The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Grandmother Meets Angela"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
James is one very strong person. This continues to be a good read.
The orthopedic surgeon that looked at your foot says it can be partially repaired with surgery. (surgeon who....)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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James is one very strong person. This continues to be a good read.
The orthopedic surgeon that looked at your foot says it can be partially repaired with surgery. (surgeon who....)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag. You have a very good eye.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Love this chapter that it adds to the comfort of the last part of the story. I really feel the empathy between the 2 older women, and feel that the grandmother of James will be okay now for the most part. Giddy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Love this chapter that it adds to the comfort of the last part of the story. I really feel the empathy between the 2 older women, and feel that the grandmother of James will be okay now for the most part. Giddy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Thank you, that was the point of the chapter.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
I am happy to see a new chapter. I realize this is mainly a transition chapter to strengthen the ties between James's grandmother and Angela, who ia helping grandmother adjust to her treatments physical and nutritional.
Now James has to eplain wno grand mother is to the rest of the family.
Very well written as usual.
Love and Irish Hugs, dear friend.
Roger
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Hi Valerie:)
I am happy to see a new chapter. I realize this is mainly a transition chapter to strengthen the ties between James's grandmother and Angela, who ia helping grandmother adjust to her treatments physical and nutritional.
Now James has to eplain wno grand mother is to the rest of the family.
Very well written as usual.
Love and Irish Hugs, dear friend.
Roger
Comment Written 30-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the positive review.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
As usual I must say you are a very prolific writer and I do
so love your style,as while I read your work it feels so much like I am in a theater watching the big screen and this write fits you so well....I am truly enjoying this story very much....Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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As usual I must say you are a very prolific writer and I do
so love your style,as while I read your work it feels so much like I am in a theater watching the big screen and this write fits you so well....I am truly enjoying this story very much....Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 29-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Thank you. I a so pleased you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from Scribelle
This is a remarkable chapter! I expected interactions to go completely differently, yet everything changed when Angela said "Thank you". So many of the little touches throughout the chapter remind me of my mother in her most elderly days, when she sought resolution to relationships. That Grandmother calls Angela her friend, and depends on her to explain what the doctor said is touching beyond what words can convey. I am coming into this book partway, but I am now motivated to read all the previous chapters, too. You show wonderful interactions with believable characters and bring the reader to feel the emotion in the actions. Great read!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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This is a remarkable chapter! I expected interactions to go completely differently, yet everything changed when Angela said "Thank you". So many of the little touches throughout the chapter remind me of my mother in her most elderly days, when she sought resolution to relationships. That Grandmother calls Angela her friend, and depends on her to explain what the doctor said is touching beyond what words can convey. I am coming into this book partway, but I am now motivated to read all the previous chapters, too. You show wonderful interactions with believable characters and bring the reader to feel the emotion in the actions. Great read!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Thank you very much. For what it is worth, it is a fast read and don't worry about reviewing, most of the chapters are now only 2 cents.
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I read because I enjoy someone else's work. If I get points or 2 cents, that's OK. It's the reading of wonderful stories and poems that is most important to me!
Comment from Alaskastory
'Grandmother Meets Angela' is a chapter that shows how clever you are to show Angela's saint-like personality, Sasha. Their conversation was touching.
A really good chapter! Marie
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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'Grandmother Meets Angela' is a chapter that shows how clever you are to show Angela's saint-like personality, Sasha. Their conversation was touching.
A really good chapter! Marie
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I am so pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
Well, poor old granny. What an awful life she's had to endure. And now when things seem to be going right for the family - they find a tumor in her lung!
A really good read.
Ron
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurphy
Well, poor old granny. What an awful life she's had to endure. And now when things seem to be going right for the family - they find a tumor in her lung!
A really good read.
