The English Assignment
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "The Devil lives in Mastic part D."The author tells a tale how he tried to better him
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Comment from adewpearl
hitch hiking - hitchhiking
how I aquired the cross - acquired
I had been living in West Hampton, and I was renting - add comma
He was pretty much homeless, and I would get - add comma
get him an apartment somewhere, and pay - drop the comma
I did my best to help him, and I taught - add comma
he almost never showered, or had - drop comma
he knew and old cemetery - an old
They said it wasn't illegal, but - add comma
When he first gave it to me out of the can, - add comma
folded me in half, almost breaking - add comma
When I got back to the blanket, - add comma
"He told you that?" I asked - I added the question mark
I got angry with God and Jesus, and I know - add comma
It seriously isn't against the law to rob graves there???? Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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hitch hiking - hitchhiking
how I aquired the cross - acquired
I had been living in West Hampton, and I was renting - add comma
He was pretty much homeless, and I would get - add comma
get him an apartment somewhere, and pay - drop the comma
I did my best to help him, and I taught - add comma
he almost never showered, or had - drop comma
he knew and old cemetery - an old
They said it wasn't illegal, but - add comma
When he first gave it to me out of the can, - add comma
folded me in half, almost breaking - add comma
When I got back to the blanket, - add comma
"He told you that?" I asked - I added the question mark
I got angry with God and Jesus, and I know - add comma
It seriously isn't against the law to rob graves there???? Brooke
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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not if they are over 100 y/o
thanks for the corrections
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It's a miss demeanor. You can be fined for any damage you due or the cost to re bury the victims. Thanks for the corrections.
Comment from dportwood
keimosobie,
Wow! He should have never trusted Billy. Too bad he was led to a point where he could curse God and Jesus. Loss is loss.
Duane
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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keimosobie,
Wow! He should have never trusted Billy. Too bad he was led to a point where he could curse God and Jesus. Loss is loss.
Duane
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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thank you
Comment from dutchess2014
this is some really good stuff. i cant believe they were involved in grave robbing. thats pretty spooky. I hope it all turns out okay.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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this is some really good stuff. i cant believe they were involved in grave robbing. thats pretty spooky. I hope it all turns out okay.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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thank you
Comment from Flamingbush
This story sure has lots of surprises. You've got quite a flair for building up the suspense. I never know quite what's going to happen next. One really has to wonder about Billy.
I think "wholly" Spirit should be "Holy" Spirit, unless it's a play on words I don't know about.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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This story sure has lots of surprises. You've got quite a flair for building up the suspense. I never know quite what's going to happen next. One really has to wonder about Billy.
I think "wholly" Spirit should be "Holy" Spirit, unless it's a play on words I don't know about.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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thank you
Comment from inkedone
Some of the best writing I've read in a long time. While I am new to writing, I am an avid reader. I know good literature when I see it. This is it!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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Some of the best writing I've read in a long time. While I am new to writing, I am an avid reader. I know good literature when I see it. This is it!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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Thank you. This is fun. I sure appreciate the ratting.
