The English Assignment
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "To the throne"The author tells a tale how he tried to better him
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Comment from Frank Atwood
Interesting dream and story. We all have visions and truths of from where we came from and to where we shall return. The figures in your dream who you perceive as God is the Father you follow, and yes our souls are always afraid to give themselves up to be humbled or mellowed by anyone. Thus that is why the scripture, 'The meek shall inherit the earth.' is so descriptive of the only true Father. Many never find humility or the strength to humble themselves which changes the soul from a mortal soul to an immortal soul, in the blink of an eye. The one thing missing in your dream was the feeling of love within or around the people in it. You ate and made yourself full of it's pleasure, thus you are of this world and upon resurrection shall return from where you came. This world of men. Until one seeks, finds and feels the love of God the Father, ones soul shall never change but shall stay the same. I've been in my Father's light and heard his voice call my name and the love connected to both of them, I asked and requested to come home, but it wasn't my time. Thus the rest of my life has changed for the better. Not only has my heart and mind changed, but so has my soul, and thus I'm a fool among men and yet free of this worlds laws and rituals that binds one's soul to this world in which it will return, life after life after life, until the chain is broken through meekness, mellowness and humbleness which comes from a loving Father who few find let alone seek. For so many are to busy trying to fit into this world and worry not about the next.
Your truth deserves 6 stars and hope I haven't offended you. I felt the urge to share my truth which is not the same as yours, just so you know we are all on the same journey. The only differences is how we see ourselves and wish to interpret truth. We shall all be resurrected yet few shall find immortality for as you yourself said, one hates to give up ones soul. It's to who we give it up to that matters. Hang on to yours a bit longer, till you find yourself surrounded in love, then give it up and begin to learn as can't be taught by men.
God bless. Keep up the great writing.
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Interesting dream and story. We all have visions and truths of from where we came from and to where we shall return. The figures in your dream who you perceive as God is the Father you follow, and yes our souls are always afraid to give themselves up to be humbled or mellowed by anyone. Thus that is why the scripture, 'The meek shall inherit the earth.' is so descriptive of the only true Father. Many never find humility or the strength to humble themselves which changes the soul from a mortal soul to an immortal soul, in the blink of an eye. The one thing missing in your dream was the feeling of love within or around the people in it. You ate and made yourself full of it's pleasure, thus you are of this world and upon resurrection shall return from where you came. This world of men. Until one seeks, finds and feels the love of God the Father, ones soul shall never change but shall stay the same. I've been in my Father's light and heard his voice call my name and the love connected to both of them, I asked and requested to come home, but it wasn't my time. Thus the rest of my life has changed for the better. Not only has my heart and mind changed, but so has my soul, and thus I'm a fool among men and yet free of this worlds laws and rituals that binds one's soul to this world in which it will return, life after life after life, until the chain is broken through meekness, mellowness and humbleness which comes from a loving Father who few find let alone seek. For so many are to busy trying to fit into this world and worry not about the next.
Your truth deserves 6 stars and hope I haven't offended you. I felt the urge to share my truth which is not the same as yours, just so you know we are all on the same journey. The only differences is how we see ourselves and wish to interpret truth. We shall all be resurrected yet few shall find immortality for as you yourself said, one hates to give up ones soul. It's to who we give it up to that matters. Hang on to yours a bit longer, till you find yourself surrounded in love, then give it up and begin to learn as can't be taught by men.
God bless. Keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 01-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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thanks for the six stars and this inspiring review. I did feel the love. I also got a warning.
Comment from Dukeagles
I too was a "good Catholic" boy. The reference helps to put some kind of context to what follows. This chapter seems to amble through undefined time periods that are a bit confusing. We find out at the end that "...it's been a long time since this happened,.." but it would help to understand if we are comparing adolescence to adulthood, or some other time frame. The "God stuff" is funny, but I think was not fully taken advantage of in a satirical sense. Possibly a missed opportunity.
