Secret Stream
an essence poem16 total reviews
Comment from Amy Comstock
You are so right..fate does hide inside our dreams..I never thought of it that way. Thank you for sharing this and good luck in the contest!
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You are so right..fate does hide inside our dreams..I never thought of it that way. Thank you for sharing this and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
Comment from PoesyPoet
I like this little doodle called the essence. I can imagine what secrets friends share on a hot lazy day by a stream.
Good luck in the contest. It sounds like a winner to me. PP
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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I like this little doodle called the essence. I can imagine what secrets friends share on a hot lazy day by a stream.
Good luck in the contest. It sounds like a winner to me. PP
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thanks PP - Glad you liked this essence poem, which is a fascinating little form. It's fun to imagine what secrets friends might share as they sit beside a stream.
Appreciate your thoughts ...;) Art
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture.. I love the poem. Young live blossoming by the stream. Where better than where all life begins, right next to the water. Great work.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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I love the picture.. I love the poem. Young live blossoming by the stream. Where better than where all life begins, right next to the water. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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So glad you enjoyed this little poem, and the picture. Appreciate your thoughts ...;)
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good essence form with two 6 syllable lines that contain a strong internal rhyme and a strong end-line rhyme
Good pairing of beside/inside and streams/dreams
I also like the rather dream-like quality of the scene you create :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Your poem is in good essence form with two 6 syllable lines that contain a strong internal rhyme and a strong end-line rhyme
Good pairing of beside/inside and streams/dreams
I also like the rather dream-like quality of the scene you create :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Glad you liked the dream-like quality in this scenario. Thanks for the wonderful review, Brooke. Appreciate it ... ;)
Comment from ennahanid
I really like this Essence poem of yours very much. Your choice of art complements your words beautifully, making this a picture perfect presentation.
It was a real pleasure to read you today
Thank you
Dinah
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I really like this Essence poem of yours very much. Your choice of art complements your words beautifully, making this a picture perfect presentation.
It was a real pleasure to read you today
Thank you
Dinah
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your Essence poem is very well written with vivid imagery painting a portrait in the readers head. The art work is pretty you used. Your essence poem is in fine form with spot on syllable count of 6-6 and you used excellent internal and external rhymes. In your essence poem you've also used very good metaphor and great allitetation usage with the S & W lines.
I like all of your lines: "secrets wait beside streams where fate hides inside dreams" I wish you good luck in the Essence writing prompt contest with your well composed essence poem. I'd recommend your essence poem to other readers. Thanks for sharing your essence poem. I bid you a nice day.
Missy
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Poet,
Your Essence poem is very well written with vivid imagery painting a portrait in the readers head. The art work is pretty you used. Your essence poem is in fine form with spot on syllable count of 6-6 and you used excellent internal and external rhymes. In your essence poem you've also used very good metaphor and great allitetation usage with the S & W lines.
I like all of your lines: "secrets wait beside streams where fate hides inside dreams" I wish you good luck in the Essence writing prompt contest with your well composed essence poem. I'd recommend your essence poem to other readers. Thanks for sharing your essence poem. I bid you a nice day.
Missy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Hi Missy - Thanks for the wonderful, detailed review on this essence poem. So glad you liked it. Appreciate all your thoughts and good luck wishes ... ;)
Comment from Bobbi22
This does remind me of sitting along the waters with a friend talking about secrets we shared - just as your artwork suggests. This is a very well written essence poem with correct syllable and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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This does remind me of sitting along the waters with a friend talking about secrets we shared - just as your artwork suggests. This is a very well written essence poem with correct syllable and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thanks, RightPics - Glad you enjoyed this essence poem, and could relate to it. Appreciate all your comments ... ;o)
Comment from reconciled
WOOOO WEEEE SOOOOO much said.....in two lines. I feel like I've read you before...something Similar. Anyhow...hear I come(LOL) But I feel sure Your going to kick mt butt(LOL)..........Michael.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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WOOOO WEEEE SOOOOO much said.....in two lines. I feel like I've read you before...something Similar. Anyhow...hear I come(LOL) But I feel sure Your going to kick mt butt(LOL)..........Michael.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Hey there, Michael - Appreciate your enthusiasm over this essence poem. With so few silly bells in each line, I try to pack in as much as possible. Thanks for reviewing ... ;o)
Comment from Ekim777
The mystery lies in the first line. What secrets are reflected in a flowing stream. Are they the stuff of dreams? And inside those dreams lies our fate. Freud said a man's personality is his fate. Still what is fate? Is it something pre-ordained' Something in the stars; or just the pattern of our future. Only time will tell and it is said that time is a flowing stream. So you have written a thought provoking poem. - Ekim
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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The mystery lies in the first line. What secrets are reflected in a flowing stream. Are they the stuff of dreams? And inside those dreams lies our fate. Freud said a man's personality is his fate. Still what is fate? Is it something pre-ordained' Something in the stars; or just the pattern of our future. Only time will tell and it is said that time is a flowing stream. So you have written a thought provoking poem. - Ekim
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Yes... time is a flowing stream and there is mystery and secrets within the stream and reflected from the stream. Sometimes we flow along with the stream and our relfections and perceptions become the stuff of dreams. Where the stream flows could be our future and dreams might find tributaries. Perhaps fate knows the ultimate destination of all rivers,streams and dreams. Can we be happy living in the here and now, and content with our dreams? Can our free will change the course of events? Perhaps - it's fun to ponder the possibilities. Thanks Ekim - So glad you found this essence poem a thought-provoking one. Appreciate all your thoughts ...;)
Comment from cce29
Great photo for your poem. You followed the prompt very well. Most people who write 2-3 line poems, write them vey choppy and they don't really follow anything. You how ever, wrote one very well. Would love to read more of your work
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Great photo for your poem. You followed the prompt very well. Most people who write 2-3 line poems, write them vey choppy and they don't really follow anything. You how ever, wrote one very well. Would love to read more of your work
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the wonderful review, cce29. Glad you enjoyed this essence poem and artwork. Appreciate your thoughts. I've written many essence poems, and this form is one of my favorites. I might put them all together someday, perhaps as a chapter in a book of poems ... ;o)