The Heir Apparent
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
Another great chapter. Now it appears certain that Grandmother's testimont before a jury will put more nails in john Mathews coffin.
One question/ Did James misspeak when he said, I paused to take another sip of milk. "I honestly think Dad thinks Grandmother is dead. I also think that Marie Anne was Dad's first victim and the only one he knew." Wasn't Dark his first murder and another victim that Dad knew?
Love and Irish Hugs for you again.
Roger
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2012
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Hi Valerie:)
Another great chapter. Now it appears certain that Grandmother's testimont before a jury will put more nails in john Mathews coffin.
One question/ Did James misspeak when he said, I paused to take another sip of milk. "I honestly think Dad thinks Grandmother is dead. I also think that Marie Anne was Dad's first victim and the only one he knew." Wasn't Dark his first murder and another victim that Dad knew?
Love and Irish Hugs for you again.
Roger
Comment Written 13-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2012
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Yes, but I was referring to the Belltown murders. I should go back and clarify that. Thanks for pointing that out.
Comment from psalmist
This chapter made me smile. I find Angela's character to be true to her name, an angel. We need more forgiving, compassionate people like her in our world. I also like that rather than turn away in disgust and horror, James has embraced his grandmother, even taken pride in looking somewhat like her. Well done. Linda
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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This chapter made me smile. I find Angela's character to be true to her name, an angel. We need more forgiving, compassionate people like her in our world. I also like that rather than turn away in disgust and horror, James has embraced his grandmother, even taken pride in looking somewhat like her. Well done. Linda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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Thank you. I wanted to bring something positive into the dark story and Angela was the perfect person to use to help the family recover from the tragedy they have endured. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
I totally wish I had an endless supply of sixes so I could
rate all of your writings with them as this is so deserving
of one here....The flow of this write is so progressive that
it makes me hunger for more right then and their,never wanting to stop reading it because it frees me from my own
life causing an interesting restfullness within my real world of chaotic mess....So well done my friend,so very well done....Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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I totally wish I had an endless supply of sixes so I could
rate all of your writings with them as this is so deserving
of one here....The flow of this write is so progressive that
it makes me hunger for more right then and their,never wanting to stop reading it because it frees me from my own
life causing an interesting restfullness within my real world of chaotic mess....So well done my friend,so very well done....Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 12-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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Angela is just what this family need. She is such a breath of fresh air. They have been through so much I through someone like Angela was need to show them there still are loving and kind people in the world.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hello,
Excellent chapter.
Interesting dialogue.
Interesting developments as well.
So many pieces coming together.
I also like the way you ended this chapter as well.
Good job.
Katie
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Hello,
Excellent chapter.
Interesting dialogue.
Interesting developments as well.
So many pieces coming together.
I also like the way you ended this chapter as well.
Good job.
Katie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Mom needs to meet grandmother, I think it will do her a lot of good. Glad you liked this one.
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Yes. I think you're right.
:O
Comment from Alaskastory
'Putting The Puzzle Together' is a chapter that shows promising progress with moving the case to trial. Good dialogue between James and Mr. Hurley, Sasha.
add is: "That (is) a question we will have to ask her.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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'Putting The Puzzle Together' is a chapter that shows promising progress with moving the case to trial. Good dialogue between James and Mr. Hurley, Sasha.
add is: "That (is) a question we will have to ask her.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Thanks very much. I am pleased you enjoyed this one.
Comment from light
Sasha,
I haven't been on FanStory as often but was delighted to see your post. As usual it is intriguing and keeps the interest.
Elaine
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Sasha,
I haven't been on FanStory as often but was delighted to see your post. As usual it is intriguing and keeps the interest.
Elaine
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Thank you very much. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is not only a good post, but it was enjoyable to read. It brings hope to this whole novel. I am glad I was able to read it.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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This is not only a good post, but it was enjoyable to read. It brings hope to this whole novel. I am glad I was able to read it.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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I am so pleased you liked this one.
Comment from missy98writer
Sasha,
Angela and Alfina have surprisingly become close allies. This is a short chapter that's magnificantly written. I immensely enjoy your great narrative voice and excellent detailed writing. Your story paints strong imagery in the readers head as the chapter unfolds. I'd recommend chapter forty-three to others to reviewers as a 'must' read. I bid you a teriffic Tuesday. By the way, I penned a poem in your honor. Check out my latest two postings. Love ya.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Sasha,
Angela and Alfina have surprisingly become close allies. This is a short chapter that's magnificantly written. I immensely enjoy your great narrative voice and excellent detailed writing. Your story paints strong imagery in the readers head as the chapter unfolds. I'd recommend chapter forty-three to others to reviewers as a 'must' read. I bid you a teriffic Tuesday. By the way, I penned a poem in your honor. Check out my latest two postings. Love ya.
Melissa.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Thanks. I am thrilled you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
Another well written and interesting chapter. I think James may become the victim of an ulcer. The fear and anger hits his gut with vengeance. I know how that feels as I tend to keep troubles, grief and fear deep inside me and that is the makings of an ulcer! Every time I read a chapter in this book I can't wait to see what happens next and this one is no exception. Well done...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Hi Smurph,
Another well written and interesting chapter. I think James may become the victim of an ulcer. The fear and anger hits his gut with vengeance. I know how that feels as I tend to keep troubles, grief and fear deep inside me and that is the makings of an ulcer! Every time I read a chapter in this book I can't wait to see what happens next and this one is no exception. Well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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If anyo9ne has earned an ulcer, it certainly is James. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from RebelRose
Another great chapter. GThis is such an interesting book. I am thoroughly enjoying it. Angela is such an angel and such a help in bringing grandmother into this century.
For some reason, your author's notes are all messed up. Guess Evil Eddie is up to his tricks again.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Another great chapter. GThis is such an interesting book. I am thoroughly enjoying it. Angela is such an angel and such a help in bringing grandmother into this century.
For some reason, your author's notes are all messed up. Guess Evil Eddie is up to his tricks again.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Yes,Evil Eddie is always messing with my nots.....I'll try to fix it. I am so pleased you liked this story. I just love Angela, she is a true angel.