The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "An Official Family meeting"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
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Comment from bowls
Another nice little bit. When I refer to each section I call it a post as opposed to a chapter. I presume each offering is only part of a chapter - am I correct? This is a pleasant look at the family/friends situation at home and abroad. A calm little scene I'm thinking to prepare for the storm to come. I think there are just a few apostrophes missing here: James' bedroom, each others'IPS. Ah, the Waltons; I remember them well.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Another nice little bit. When I refer to each section I call it a post as opposed to a chapter. I presume each offering is only part of a chapter - am I correct? This is a pleasant look at the family/friends situation at home and abroad. A calm little scene I'm thinking to prepare for the storm to come. I think there are just a few apostrophes missing here: James' bedroom, each others'IPS. Ah, the Waltons; I remember them well.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Thanks for your kind words and continuing support. You are a star!
Comment from RaymondJohn
This is quite rushed, though interesting. Slow down to indicate feelings. You have some detail, but need a lot more. Remember, I want to be right there in the story with your characters. Ray.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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This is quite rushed, though interesting. Slow down to indicate feelings. You have some detail, but need a lot more. Remember, I want to be right there in the story with your characters. Ray.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Thanks for your comments. I did rush to post the last two chapters, sorry!
Comment from ScarletClearwater
I didn't get the point of this chapter really. Also the end isn't necessary when you have already mentioned the Waltons above. I guess the scene wasn't set up right for me. I got kind of lost.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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I didn't get the point of this chapter really. Also the end isn't necessary when you have already mentioned the Waltons above. I guess the scene wasn't set up right for me. I got kind of lost.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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You are right. I hurried to post the last two chapters.
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Glad I didn't offend. Thanks for taking it in stride.