The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Mom's in the Hospital"A family learns their father is a serial killer
20 total reviews
Comment from ScarletClearwater
You mean the kid is smart like Sheldon from big bang Theory. Is it hard to write a really smart person? I wonder. Anyways, great job with this piece.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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You mean the kid is smart like Sheldon from big bang Theory. Is it hard to write a really smart person? I wonder. Anyways, great job with this piece.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Yes, he is a slightly refined Sheldon and it is really hard to write about and from the point of view of a genius...it exhausts me.
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I bet.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Another great chapter, Sasha...
I sometimes it's better not to know the
truth, as the more this poor family finds
out the more pain they suffer - James is
so young to take such a load on his shoulders.
I place(d) my hand
Tomorrow(,) I would
I have sixes, but I'm still blocked
from giving them where one is deserved.
Margaret
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Another great chapter, Sasha...
I sometimes it's better not to know the
truth, as the more this poor family finds
out the more pain they suffer - James is
so young to take such a load on his shoulders.
I place(d) my hand
Tomorrow(,) I would
I have sixes, but I'm still blocked
from giving them where one is deserved.
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Don't worry about 6's, I am just thrilled you like this.
Comment from RebelRose
It's amazing how things can change from one year to the next.
That is quite an interesting story (so far) that was written in the diary. I can't wait to hear more.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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It's amazing how things can change from one year to the next.
That is quite an interesting story (so far) that was written in the diary. I can't wait to hear more.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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I guess Dad figured if it was written in Romani, no one would ever be able to read it. Glad you like it so far.
Comment from hyway94
I can see what is going to happen. You just want us to set on the rock and keep wondering what's going to happen. This is what keeps the mine working, Wondering.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I can see what is going to happen. You just want us to set on the rock and keep wondering what's going to happen. This is what keeps the mine working, Wondering.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Belileve it or not, you will be getting some answers pretty soon.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
Your author's notes are interesting and I have never heard about the Bride kidnapping. I'm sure there are many superstitions in the Gypsies community. I have no doubt that James will translate the rest of the journal but what will he find there? I think he may find out something he will wish he didn't know. Excellent writing here....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurph,
Your author's notes are interesting and I have never heard about the Bride kidnapping. I'm sure there are many superstitions in the Gypsies community. I have no doubt that James will translate the rest of the journal but what will he find there? I think he may find out something he will wish he didn't know. Excellent writing here....blessings, chey
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the great review. Yes, James is going to find lots of things he will wish he didn't find.
Comment from words
What a strange twist this has taken. I find it fascinating.
The idea of "bride kidnapping" is abhorrent.
James' family lineage is dark.
Can't wait to see what the rest of the journal holds.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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What a strange twist this has taken. I find it fascinating.
The idea of "bride kidnapping" is abhorrent.
James' family lineage is dark.
Can't wait to see what the rest of the journal holds.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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It comes from an ancient Romaniab (Romani Gypsy) superstition. There are many stories of this happening but few have been officially documented.
Comment from peggles
You certainly have done your research well
Your characters are realistic and believable
And natural in their dialogue and actions
I found this interesting and easy to follow
This is such a scary horrific story
I read your story from beginning to end in one go
It is a compelling read
You cover a chilling subject with credibility
It was a pleasure to read and review
This fine piece of creative excellence
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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You certainly have done your research well
Your characters are realistic and believable
And natural in their dialogue and actions
I found this interesting and easy to follow
This is such a scary horrific story
I read your story from beginning to end in one go
It is a compelling read
You cover a chilling subject with credibility
It was a pleasure to read and review
This fine piece of creative excellence
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for commenting on the research required for this. I am a bit dizzy from reading so much. Thank you so much for your awesome and sincerely appreciated 6 stars.
Comment from Showboat
Hi Sasha,
I'm always so charged when I see a pm from you because this story is so gripping.
I'm glad Mom's in the hospital, too. She's long overdue for a chat with someone trained to help her. I feel sorry for everyone involved, but I have to say, of all of them, my heart goes out to her.
Great job, and I'm waiting for the next installment. Are you planning on publishing this one when it's done?
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hi Sasha,
I'm always so charged when I see a pm from you because this story is so gripping.
I'm glad Mom's in the hospital, too. She's long overdue for a chat with someone trained to help her. I feel sorry for everyone involved, but I have to say, of all of them, my heart goes out to her.
Great job, and I'm waiting for the next installment. Are you planning on publishing this one when it's done?
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Mom is really in the worst position of all the family. As a mother myself, I can relate to her guilt, frustration, confusion, and even her denial.
Comment from psalmist
I was afraid that his mom would have a breakdown. This is like a sore that has been allowed to fester, and finally is lanced to allow all the pus to drain. Hopefully, the family will be able to put their lives back together. I find James to be a strong character. Never giving up, yet still compassionate. The journal intrigues me, I look forward to more. Linda
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I was afraid that his mom would have a breakdown. This is like a sore that has been allowed to fester, and finally is lanced to allow all the pus to drain. Hopefully, the family will be able to put their lives back together. I find James to be a strong character. Never giving up, yet still compassionate. The journal intrigues me, I look forward to more. Linda
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the great review. I am so pleased you are enjoying this.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
This story is becoming really creepy.
We are delving inside a sick perverted mind.
What is so scary is these fantasies can become reality.
A sick freak in Belgium kept young woman as prisoners and made them bare his children.
Ron
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurphy
This story is becoming really creepy.
We are delving inside a sick perverted mind.
What is so scary is these fantasies can become reality.
A sick freak in Belgium kept young woman as prisoners and made them bare his children.
Ron
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Yes, these are all too often true.