautifully composed poem does exactly that with its wonderful descriptions of nature.
I'm guessing that the stunning photograph is the one you took?
Ron xx
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thanks, Ron, for your usual thoughtful review. You asked if I took the photograph; I'm afraid the answer is no. I should have included a little acknowledgement of Google Images. I do have lots of wetland pictures I've taken but was too lazy to look back for them and found Google Images much easier to pull up. Thanks again, my friend. Hope all is well with you across the pond. Connie xx
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You did an awesome job with this free verse, and I think you described this scene perfectly so that the reader could see and feel what you have seen. Nice job, Connie. Hope all is well.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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You did an awesome job with this free verse, and I think you described this scene perfectly so that the reader could see and feel what you have seen. Nice job, Connie. Hope all is well.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Linda, for your usual thoughtful review.
Connie
Comment from Enrique28
And a magnificent verse it is! A lovely stream of smoothly flowing poetic sounds beautifully presented. Brilliant images of the surrounding nature stir the imagination. A fine picture for the senses!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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And a magnificent verse it is! A lovely stream of smoothly flowing poetic sounds beautifully presented. Brilliant images of the surrounding nature stir the imagination. A fine picture for the senses!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for such a wonderful review and for the six-star rating.
I am honored. Connie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a lovely free verse poem! So descriptive that I feel I am there, even though I am a stranger to wetlands. I would love to see some of the photos you take there. Do you have them online somewhere?
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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What a lovely free verse poem! So descriptive that I feel I am there, even though I am a stranger to wetlands. I would love to see some of the photos you take there. Do you have them online somewhere?
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, Phyllis, for your lovely review.
Connie
