Change of Heart
Life is sooooo complicated.22 total reviews
Comment from ajdevore
I'm laughing to loud to review this. Okay, I'm in control of my fingers again. Great job, great picture great contest entry, good luck!! LOL Anna
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2012
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I'm laughing to loud to review this. Okay, I'm in control of my fingers again. Great job, great picture great contest entry, good luck!! LOL Anna
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, Anna. I'm delighted you enjoyed.
Comment from kchitti
i think to avoid confusion, you may just want to use the word 'row' instead of 'murder', but that's up to you, ha.
I think your story would also be helped if you at least mentioned who he is jilting. is it another man? a woman? maybe he could not meet their gaze before asking Bill, or work in a reference somehow. just an idea. overall you did well. hard to tell a story in a few words. good luck in teh contest
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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i think to avoid confusion, you may just want to use the word 'row' instead of 'murder', but that's up to you, ha.
I think your story would also be helped if you at least mentioned who he is jilting. is it another man? a woman? maybe he could not meet their gaze before asking Bill, or work in a reference somehow. just an idea. overall you did well. hard to tell a story in a few words. good luck in teh contest
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you. 'Murder' was one of the required words, and I just tried to use it in a unique way. Thanks again, X
Comment from Bobbi22
Why is it that men only realize what they want when they get to or almost get to the altar? In this case, was it too much to drink the night before? Well written flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Why is it that men only realize what they want when they get to or almost get to the altar? In this case, was it too much to drink the night before? Well written flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from Spitfire
Very clever. Ending unexpected. Good build-up as all men suffer anxiety before taking the final vows. Liked your use of "murder" and the play on birds of "best man". Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Very clever. Ending unexpected. Good build-up as all men suffer anxiety before taking the final vows. Liked your use of "murder" and the play on birds of "best man". Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Shari. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from mommerry
Tough job getting all those odd words into one understandable story. You got the words in but I didn't really understand the end. I think the word "instead" was what threw me. Nice try
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Tough job getting all those odd words into one understandable story. You got the words in but I didn't really understand the end. I think the word "instead" was what threw me. Nice try
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you. X
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hmmm quite the telling story it is too Author...lol...I am not sure the bride would be happy with the question but it makes for good reading...Oh what drama will be next. lol xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hmmm quite the telling story it is too Author...lol...I am not sure the bride would be happy with the question but it makes for good reading...Oh what drama will be next. lol xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the read and review. X
Comment from ennahanid
I think you rose to the 100 Word Story challenge quite wonderfully. Great and unexpected ending and I am still chuckling over it.
Thank you
Dinah
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I think you rose to the 100 Word Story challenge quite wonderfully. Great and unexpected ending and I am still chuckling over it.
Thank you
Dinah
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Dinah. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from IndianaIrish
Very nicely done, author, with your always unique interpretation of any prompt and your wonderful, memorable ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Indy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Very nicely done, author, with your always unique interpretation of any prompt and your wonderful, memorable ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Indy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thanks, Indy. I'm glad you enjoyed. I'm getting creamed. X
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Now...that was excellent!
And, why do I know that you're a man? I suppose that only a man could have apologize for even the slightest innuendo about homosexuality, even in an artfully created story!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Now...that was excellent!
And, why do I know that you're a man? I suppose that only a man could have apologize for even the slightest innuendo about homosexuality, even in an artfully created story!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Ingrid. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from Judian James
I had never heard of a "murder of crows" but I knew just by that line, who you are mystery writer. The final giveaway was the sensitivity you always show with your unusual, quirky, yet very believable characters. The ending was sad for the bride BUT so right on many levels for Tony, and hopefully for "the best man he'd ever known" Oh, a very cool double entendre by the way! Bravo. You are truly one of a kind, and a skilled one at that! No one would ever guess when reading this, that there were several required words. Excellent as always
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I had never heard of a "murder of crows" but I knew just by that line, who you are mystery writer. The final giveaway was the sensitivity you always show with your unusual, quirky, yet very believable characters. The ending was sad for the bride BUT so right on many levels for Tony, and hopefully for "the best man he'd ever known" Oh, a very cool double entendre by the way! Bravo. You are truly one of a kind, and a skilled one at that! No one would ever guess when reading this, that there were several required words. Excellent as always
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you very much, Jude. I'm delighted that you could recognize me. I must have a style! Thank you again. X
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There's no one like you and you know I like your style. Good Morning from Maine!