Idol Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Strangers Stalking in the Night"Based on personal African experience via Hollywood
3 total reviews
Comment from tmwood400
I enjoyed the energy, the imagery, and the flow, but was confused by what was actually taking place. There is a lot of back and forth between telling the story, and asides to the reader, a complete jumble of past, present, dream state, etc... a lot going on, not sure where it is going.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed the energy, the imagery, and the flow, but was confused by what was actually taking place. There is a lot of back and forth between telling the story, and asides to the reader, a complete jumble of past, present, dream state, etc... a lot going on, not sure where it is going.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Suggest you just "go with the flow" as its all in fun. It might help to read the preceding 2 chapters but might not either. Thanks for reading and commenting ... Dennis
Comment from ajdevore
Your old lady in the nursing home metaphor is bit of a stretch. You can do better. You have done better. I think you take the King Solomon's Mine bit a little too far. We start to wonder if it's a dream or you morphed into another story.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Your old lady in the nursing home metaphor is bit of a stretch. You can do better. You have done better. I think you take the King Solomon's Mine bit a little too far. We start to wonder if it's a dream or you morphed into another story.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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If there's a better there has to be a worse, right?
Comment from FlorrieFan
Great humor! Great story. Great setting. I love the feel of this place with its pig sties, run-down hotel, and jungle.
The puns and one-liners never stop!
And at the same time the story is going somewhere.
Good writing and great wit!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Great humor! Great story. Great setting. I love the feel of this place with its pig sties, run-down hotel, and jungle.
The puns and one-liners never stop!
And at the same time the story is going somewhere.
Good writing and great wit!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Alas, I know not where as of yet! Thanks for your confidence however!
