Jerry Jing-Jang Comes to Town
A cowboy tale74 total reviews
Comment from Bobbi22
I love a good cowboy story and this is one. Great name - Jerry Jing-Jang - it has a nice sound to it. Very well written story in a poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I love a good cowboy story and this is one. Great name - Jerry Jing-Jang - it has a nice sound to it. Very well written story in a poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Thanks for this wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed my story poem.
Comment from mumsyone
Cute story in a poem, and a nice tribute to your dad. I can see where kids would like the ring of the name Jerry Jing-Jang.
Don't always manage too (to) think very clear.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Cute story in a poem, and a nice tribute to your dad. I can see where kids would like the ring of the name Jerry Jing-Jang.
Don't always manage too (to) think very clear.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Oops, thanks for catching that. It's fixed now. Thanks for this wonderful review.
Comment from Alexandra Meintjes
A very entertaining poem :) It didn't always flow, but that didn't seem to matter. Very witty and quick, while still holding a full story with quite some depth and thought. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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A very entertaining poem :) It didn't always flow, but that didn't seem to matter. Very witty and quick, while still holding a full story with quite some depth and thought. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'll have to work in the flow. Thanks for this great review.
Comment from jlsavell
Cindy Warren, well I love you Jerry Jing Jang stories. This was captivating and a great story poem to enter into the contest..best wishes.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Cindy Warren, well I love you Jerry Jing Jang stories. This was captivating and a great story poem to enter into the contest..best wishes.. jlsavell
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm glad you like Jerry Jing-Jang. I'll have to find some new adventures for him. Thanks for this wonderful review.
Comment from MelissaBickel
This is fun to read! You have great rhyme and a moral to the story here! LOL I grew up on cowboy stories and lived on a ranch for sometime. I can almost hear a tune in my head when I read this.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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This is fun to read! You have great rhyme and a moral to the story here! LOL I grew up on cowboy stories and lived on a ranch for sometime. I can almost hear a tune in my head when I read this.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm so glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. A few people have said they could hear a tune. I have zero talent for music, but maybe I should find someone to write one. Thanks for this wonderful review.
Comment from Charmane
Very good western entertainment and revolving action! Energetic and robust play on words. This write keeps the reader excited and in anticipation of the next action packed scene. Just awesome!
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Very good western entertainment and revolving action! Energetic and robust play on words. This write keeps the reader excited and in anticipation of the next action packed scene. Just awesome!
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Thanks for the six! I'm so glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. I'm trying to find some more adventures for him. If you like you can check out 'Jerry Jing-Jang and the Cattle Rustlers' in my portfolio.
Comment from tinams
This is a lovely story. I was raised on westerns and this poem is in the classic western format so far as storyline and content go.There is great flow and rhythm in each line :) Tina
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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This is a lovely story. I was raised on westerns and this poem is in the classic western format so far as storyline and content go.There is great flow and rhythm in each line :) Tina
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this western story poem. It was fun to write. Thanks for this wonderful review.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Cindy! I love the name Jerry Jing-Jang. I can just hear his spurs jing-janging lol. This is a lovely cowboy story. I envy you having a dad to tell such tales to you as a child. Definitely got my cowboy fix with this one :)
"Don't always manage too think very clear." - I thought it should be "to" and not "too".
I wonder if you could break this up into stanzas. It was hard on my eyes to read the lines so close together. Could be just me.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Hi Cindy! I love the name Jerry Jing-Jang. I can just hear his spurs jing-janging lol. This is a lovely cowboy story. I envy you having a dad to tell such tales to you as a child. Definitely got my cowboy fix with this one :)
"Don't always manage too think very clear." - I thought it should be "to" and not "too".
I wonder if you could break this up into stanzas. It was hard on my eyes to read the lines so close together. Could be just me.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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That typo is fixed now. Thanks for catching it. I'm thinking of breaking it up. I just have to figure out where. A few people thought it would be easier to read that way, and I want it to be kid-friendly. Thanks for this wonderful review.
Comment from gifted$1
What a great way to preserve the stories your dad told you as a kid. I liked the rhyme and flow to this poem. Very descriptive of the old west. It's not easy to create a poem this long and hold onto all the rhyming, so great job with that! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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What a great way to preserve the stories your dad told you as a kid. I liked the rhyme and flow to this poem. Very descriptive of the old west. It's not easy to create a poem this long and hold onto all the rhyming, so great job with that! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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It took a while to write this one, but it was fun. Thanks for the great review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Aaaahhhh what a joy and pleasure to read Cindy. Love his name: Jerry Jing-Jang, inspired. Your father obviously had a way with words that you have inherited.
Your poem was cleaver, witty and oh so original. The flow and use of rhyming was excellent all the way through.
A very worthy six in my opinion.
Thank you for sharing. A great read, Pete
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Aaaahhhh what a joy and pleasure to read Cindy. Love his name: Jerry Jing-Jang, inspired. Your father obviously had a way with words that you have inherited.
Your poem was cleaver, witty and oh so original. The flow and use of rhyming was excellent all the way through.
A very worthy six in my opinion.
Thank you for sharing. A great read, Pete
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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If only he'd written some of it down! I've had to make up a lot of new stuff. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the six! If you like you can check out 'Jerry Jing-Jang and the Cattle Rustlers' in my portfolio.