I have reconsidered some of my comments above because of the excerpt nature of these words, which accounts for some of my disorientation.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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I too was a "good Catholic" boy. The reference helps to put some kind of context to what follows. This chapter seems to amble through undefined time periods that are a bit confusing. We find out at the end that "...it's been a long time since this happened,.." but it would help to understand if we are comparing adolescence to adulthood, or some other time frame. The "God stuff" is funny, but I think was not fully taken advantage of in a satirical sense. Possibly a missed opportunity.
I have reconsidered some of my comments above because of the excerpt nature of these words, which accounts for some of my disorientation.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Well it is a book and if you read the book it would put things in context. This is the way it happened. I did not embellish or add any details that I didn't remember. 3 stars is a little harsh I think. But welcome to fanstory just the same. Tim
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Good points. Unfair to judge these words as only a partial sample from your book. I added comments to my review,and upped the grade.
Comment from Aarondodd1989
Interesting piece. i'm not a fan of highly religious content but this was fictional enough that I could take it. There is could character delopment and each on, even God, is believable. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Interesting piece. i'm not a fan of highly religious content but this was fictional enough that I could take it. There is could character delopment and each on, even God, is believable. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janie King
Very interesting...so this is a writing assignment? It is non-fiction...I'd say you had an encounter with God, at least in a way that you understood,,and God wishes that we understand so that we cna do what needs to be done, in His way. God bless.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Very interesting...so this is a writing assignment? It is non-fiction...I'd say you had an encounter with God, at least in a way that you understood,,and God wishes that we understand so that we cna do what needs to be done, in His way. God bless.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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thank you for the review and the encouragement.
Comment from abbasjoy
This is an incredible story, but not unbelievable. I am glad you came to the realization that you can only get to the Father through His Son Jesus.It is a well written encounter, very descriptive detailed.
I noticed that some places you had God as god, not sure if that was just an oversight. There are also a few Typos (than instead of then)
Good job.
This is well
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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This is an incredible story, but not unbelievable. I am glad you came to the realization that you can only get to the Father through His Son Jesus.It is a well written encounter, very descriptive detailed.
I noticed that some places you had God as god, not sure if that was just an oversight. There are also a few Typos (than instead of then)
Good job.
This is well
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Permelia
Wow! I'd say God gave you quite a dream in order to answer your questions and show you what offended God. You must be greatly loved!
Someone came in and handed god a - God needs a capital
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Wow! I'd say God gave you quite a dream in order to answer your questions and show you what offended God. You must be greatly loved!
Someone came in and handed god a - God needs a capital
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Tonulak
This was very imaginative andit's always interesting to speculate on these things. It was told in straight forward, unembellished language from a personal point of view. An engaging write.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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This was very imaginative andit's always interesting to speculate on these things. It was told in straight forward, unembellished language from a personal point of view. An engaging write.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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thank you
Comment from c_lucas
Dream sequences are very hard to write. Out of the body experiences are harder. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Dream sequences are very hard to write. Out of the body experiences are harder. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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thank you
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You're welcome, Keim. Charlie
Comment from elgone
Interesting tale, whether it is true or not. There are some things to look at, int he text, mostly spacing issues.
I said out loud,( )"I know the only - add space
I was set down on the ground, - new line before this to space new paragraph properly
then said,( )"Well he made - add space
said,( )"I still have - add space
behind me (than) said - sb then
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Interesting tale, whether it is true or not. There are some things to look at, int he text, mostly spacing issues.
I said out loud,( )"I know the only - add space
I was set down on the ground, - new line before this to space new paragraph properly
then said,( )"Well he made - add space
said,( )"I still have - add space
behind me (than) said - sb then
E
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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thank you
Comment from gazzagodbod
great chapter my friend i enjoyed reading it and the did it happen or didnt it feeling fabulous thank you so much for sharing gazza
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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great chapter my friend i enjoyed reading it and the did it happen or didnt it feeling fabulous thank you so much for sharing gazza
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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thank you
