The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "John meets Simeon"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
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Comment from LancsLass
That is just wonderful. You brought a lump to my throat :) You had the emotion just right, not too much or flowery but meaningful, pinning me to my seat. Very well done.
Anna
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2012
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That is just wonderful. You brought a lump to my throat :) You had the emotion just right, not too much or flowery but meaningful, pinning me to my seat. Very well done.
Anna
Comment Written 21-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2012
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Thank you for you very kind words. Your help and advice has been huge!
Comment from bowls
I like the allusion in the first paragraph. It certainly ties in with the rest of the events and acts, perhaps, as a kind of foretelling of events to come. The second and third paragraphs, too, are very effective in their ability to intensify suspense - excellent duck image. You do a really good job on the description of Wesley's recovery. In the second last paragraph I'd suggest you use "had come home" rather than "came" to put the time frame more in order. I like the way you've left the reader on a hopeful note. It's a pleasant change after all the difficulties the characters have been experiencing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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I like the allusion in the first paragraph. It certainly ties in with the rest of the events and acts, perhaps, as a kind of foretelling of events to come. The second and third paragraphs, too, are very effective in their ability to intensify suspense - excellent duck image. You do a really good job on the description of Wesley's recovery. In the second last paragraph I'd suggest you use "had come home" rather than "came" to put the time frame more in order. I like the way you've left the reader on a hopeful note. It's a pleasant change after all the difficulties the characters have been experiencing.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Thanks for your comments and advice. I am off to a meeting now, but will look at the points on wednesday.
Comment from Taurean Monkey
This is an interesting story - not sure how credible the faith healing aspect of it is, but that didn't stop me from enjoying your chapter, which is well written. You've captured the hospital scene, hooked/wired up to the life saving/sustaining machines, taking turns to sleep in the waiting room, medical staff's understanding when the end is near, etc. It's a nice story. Regards, TM
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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This is an interesting story - not sure how credible the faith healing aspect of it is, but that didn't stop me from enjoying your chapter, which is well written. You've captured the hospital scene, hooked/wired up to the life saving/sustaining machines, taking turns to sleep in the waiting room, medical staff's understanding when the end is near, etc. It's a nice story. Regards, TM
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words and insightful comments.
Comment from c_lucas
Today's political correctness would throw Christians into a jail cell for practicing medicine with out the proper license. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Today's political correctness would throw Christians into a jail cell for practicing medicine with out the proper license. This is very well written.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Thanks for your kind words
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You're welcome.
Comment from rishikakatherine
The chapter was good, Hope is always there were god is residing. It was a wonderful chapter about hope and god, and also i liked that when your suffering you have god to turn to which .the lines "suffer little children to come to me." was superb.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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The chapter was good, Hope is always there were god is residing. It was a wonderful chapter about hope and god, and also i liked that when your suffering you have god to turn to which .the lines "suffer little children to come to me." was superb.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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thanks for your kind words.