The Heir Apparent
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Comment from tinams
This is such a heart-wrenching story. So well written that I really wanted to cry. Your writing flows so well and conveys emotion so completely, I really enjoyed the read :) Tina
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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This is such a heart-wrenching story. So well written that I really wanted to cry. Your writing flows so well and conveys emotion so completely, I really enjoyed the read :) Tina
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Thank you very much.
Comment from missy98writer
Sasha,
Chapter 46 "Making Vegetable Soup" is magnificent written with amazing imagery as the chapter plays in the readers head. I immensely enjoy your great narrative voice, very good dialogue and excellent detailed writing. You brought me to tears as I read it near the conclusion of your chapter. I would recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers to ready. Thank you for entertaining me in with your story telling. Keep on writing your entertaining book chapters with a creative pen. Rock on, my friend. Lovely day to you...Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Sasha,
Chapter 46 "Making Vegetable Soup" is magnificent written with amazing imagery as the chapter plays in the readers head. I immensely enjoy your great narrative voice, very good dialogue and excellent detailed writing. You brought me to tears as I read it near the conclusion of your chapter. I would recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers to ready. Thank you for entertaining me in with your story telling. Keep on writing your entertaining book chapters with a creative pen. Rock on, my friend. Lovely day to you...Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from psalmist
This is so heart-wrenching. I wanted to cry, too. James should be a teacher, he has a wonderful way of explaining and simplifying things for others. Also, for someone who is supposed to be socially awkward, he is surprisingly empathetic. I feel for Alfina and the ordeal facing her. Linda
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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This is so heart-wrenching. I wanted to cry, too. James should be a teacher, he has a wonderful way of explaining and simplifying things for others. Also, for someone who is supposed to be socially awkward, he is surprisingly empathetic. I feel for Alfina and the ordeal facing her. Linda
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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I guess when the pressure's on he does okay. Thanks. I m so pleased you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from Alaskastory
'Making Vegetable Soup' is quite a chapter that cleverly gives examples of the law and court procedures in a way his grandmother could comprehend. Comparing that to making soup is brilliant! The whole chapter is very well done, Sasha.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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'Making Vegetable Soup' is quite a chapter that cleverly gives examples of the law and court procedures in a way his grandmother could comprehend. Comparing that to making soup is brilliant! The whole chapter is very well done, Sasha.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thank. I am so pleased you you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sasha,
I am sleepy and should be in bed but I had to read this story first. I feel so sorry for
Alfina, she must be so scared. She has been thrust into a world she knows nothing about. James is so kind to her and whatever she has to go through he will be at her side.
This is another astounding chapter....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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Hi Sasha,
I am sleepy and should be in bed but I had to read this story first. I feel so sorry for
Alfina, she must be so scared. She has been thrust into a world she knows nothing about. James is so kind to her and whatever she has to go through he will be at her side.
This is another astounding chapter....blessings, chey
Comment Written 18-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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She has so much to learn after a lifetime of living in the woods. Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from bob cullen
Your writing is superb and your characters are rich in detail.
The dialogue adds credibility to the situation and fits the circumstances.
This story goes from strength to strength, you are a masterful writer and one who I'm certain inspires others on this site
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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Your writing is superb and your characters are rich in detail.
The dialogue adds credibility to the situation and fits the circumstances.
This story goes from strength to strength, you are a masterful writer and one who I'm certain inspires others on this site
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2012
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Thank you very much. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from MumEsGirl
I have only read about two other chapters of this work. It is so well written that I have been able to follow quite easily.
It is quite conversational in parts in a way that makes ther reader want to hear more.
Hugs
kate
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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I have only read about two other chapters of this work. It is so well written that I have been able to follow quite easily.
It is quite conversational in parts in a way that makes ther reader want to hear more.
Hugs
kate
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thank you very much. I am so pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Readywriter52
James seems to be dong a good job in explaining the situation to his grandmother. He doesn't talk to her like she was a child. He tried to explain the situation in terms she could understand. She probably doesn't know much about Charles' father because his grandfather took him from her at birth.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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James seems to be dong a good job in explaining the situation to his grandmother. He doesn't talk to her like she was a child. He tried to explain the situation in terms she could understand. She probably doesn't know much about Charles' father because his grandfather took him from her at birth.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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That is correct, she knows very little about him. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'd give you a sixe this deserves, so well told and presented as all your chapters are, but site won't allow.
Grand[e]mother, think of - lose "e"
Margaret
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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I'd give you a sixe this deserves, so well told and presented as all your chapters are, but site won't allow.
Grand[e]mother, think of - lose "e"
Margaret
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am so pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Joan E.
Clever title and addition of a "love interest" with the return of Rachael. James' analogy about the law and soup is excellent, and the ending of the chapter is moving. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Clever title and addition of a "love interest" with the return of Rachael. James' analogy about the law and soup is excellent, and the ending of the chapter is moving. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2012
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Thanks. I had fun with this one.