Hard Day
Its a short day description5 total reviews
Comment from Carlylrkn5
I love the idea of the poem, I would perhaps consider changing the last line slightly just for the reason that it doesn't quite fit the flow in my option on to the other two lines of the poem. Overall good poem!
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I love the idea of the poem, I would perhaps consider changing the last line slightly just for the reason that it doesn't quite fit the flow in my option on to the other two lines of the poem. Overall good poem!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
Comment from Chocolate Chip
What a sweet poem with a serious message. I liked how you began this piece by stating the obvious then ending it by asking an answer to your prayer. Nothing over exaggerated, just spelling out what's expected after a request is made. Nicely written & keep up the good work writing what you feel. ;) CC
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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What a sweet poem with a serious message. I liked how you began this piece by stating the obvious then ending it by asking an answer to your prayer. Nothing over exaggerated, just spelling out what's expected after a request is made. Nicely written & keep up the good work writing what you feel. ;) CC
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Than you very much for give such inspiring review. I will keep writing in the same spirit. I'm greatful to God that there are people who are opened to understand simple messages written from bottom of heart. :)
Comment from Espresso momma
I think I have prayed this prayer many times. Very well written and the photo is a real treat too. /thanks for sharing this very much.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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I think I have prayed this prayer many times. Very well written and the photo is a real treat too. /thanks for sharing this very much.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much for your kind words.
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Thank you very much for your kind words.
Comment from c_lucas
A hard day can be made easier with Divine Guidance. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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A hard day can be made easier with Divine Guidance. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you for liking the poem. I'm greatful to god for writing it.
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Thank you for liking the poem. I'm greatful to god for writing it.
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You're welcome, Anna. Charlie
Comment from Anisa-
Your syllable count is way off in the 5-7-5. There should be five in the first and last and seven in the third. Otherwise, it was pretty good.
Anisa
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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Your syllable count is way off in the 5-7-5. There should be five in the first and last and seven in the third. Otherwise, it was pretty good.
Anisa
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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I tried to create something......
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Yes, and it was pretty good. You can still fix it if you get the syllables right. I will adjust my score if you do.
Anisa
