Poetry, Dreams In Motion.
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Evil Perversions"A collection of poetry.
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Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Then why post it here, Ric?
Fanstory is about improving the work in question and pulling it apart, putting it back together as sleeker, meaner and cleaner.
If it's already been published, posting it here is a step backward, even if you want to share.
I'd suggest taking the reviewing option off if there's more of your poetry you'd like to share that's already been published.
I thought a few of the rhymes could use a little work, most noticably yearning and perversions, but as you've already said, it's been published.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2007
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Then why post it here, Ric?
Fanstory is about improving the work in question and pulling it apart, putting it back together as sleeker, meaner and cleaner.
If it's already been published, posting it here is a step backward, even if you want to share.
I'd suggest taking the reviewing option off if there's more of your poetry you'd like to share that's already been published.
I thought a few of the rhymes could use a little work, most noticably yearning and perversions, but as you've already said, it's been published.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2007
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Yeah, I know. But I just thought "what the hay" and decided to add it since I'm trying to put them all together in a book. I suppose I could have just left it out, but then it would have felt incomplete. Anywho, as always, thanks for reviewing my work. I always enjoy hearing what you have to say. :-)
Comment from StormyGale
I shuddered when I read this part
Of sun and moon they have no need,
It's on the darkness of man that they feed.
It is very excellent! The feelings I had were exactly what you were trying to get across. I am amazed to have friends with soooo much talent!
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I shuddered when I read this part
Of sun and moon they have no need,
It's on the darkness of man that they feed.
It is very excellent! The feelings I had were exactly what you were trying to get across. I am amazed to have friends with soooo much talent!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from CarolinasAngel
This is great! I enjoyed every word! I didn't see any errors and I didn't read anything I didn't like. I wouldn't change a thing! Thanks for sharing this!
Candy
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This is great! I enjoyed every word! I didn't see any errors and I didn't read anything I didn't like. I wouldn't change a thing! Thanks for sharing this!
Candy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from mheflin
this is beautiful and i understood it completely, great job and think it's a take heed type of poem. I seen a lot of truth in it and it is also a scary thought that can help scare you straight, Great Job.
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this is beautiful and i understood it completely, great job and think it's a take heed type of poem. I seen a lot of truth in it and it is also a scary thought that can help scare you straight, Great Job.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from Iron Maiden7o7
I like this poem a lot. I would like to add that you always leave such lovely reviews for me, and it's such an honor to get the opportunity to read your work and see that you are great at this writing stuff also, very good. There is nothing that I would want to change here. Thanks for sharing.
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I like this poem a lot. I would like to add that you always leave such lovely reviews for me, and it's such an honor to get the opportunity to read your work and see that you are great at this writing stuff also, very good. There is nothing that I would want to change here. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005