Ron
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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The drama in this book is probably getting a little out of hand. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from hyway94
I thought that I may have missed some of the story. But I guess I didn't. Had to work so here I am trying to catch up. What happens next? I guess that will be up to you. See you at the next chapter.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I thought that I may have missed some of the story. But I guess I didn't. Had to work so here I am trying to catch up. What happens next? I guess that will be up to you. See you at the next chapter.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I hope to post one tomorrow. Glad you liked this one,
Comment from missy98writer
Sasha,
Your latest chapter is exceptionally written giving the reader an emotional jolt. I'm glad Angela and Grandmother Alfina bonded. My heart goes out to Granny. She was forced to be subservient to a psychopath. I have a few chapter of a crime & mystery book about and Ex-FBI Agent & famed Psychologist who worked in the Behavioral Unit of the FBI, you know the department that studies serial killer or a killers behavior. Well she was working on a high profile case when she was kidnapped by the killer. She is tied up and placed in a coffin. For three months she watches him do his evilness, even killing two victims. This sicko doesn't touch her because she's smarter than him and he respects her in a odd way. Well with the help of an undercover hit woman they kill the psycho and both undergo hostage debriefing. I move to several years later and Casey is a Sergeant Sheriff's Deputy and during one of her interrogations of a rapist-killer he gets in her face and she flips out and almost beats the creep to death with a nearby chair. I digress. Your are doing a amazing job writing your serial killer book. I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers. I'd encourage you to keep moving forward with your entertaining story, my friend. I hope to catch your next chapter. Please have a lovely day, my friend. Rock on...Melissa.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Sasha,
Your latest chapter is exceptionally written giving the reader an emotional jolt. I'm glad Angela and Grandmother Alfina bonded. My heart goes out to Granny. She was forced to be subservient to a psychopath. I have a few chapter of a crime & mystery book about and Ex-FBI Agent & famed Psychologist who worked in the Behavioral Unit of the FBI, you know the department that studies serial killer or a killers behavior. Well she was working on a high profile case when she was kidnapped by the killer. She is tied up and placed in a coffin. For three months she watches him do his evilness, even killing two victims. This sicko doesn't touch her because she's smarter than him and he respects her in a odd way. Well with the help of an undercover hit woman they kill the psycho and both undergo hostage debriefing. I move to several years later and Casey is a Sergeant Sheriff's Deputy and during one of her interrogations of a rapist-killer he gets in her face and she flips out and almost beats the creep to death with a nearby chair. I digress. Your are doing a amazing job writing your serial killer book. I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers. I'd encourage you to keep moving forward with your entertaining story, my friend. I hope to catch your next chapter. Please have a lovely day, my friend. Rock on...Melissa.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much for the great review. I am thrilled you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from rtobaygo
I stepped back giving both room to talk with a little privacy. Grandmother smiled, extended her hand, and said,
GOOD DIALOGUE WITH WORD FLOW SMOOTH. YOUR EFFORTS TO SHOW THE DIFFERENT EMOTIONS EXPERIENCED BY DIFFERENT CHARACTERS WAS WELL DONE. SCENE CHANGE WAS FLAWLESS AND YOU USED THE MAIN CHARACTERS, TO MOVE THE NOVELS PLOT ALONG, YOU DID AN EXCELLENT JOB TO SHOW THE MENTAL WORLD GRANDMOTHER LIVED IN.
GOOD JOB!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
"How nice to meet one of James's friend's."(SPACING)
Angela took her hand and said, "I am so pleased to meet you too."
Grandmother seemed sincerely happy to meet Angela. Maybe it was the similarity in their ages. Grandmother giggled and asked, "How do you like my hair? (SPACING)
Yesterday James had them cut it all off
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I stepped back giving both room to talk with a little privacy. Grandmother smiled, extended her hand, and said,
GOOD DIALOGUE WITH WORD FLOW SMOOTH. YOUR EFFORTS TO SHOW THE DIFFERENT EMOTIONS EXPERIENCED BY DIFFERENT CHARACTERS WAS WELL DONE. SCENE CHANGE WAS FLAWLESS AND YOU USED THE MAIN CHARACTERS, TO MOVE THE NOVELS PLOT ALONG, YOU DID AN EXCELLENT JOB TO SHOW THE MENTAL WORLD GRANDMOTHER LIVED IN.
GOOD JOB!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
"How nice to meet one of James's friend's."(SPACING)
Angela took her hand and said, "I am so pleased to meet you too."
Grandmother seemed sincerely happy to meet Angela. Maybe it was the similarity in their ages. Grandmother giggled and asked, "How do you like my hair? (SPACING)
Yesterday James had them cut it all off
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2012
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I'll go back and fix the spacing. I am pleased you enjoyed this chapter.