The Morning After
A little too much wine21 total reviews
Comment from Skyangel02
Lovely essence poem. I can see it has two lines with six syllables per line, each containing an internal rhyme and an ending rhyme. You did well to follow those instructions.
I would simply say Great Work but the bots won't let me.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Lovely essence poem. I can see it has two lines with six syllables per line, each containing an internal rhyme and an ending rhyme. You did well to follow those instructions.
I would simply say Great Work but the bots won't let me.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thanks for reviewing. These essence poems are just as hard to review as the 5-7-5. The review has to be longer then the work.
Comment from AbandoningShipzee
I very much like this. For a short poem and a few words, it can tell an endless amount of stories. The picture goes great with it as well. Very nice job (:
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I very much like this. For a short poem and a few words, it can tell an endless amount of stories. The picture goes great with it as well. Very nice job (:
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I'm glad you like it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from PoesyPoet
aughhhhhh! This sounds like my night last night.
Great subject, great poem, great contest entry. Best of luck. It sounds like the winner to me. PP
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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aughhhhhh! This sounds like my night last night.
Great subject, great poem, great contest entry. Best of luck. It sounds like the winner to me. PP
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Hope you're right. I'd love to win one. Thanks for the stars.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. It is a good reminder that we must pay for our actions. Do everything in moderation. Great work.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It is a good reminder that we must pay for our actions. Do everything in moderation. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Yep, gotta stop after that second glass, or else... glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the stars.
Comment from RYME4U
I like this one very much. The internal and end rhymes are great. The qualifications for the Essence poem contest are met. The words are subtly amusing. Good job!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I like this one very much. The internal and end rhymes are great. The qualifications for the Essence poem contest are met. The words are subtly amusing. Good job!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent essence poetry form with two six syllable rhyming lines and
good end-rhyme of fine/mine.
You have made your internal rhyme rhyme within each line - wine/fine and red/head lead, though customarily in this particular form internal rhyme means two words within each line rhyme with each other.
Since your interpretation of the term is what internal rhyme means in all other cases, I don't fault you for this.
I also like the humor in your poem :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Your poem is in excellent essence poetry form with two six syllable rhyming lines and
good end-rhyme of fine/mine.
You have made your internal rhyme rhyme within each line - wine/fine and red/head lead, though customarily in this particular form internal rhyme means two words within each line rhyme with each other.
Since your interpretation of the term is what internal rhyme means in all other cases, I don't fault you for this.
I also like the humor in your poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thanks. I think I might have screwed up with that internal rhyme, but I'm afraid it might be considered cheating if I fix it now. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Galactia
Great attempt of an essence poem. you have external rhyme and perfect 6 syllable count on each of the lines but unfortunately forgot the internal rhyme couplets and is why i granted 4 stars.
GL in the competition.
Regards
Tia
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Great attempt of an essence poem. you have external rhyme and perfect 6 syllable count on each of the lines but unfortunately forgot the internal rhyme couplets and is why i granted 4 stars.
GL in the competition.
Regards
Tia
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Ah, if only I hadn't misinterpreted that! I could have drank red wine and been in bed with that lead head. Oh well, I'll know next time. Thanks for clueing me in.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Very clever and I sure know the feeling. To be ultra picky, it's a shame you didn't make it clearer that the second line's effects didn't arrive til next morning, but with the syllable restriction, I reckon that's impossible...and it's pretty obvious anyway.
Maybe [Morn' red] but it's excellent as it is
Nice one.
Good luck and best wishes, earl
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Very clever and I sure know the feeling. To be ultra picky, it's a shame you didn't make it clearer that the second line's effects didn't arrive til next morning, but with the syllable restriction, I reckon that's impossible...and it's pretty obvious anyway.
Maybe [Morn' red] but it's excellent as it is
Nice one.
Good luck and best wishes, earl
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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Haha, I think everyone knows the feeling. I thought the title explained that the second line happened in the morning, just in case there's someone who doesn't know. lol, thanks for the stars.
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I apologise, as I forgot the title which indeed explains things very well
Comment from al1801
"...There's got to be a morning after..." Oh the pain. Good job on the poem and not only great imagery - I can feel the hurt - ouch! Take a painless five. Mebbe, the grip of the grape would be far better from the fruiterer :o)
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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"...There's got to be a morning after..." Oh the pain. Good job on the poem and not only great imagery - I can feel the hurt - ouch! Take a painless five. Mebbe, the grip of the grape would be far better from the fruiterer :o)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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I think most people can identify with this one. Glad you liked it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Bobbi22
This is a very good poem that really tells the effects of too much wine. I am rating this on the content of the poem as I am confused on the requirements of the structure. I thought the internal rhyme was to be an internal word on the first line that rhymes with an internal word on the second line. But I'm not sure. That being said, this is a well written poem. I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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This is a very good poem that really tells the effects of too much wine. I am rating this on the content of the poem as I am confused on the requirements of the structure. I thought the internal rhyme was to be an internal word on the first line that rhymes with an internal word on the second line. But I'm not sure. That being said, this is a well written poem. I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
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You could be right. I'd never heard of an essence poem till this morning. I saw the prompt and decided to give it a try. Thanks for the stars.