Eternity
Time stands still19 total reviews
Comment from fluffnstuff
you are my well...and this i will not dwell...upon in which you quench a thirst like rain to a wanderer in the desert...nice write, love your poetry which shows your heart.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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you are my well...and this i will not dwell...upon in which you quench a thirst like rain to a wanderer in the desert...nice write, love your poetry which shows your heart.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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wow thanks for that great review.
Comment from guinea
Yes when one dies here on earth time stops for them. They no longer age. But their soul lives forever. What is eternity for a soul? Forever with the Lord if they were ready to go.
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Yes when one dies here on earth time stops for them. They no longer age. But their soul lives forever. What is eternity for a soul? Forever with the Lord if they were ready to go.
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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thank you
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made skillful use of every syllable in this powerful, thought-provoking poem. "Freezing the hour glasses"--extremely effective!
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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You have made skillful use of every syllable in this powerful, thought-provoking poem. "Freezing the hour glasses"--extremely effective!
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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thank you.
Comment from Crackerberries
Well I read this and thought, that is definitely one way to put it...very well done and excellent background colors and artwork that you have used!
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Well I read this and thought, that is definitely one way to put it...very well done and excellent background colors and artwork that you have used!
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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thank you
Comment from oozer
Hi keimosobie, long time no see! I like this 5-7-5 very much
only there is a syllable short in second line. Your mention of freezing is good and it reminds me of how we sometimes hear of a someone's clock stopping at the exact time of a friend's death... so I thought of: 'Freezing the hands of the clock' for your second line. What you think? Take care, my friend
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Hi keimosobie, long time no see! I like this 5-7-5 very much
only there is a syllable short in second line. Your mention of freezing is good and it reminds me of how we sometimes hear of a someone's clock stopping at the exact time of a friend's death... so I thought of: 'Freezing the hands of the clock' for your second line. What you think? Take care, my friend
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Thank you for the thought but our is pronounced with two syllables in America I know some dictionaries say diffrent.
Comment from adewpearl
Keimosobie, I get a 5 syllable count for lines one and three, but I keep counting 6 syllables in your middle line
free/zing/the/hour/glas/ses - OK - I just figured out you must be pronouncing hour as two syllables :-)
I like the evocative scene you create of hour glasses stopping as someone's heartbeat stops
a most thoughtful look at the passage from life to death :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Keimosobie, I get a 5 syllable count for lines one and three, but I keep counting 6 syllables in your middle line
free/zing/the/hour/glas/ses - OK - I just figured out you must be pronouncing hour as two syllables :-)
I like the evocative scene you create of hour glasses stopping as someone's heartbeat stops
a most thoughtful look at the passage from life to death :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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thanks.
Comment from gazzagodbod
great little poem this one my friend so well written and the pictures perfect, thank you fellow registered nurse i loved it gazza
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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great little poem this one my friend so well written and the pictures perfect, thank you fellow registered nurse i loved it gazza
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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thanks
Comment from Lilmerely
Really good! I like the topic you use and the words you use to explain it. Really well written. I also like the drawing you did. Even though it is a small poem you can picture what you are saying in your mind while reading it.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Really good! I like the topic you use and the words you use to explain it. Really well written. I also like the drawing you did. Even though it is a small poem you can picture what you are saying in your mind while reading it.
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Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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thanks
Comment from Meta~Mark
WOW, I like the artwok..its like a closed gate and heaven awaits.. time stands still as the body stops to exist.
Thanks for sharing, I like this poem!
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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WOW, I like the artwok..its like a closed gate and heaven awaits.. time stands still as the body stops to exist.
Thanks for sharing, I like this poem!
Comment Written 09-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Chris Tee
This is also an poem of wisdom here of course when the heart stops beating we die and might go to heaven. This is to form and the syllables are counting correct. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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This is also an poem of wisdom here of course when the heart stops beating we die and might go to heaven. This is to form and the syllables are counting correct. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Thanks Chris
