The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Court Part 1"A family learns their father is a serial killer
17 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Sasha,
Chapter thirty is awesomely written with amazing imagery painted by your story telling. Your knowledge of police and courtroom procedure comes alive in this chapter. I'm rivited by your outstanding characterization. You chilling portrayed what James was viewing when he looked at his shackled serial killer father: "Everything about him reeked of evil. His dead eyes, his smug facial expression, his arrogant posture, even his large, ugly hands made me sick to my stomach knowing what they had done." I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers, my friend. Please have a nice day...Melissa.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Sasha,
Chapter thirty is awesomely written with amazing imagery painted by your story telling. Your knowledge of police and courtroom procedure comes alive in this chapter. I'm rivited by your outstanding characterization. You chilling portrayed what James was viewing when he looked at his shackled serial killer father: "Everything about him reeked of evil. His dead eyes, his smug facial expression, his arrogant posture, even his large, ugly hands made me sick to my stomach knowing what they had done." I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers, my friend. Please have a nice day...Melissa.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much. I am thrilled you liked this one.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You've done a great job of constructing the atmosphere for us in the court, and particularly on the street outside the courthouse. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of the courtroom drama. Giddy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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You've done a great job of constructing the atmosphere for us in the court, and particularly on the street outside the courthouse. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of the courtroom drama. Giddy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Thanks. I think you'll enjoy part 2 and 3. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from RebelRose
Poor james. It took a lot of nerve and determination for him to put himself in that awkward position. He is so mature for his age. Definitely not a typical 18 y/o boy. He is a man.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Poor james. It took a lot of nerve and determination for him to put himself in that awkward position. He is so mature for his age. Definitely not a typical 18 y/o boy. He is a man.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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No, it is not a typical 18 yo. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
A nice build up of tension here.
We all know that James is about to rock the boat - but that doesn't matter. We can't wait to see it.
Looking forward to Part Two.
Ron
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurphy
A nice build up of tension here.
We all know that James is about to rock the boat - but that doesn't matter. We can't wait to see it.
Looking forward to Part Two.
Ron
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Dad talks first, then James gets his shot.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
I must again repeat myself as apparently I have become fond of being a broken record;this my friend is so interesting that I truly have to constantly remind myself to breathe,before I pass out becoming so involved in the drama
of the story that I unintentionally hold my breath....You my
friend are a well seasoned bonified writer and please never
ever let anybody tell you otherwise,ever....Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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I must again repeat myself as apparently I have become fond of being a broken record;this my friend is so interesting that I truly have to constantly remind myself to breathe,before I pass out becoming so involved in the drama
of the story that I unintentionally hold my breath....You my
friend are a well seasoned bonified writer and please never
ever let anybody tell you otherwise,ever....Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Your comments mean so much to me. Knowing you like this is more than enough. Thank you so much.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your description of the reporters' feeding frenzy and James' emotions along with his father's appearance. I also especially liked your "bullets" simile. -Joan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I admired your description of the reporters' feeding frenzy and James' emotions along with his father's appearance. I also especially liked your "bullets" simile. -Joan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thanks. Hard chapter to write. I am so pleased you liked it.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
Did you ever go to a suspenseful movie and find yourself holding your breath as you knew the villain was sneaking up on the unsuspecting victim? If you have, you can relate it t how I felt as I read this wonderful and powerful piece of writing.The problem is that I can't hold my breath long enogh to finish reading. Oh well, I don't know how you could make this scene more suspenseful., but I'm sure you'll find a way as the trial begins. I wish I had more stars to give you. You deserve a whole galaxy this time.
Love and Irish Hugs. Just close your eyes and feel the squeeze.
Roger
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Valerie:)
Did you ever go to a suspenseful movie and find yourself holding your breath as you knew the villain was sneaking up on the unsuspecting victim? If you have, you can relate it t how I felt as I read this wonderful and powerful piece of writing.The problem is that I can't hold my breath long enogh to finish reading. Oh well, I don't know how you could make this scene more suspenseful., but I'm sure you'll find a way as the trial begins. I wish I had more stars to give you. You deserve a whole galaxy this time.
Love and Irish Hugs. Just close your eyes and feel the squeeze.
Roger
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I am just thrilled you are enjoying this so much. Stop holding your breath...it isn't good for you~~
Comment from Belinda
No, no spags from me today, and no law or health related questions...:) I can see the happenings of this chapter like watching a film ... oops, am I repeating myself? Whatever, but this is fantastic. I like how James welcomes his two elder friends with a hug.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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No, no spags from me today, and no law or health related questions...:) I can see the happenings of this chapter like watching a film ... oops, am I repeating myself? Whatever, but this is fantastic. I like how James welcomes his two elder friends with a hug.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I am working on tomorrows chapter right now. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait ti see what James sayss. I am sure he will have everybody eating out of the palm of his hand.
into a reporter's wet dream. (good description)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I can't wait ti see what James sayss. I am sure he will have everybody eating out of the palm of his hand.
into a reporter's wet dream. (good description)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thanks. I'm working on that chapter right now.
Comment from Showboat
Hi Sasha,
Oh boy, I can't wait to get to the end! This story is so gripping I just want to know what happened and how it's going to end.
I feel terribly sorry for James, that's for sure and the horror is not going to end any time soon.
Great job,
Gayle
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Sasha,
Oh boy, I can't wait to get to the end! This story is so gripping I just want to know what happened and how it's going to end.
I feel terribly sorry for James, that's for sure and the horror is not going to end any time soon.
Great job,
Gayle
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Today is his day but you are right, he still has a lot of crap to deal with.