My Funeral
A child wonders about her funeral.26 total reviews
Comment from peggles
Well I want lots of flowers and tears and get soaked with a pouring down rain
I defy anyone to enjoy the day if they do I shall haunt them
to be serious
I liked your verse
It had a good flow and was easy to follow
This was a novel idea of a child thinking about her death a bit disturbing though
Well done with this
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Well I want lots of flowers and tears and get soaked with a pouring down rain
I defy anyone to enjoy the day if they do I shall haunt them
to be serious
I liked your verse
It had a good flow and was easy to follow
This was a novel idea of a child thinking about her death a bit disturbing though
Well done with this
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Thanks peg, and im certain you will have what you desire.
Comment from Spitfire
How many times have I thought the same thing: who will come to my funeral? Your relatives and children probably because it's politically correct. But friends? One like to think that someone who didn't have to will miss you. Love your description of the funeral and Grandma in her casket. Someone once said,"Funerals are barbaric." Excellent writing although it wasn't clear at first why you didn't consider yourself average. You're right, I expect. Not too many 8 years old would think about their funeral.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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How many times have I thought the same thing: who will come to my funeral? Your relatives and children probably because it's politically correct. But friends? One like to think that someone who didn't have to will miss you. Love your description of the funeral and Grandma in her casket. Someone once said,"Funerals are barbaric." Excellent writing although it wasn't clear at first why you didn't consider yourself average. You're right, I expect. Not too many 8 years old would think about their funeral.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Thank You, They really are sort of like a reunion for the guests, and i never understood how people og eat at the repass. strange
Comment from ennahanid
First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and I did, it was an interesting look into the mind of a child who had just been to a funeral and the wondered...
wearing her jewley Jewelry
wonder with great ernest Earnest
Thanks for the read, I enjoyed it today
Dinah
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and I did, it was an interesting look into the mind of a child who had just been to a funeral and the wondered...
wearing her jewley Jewelry
wonder with great ernest Earnest
Thanks for the read, I enjoyed it today
Dinah
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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thank you so much
Comment from Modee
Other than a few punctuation and spelling errors, which I'm sure others have pointed out, this is a wonderful story. I have also, as many people do, about how I am going to die...and who will even care. haha. Very nicely done. :)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Other than a few punctuation and spelling errors, which I'm sure others have pointed out, this is a wonderful story. I have also, as many people do, about how I am going to die...and who will even care. haha. Very nicely done. :)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Thank You I just don't want to suffer
Comment from Frank Atwood
Your initial aspect of an eight year old's thoughts at his first funeral is pretty good.
On the very first line the panened basement, I think you were trying to say, paneled basement.
And where you say, when she dies it seemed--
I think you meant to say,-when she died, it seemed
Where the word curtail is I'm pretty sure you meant to say, 'curtain'.
And if I'm right, there should be a ? after, "Who will I marry?"
Other than that everything else looks good.
I gave you a four star because of the minor erros. God bless.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Your initial aspect of an eight year old's thoughts at his first funeral is pretty good.
On the very first line the panened basement, I think you were trying to say, paneled basement.
And where you say, when she dies it seemed--
I think you meant to say,-when she died, it seemed
Where the word curtail is I'm pretty sure you meant to say, 'curtain'.
And if I'm right, there should be a ? after, "Who will I marry?"
Other than that everything else looks good.
I gave you a four star because of the minor erros. God bless.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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thank you so much
Comment from al1801
Well written little vignette. Looks like it was a girl thing - we, the boys, did not go down that road except ripping open an Oreo and if you had no frosting (icing) on one of the halves, you were set to marry, well, perhaps the less cutest girl in class. We guys were too busy winning the war and capturing the baddies to worry about who'll come to the funeral. PS: I was 'engaged' at eight (*one of the cutest) - it was a leap year - then thrown over for Malcolm Rivers at nine. Oh to be eight again.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Well written little vignette. Looks like it was a girl thing - we, the boys, did not go down that road except ripping open an Oreo and if you had no frosting (icing) on one of the halves, you were set to marry, well, perhaps the less cutest girl in class. We guys were too busy winning the war and capturing the baddies to worry about who'll come to the funeral. PS: I was 'engaged' at eight (*one of the cutest) - it was a leap year - then thrown over for Malcolm Rivers at nine. Oh to be eight again.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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wow im glad ther e are men like u in the world thank you for the srars made my day.
