Confined by Wisdom
'knowledge' isn't always a good thing23 total reviews
Comment from babylonia
mike,
it's funny ... strange not haha. i once had a mentor who said with more knowledge came deeper depression. he, like many others, thought more education would get him more money. all he received at that point was more debt. definitely one of those make you think poems. imagery is excellent. best of luck~
how are you doing? sales going well? i hope so.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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mike,
it's funny ... strange not haha. i once had a mentor who said with more knowledge came deeper depression. he, like many others, thought more education would get him more money. all he received at that point was more debt. definitely one of those make you think poems. imagery is excellent. best of luck~
how are you doing? sales going well? i hope so.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 20-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Barbara! Sales are at a virtual standstill, and no amount of Twittering makes a hoot of difference (pardon the pun!), but that's okay. I need to think of some more inventive marketing methods!
Mike
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i'll see what i can do to help. there has to be a way to boost sales.
love,
barbara
Comment from jshep
Great profile photo, Mike. This poem was very interesting and filled with depth of your interpretation of awareness.. It certainly can be a lone and loathsome road(excellent alliteration). Especially like your comparison on 'behind a horse both flatulent and flogged.' And I believe academia can corrupt-my example being the poetry books I read from many university presses- at least half of the poems are uninterpretable, definitely written for their peers and not the main stream.
You have said a great deal behind the words in this well executed ABC poem. Great job and best of luck. Joyce
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Great profile photo, Mike. This poem was very interesting and filled with depth of your interpretation of awareness.. It certainly can be a lone and loathsome road(excellent alliteration). Especially like your comparison on 'behind a horse both flatulent and flogged.' And I believe academia can corrupt-my example being the poetry books I read from many university presses- at least half of the poems are uninterpretable, definitely written for their peers and not the main stream.
You have said a great deal behind the words in this well executed ABC poem. Great job and best of luck. Joyce
Comment Written 20-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Joyce! I'm glad we're of a similar mindset. Knowledge really can get in the way of understanding if we let it. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the read :-).
Mike
Comment from Janet Foor
Very well written ABC poem. Great picture to accompany your piece. I especially enjoyed the line, "corrupted by an academic lust". It conjured up a multitude of thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
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Very well written ABC poem. Great picture to accompany your piece. I especially enjoyed the line, "corrupted by an academic lust". It conjured up a multitude of thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, JMF - I'm glad you enjoyed the read :-).
Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, fleedleflump, you did a great job writing this expressive ABC poem about wisdom, i enjoyed reading this one. good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, fleedleflump, you did a great job writing this expressive ABC poem about wisdom, i enjoyed reading this one. good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 20-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, SWJ :-). I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from WLHall
I love this poem because I am always saying that ignorance is bliss. I wish sometimes I didn't have the knowledge I do because it makes me worry and hard to relax. You did an outstanding job getting this across in your poem or at least that's how I interpreted it. I may be off a little. Good luck to you.
Wanda
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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I love this poem because I am always saying that ignorance is bliss. I wish sometimes I didn't have the knowledge I do because it makes me worry and hard to relax. You did an outstanding job getting this across in your poem or at least that's how I interpreted it. I may be off a little. Good luck to you.
Wanda
Comment Written 20-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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You're not off at all, Wanda. You are 100% on :-). Knowledge isn't the goal for me; understanding is. Knowledge can get in the way,because it makes you think you know the answer, and that stops you thinking about it. lol, I should write riddles! Thanks so much :-).
Mike
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Yes, that's it! Understanding is the key here. You can have all the knowledge in the world, but without really understanding something, what good is it?
Wanda
Comment from Chris Tee
Indeed an enjoyable read. This ABC poem titled "Confined by Wisdom" is an absolutely well penned poem with super alliteration sprinkled around. Well done and good luck in the contest MIke
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Indeed an enjoyable read. This ABC poem titled "Confined by Wisdom" is an absolutely well penned poem with super alliteration sprinkled around. Well done and good luck in the contest MIke
Comment Written 20-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thanks, Chris - glad you enjoyed it :-).
Mike
Comment from rama devi
Hey Mike-Wow, this is potent, expressive and intense, which is often true of your poetry. I do cringe at reference to 'Awareness' this way, because I associate the world with spiritual awareness and insight though i am 'aware' that is not your intent in this context.
Excellent ABC style poem with fine presentation and potent, impacting phrasing and word choices.
Superb title.
Awareness is a lone and loathsome road --Fine alliteration on L
behind a horse both flatulent and flogged, Ditto, on F and B
corrupted by an academic lust --superb consonance of C
designed by death to see all wisdom bogged good alliteration on D
forever in convention's droll confines. ditto on C and very well phrased with originality--and impacting language.
Good luck in the contest. I did not notice any nits
Also, i like your choice to add a dramatic pause line break before the closing line.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Hey Mike-Wow, this is potent, expressive and intense, which is often true of your poetry. I do cringe at reference to 'Awareness' this way, because I associate the world with spiritual awareness and insight though i am 'aware' that is not your intent in this context.
Excellent ABC style poem with fine presentation and potent, impacting phrasing and word choices.
Superb title.
Awareness is a lone and loathsome road --Fine alliteration on L
behind a horse both flatulent and flogged, Ditto, on F and B
corrupted by an academic lust --superb consonance of C
designed by death to see all wisdom bogged good alliteration on D
forever in convention's droll confines. ditto on C and very well phrased with originality--and impacting language.
Good luck in the contest. I did not notice any nits
Also, i like your choice to add a dramatic pause line break before the closing line.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, rd :-). In a way, I was referencing the same awareness, implying many 'educated' people confuse the two interpretations, replacing with accepted knowledge that which resides inside and around.
I'm so happy you liked it!
Mike
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:-)) yep!
Comment from Eliane Rabello
I really did enjoy the read. It's powerful. The first line "Awareness is a lone and loathsome road" struck a chord in me. Way to go!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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I really did enjoy the read. It's powerful. The first line "Awareness is a lone and loathsome road" struck a chord in me. Way to go!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Eliane :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed the read!
Mike
Comment from Sasha
You have done a marvelous job with this one. I really enjoyed it. It is a superb entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
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You have done a marvelous job with this one. I really enjoyed it. It is a superb entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you! I've been agonising over what to write for this contest, but suddenly it all came together.
Mike
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Aha now this was a great work to ponder over.
A great creative work with some inner moments of allowing the reader to "think".
Well penned and presented. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Aha now this was a great work to ponder over.
A great creative work with some inner moments of allowing the reader to "think".
Well penned and presented. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Maureen! I think many people accept knowledge without considering it. I also think people get less intelligent the more they know, because they no longer need to think as much!
Mike