Comment from psalmist

Excellent

I really like how you have the family pulling together, even though they are each dealing with their grief and anger in different ways, they are at least looking to each other for strength. I somehow think James' mom is stronger than anyone thinks. Well done. Linda

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

She is carrying a lot of guilt and, yes, very strong.

Comment from Alaskastory

Excellent

'Family Meeting' is a chapter that brings the family together, especially with the mom. I don't see the mom's name as Martha Matthews in your cast of characters, Sasha. You might want to add her.

should the word be 'gypsies'? 'Romany is the language of the [gupsies]gypsies,...

Good chapter! Marie

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

Thanks for pointing out the spags. I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Comment from RebelRose

Excellent

Sounds like James' mother took the story pretty well, I hope Susan does the same. Tellng her while she is still hospitalized is a wise decision. Great chapter.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

Comment from Showboat

Excellent

Hey Sasha,

Great to see another chapter to this saga. I'm enjoying it so much. Didn't see anything to mention or change.

Writing smooth ... oh, somewhere you spelled gypsy wrong. But other than that, clean and smooth!

Thanks for sharing,

Hugs,
Gayle

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012

Thanks, I caught the misspelling. I am pleased you are enjoying this.

Comment from Deejharrington

Excellent

I wanted to give this a six, but I can't get one to appear and I know I have some left.
What an amazing story they have uncovered about the grandfather. I guess James's father came by his inhuman cruelty naturally (if that's possible). I can't wait to hear more about the grandmother and her story of what it was really like. I hope Susan is doing as well as the mother appears to be.
deb

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012

Yes, the father clearly came by his cruel nature from his father's treatment of him. This is often the case. The child is abused and grows up to be the abuser. Although this happens only 8 percent of the time, it has been proven that a child's childhood does too often determine who they will become as an adult. I am so pleased you liked this chapter.

reply by Deejharrington on 01-Apr-2012

It is so hard to break a mold created in childhood. The child either goes one way or way over to the other side, of parenting.:)
deb

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

Sorry I missed a bunch of this and am catching up. You post the chapters too fast and tey are gone by the time I find the time to get to it. LOL. This book is somethingI haven't read before. I saw no nits or spags, good job
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012

Thanks. No apology necessary. I am pleased you enjoyed this chapter.

Comment from Cranial Thinker

Excellent

Wow!!!! Finally things appears to be coming full circle for
this family that has been through so much because of a man
that blatantly chose to express himself in a most brutal
extremely barbaric way,killing little female children for
what amounts to pleasure and the feeling of total control/power over life and death....This chapter made me smile....So well done my friend....Cranial Thinker

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012

Good to hear from you. I am pleased you enjoyed this chapter.

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

4th line paragraph 7: ...g(u)psies....

There is so much in this short chapter... It is such a relief to see Mom recovering and being able to take part in the discussion normally again. This is truly a remarkable story. Giddy

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thank you. I am thrilled you are enjoying this.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

"gypsies" in 7th paragraph spelled wrong

I don't think it needs to be less complicated. Each chapter is a meld of important events unraveling why their father was who he was. It's a good story Smurphy and this rewrite is tighter and more intense than the original. Bravo my friend. It's an amazing story. xoxo deborah

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thank you so much for your positive review.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

this is getting better and better.

Romany is the language of the gupsies, related to Sanskrit, (gypsies?)

"Why would Marie Anne's grandmother want anything to do with the wife of the man who killed her daughter?" (granddaughter?)

Dr. Williams smiled, "Alfina is pretty weak right now. (period after smiles)

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

I caught the others but missed granddaughter.