The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "The Deposion Part 2"A family learns their father is a serial killer
21 total reviews
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hello,
Whoa!
I like his grandmother and Angela.
Interesting chapter.
Moving and sad
Good dialogue and description.
Good way to end the chapter too.
I didn't see any spags.
Katie
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Hello,
Whoa!
I like his grandmother and Angela.
Interesting chapter.
Moving and sad
Good dialogue and description.
Good way to end the chapter too.
I didn't see any spags.
Katie
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Thanks, I like the Grandmother and Angela too. They make quite a pair.
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You're welcome.
:)
Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for the specifics about a grand jury and the fact that Grandmother did not know she was going to testify for one. I liked the comic relief of the jello and pudding cups and the touching name of "Little Flower." You are such a wonderful storyteller--you make us care about all of your characters. -Joan
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thanks for the specifics about a grand jury and the fact that Grandmother did not know she was going to testify for one. I liked the comic relief of the jello and pudding cups and the touching name of "Little Flower." You are such a wonderful storyteller--you make us care about all of your characters. -Joan
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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I am really quite fond of Grandmother. I am pleased you enjoyed this one and found the jell-o scene amusing.
Comment from Alaskastory
'The Deposion Part 2' is so thorough in elaborating on the root story and shows the characters in believable dialogue.
need quote mark: '......the blame belongs to Dark.(")
need a hyphen: '..twenty(-) three people.
Super chapter, Sasha.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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'The Deposion Part 2' is so thorough in elaborating on the root story and shows the characters in believable dialogue.
need quote mark: '......the blame belongs to Dark.(")
need a hyphen: '..twenty(-) three people.
Super chapter, Sasha.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. I am so pleased you enjoyed this chapter and felt it deserved 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from CHarte
I love how strong a person Alfina is. It is a joy to watch her grow as a character with each chapter.
Grandmother nodded and grabbed a third cup of pudding downing (it) as fast as she could.
Collette
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I love how strong a person Alfina is. It is a joy to watch her grow as a character with each chapter.
Grandmother nodded and grabbed a third cup of pudding downing (it) as fast as she could.
Collette
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Alfina is amazing and even more so than you reallize.
Comment from Readywriter52
I think Alfia will do fine in front of the grand jury. She might have problems dealing with the language and modern life, but she has spunk. She had to have spunk in order to have survied Dark. She has no self-pity and takes life as it is handed to her. What she lacks in knowledge, she makes up for in courage.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I think Alfia will do fine in front of the grand jury. She might have problems dealing with the language and modern life, but she has spunk. She had to have spunk in order to have survied Dark. She has no self-pity and takes life as it is handed to her. What she lacks in knowledge, she makes up for in courage.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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You describe her perfectly. I am sure she will do just fine.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sasha,
Alfina talking about the event she witnessed brought a lump to my throat. She is painfully honest, like a guileless child. I hope she can get through the questions she will be asked when she is ion the stand. I am sure John's attorney will not cut her any slack. I hope James can prepare her well enough that she won't fall apart. I am looking forward to the next chapter....well done...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Hi Sasha,
Alfina talking about the event she witnessed brought a lump to my throat. She is painfully honest, like a guileless child. I hope she can get through the questions she will be asked when she is ion the stand. I am sure John's attorney will not cut her any slack. I hope James can prepare her well enough that she won't fall apart. I am looking forward to the next chapter....well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Defense attorney's can be very nasty. James will do his best to prepare Grandmother for her testimony.
Comment from psalmist
Another great chapter. While I certainly understand James's concern for his grandmother, I think she is much stronger than he thinks she is. Having survived all she has, and still be able to go on takes fortitude and courage.. I love this character. Well done. Linda
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Another great chapter. While I certainly understand James's concern for his grandmother, I think she is much stronger than he thinks she is. Having survived all she has, and still be able to go on takes fortitude and courage.. I love this character. Well done. Linda
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I love Grandmother too, and you are right James has yet to see how strong she really is and how smart too. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a tale the grandmother told...
and poor Angela... I don't know which
woman I feel most sorry for... both
have been through such a lot.
outside world. ["]Dark controlled - lose
After she has her surgery(,) I want - add
When Alexandru dig the hold - hole
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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What a tale the grandmother told...
and poor Angela... I don't know which
woman I feel most sorry for... both
have been through such a lot.
outside world. ["]Dark controlled - lose
After she has her surgery(,) I want - add
When Alexandru dig the hold - hole
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for catching the spags. Yes, poor grandmother has been through hell and Angela is an angel to not feel any animosity toward her.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
Ummm. This section is really starting to take off. I fear that the attorneys are about to move in and make mince meat of the family.
Keep em' coming, Smurphy.
Ron
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Hi Smurphy
Ummm. This section is really starting to take off. I fear that the attorneys are about to move in and make mince meat of the family.
Keep em' coming, Smurphy.
Ron
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Ah yes, the attorneys. That is when things really get nasty. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from rtobaygo
EXCELLENT WRITING. YOUR CHARACTERS MOVED THE STORY'S PLOT ALONG, GOOD DIALOGUE, ESPECIALLY THE GRANDMOTHER'S. CHANGE OF SCENES GOOD, AGAIN ESPECIALLY WHERE THE GRANDMOTHER WAS EATING THE JELLO, ECT. GOOD TENSION IN BOTH SCENES. NO SPAGS. WELL WRITTEN!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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EXCELLENT WRITING. YOUR CHARACTERS MOVED THE STORY'S PLOT ALONG, GOOD DIALOGUE, ESPECIALLY THE GRANDMOTHER'S. CHANGE OF SCENES GOOD, AGAIN ESPECIALLY WHERE THE GRANDMOTHER WAS EATING THE JELLO, ECT. GOOD TENSION IN BOTH SCENES. NO SPAGS. WELL WRITTEN!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your glowing review and awesome 6 stars. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.