haiku (blossom laden branch)
Ode haiku10 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
Both your writing and the artwork remind me of the lovely Japanese cherry blossoms surrounding the Tidal Basin in Washington, D.C. Breathtaking. Thank you for stirring the memories.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Both your writing and the artwork remind me of the lovely Japanese cherry blossoms surrounding the Tidal Basin in Washington, D.C. Breathtaking. Thank you for stirring the memories.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Jean, you are so welcome. D.C had become quite the magical city!
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form
Lovely descriptive detail
good alliterative grouping in blossom/branch/bows
good consonance of P sounds in pink/splendor/spring petal power
and you definitely have the praiseful tone of an ode to spring flowering trees : -) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form
Lovely descriptive detail
good alliterative grouping in blossom/branch/bows
good consonance of P sounds in pink/splendor/spring petal power
and you definitely have the praiseful tone of an ode to spring flowering trees : -) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Thank you Brooke! Hugs
Comment from nancyjam
Nice visuals created in your lovely
Haiku. Nice use of alliteration with
"blossoms/branch/bows" and
"petal/power"
I like the clever word play in your
final line.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Nice visuals created in your lovely
Haiku. Nice use of alliteration with
"blossoms/branch/bows" and
"petal/power"
I like the clever word play in your
final line.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for long my little poem
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Author, I love that picture of spring you've painted here. The blossom laden branch is surely a beautiful sight and it shows power at the same time...:)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Hi, Author, I love that picture of spring you've painted here. The blossom laden branch is surely a beautiful sight and it shows power at the same time...:)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much, reader!
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your Haiku poem is very well written and it successfully reflects a moment in nature and paints a mental picture in the readers head. The art work is pretty you used/ You satori line is very good in your poem. Your Haiku is in very fine form with spot-on syllable count. In your Haiku ode you used great metaphor usage and excellent alliteration with the B, P & S words. I liked your lines:
"blossom laden branch
bows in pink and white splendor
spring petal power"
I wish you good luck in the Ode Haiku writing prompt. I'd recommend your well composed Haiku Ode to other reviewers. It was my delight to have read your poetic art written in Haiku format. Keep on writing with heart and imagination. Have a beautious day.
Missy.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Poet,
Your Haiku poem is very well written and it successfully reflects a moment in nature and paints a mental picture in the readers head. The art work is pretty you used/ You satori line is very good in your poem. Your Haiku is in very fine form with spot-on syllable count. In your Haiku ode you used great metaphor usage and excellent alliteration with the B, P & S words. I liked your lines:
"blossom laden branch
bows in pink and white splendor
spring petal power"
I wish you good luck in the Ode Haiku writing prompt. I'd recommend your well composed Haiku Ode to other reviewers. It was my delight to have read your poetic art written in Haiku format. Keep on writing with heart and imagination. Have a beautious day.
Missy.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Lovely review, as always! Hugs
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this beautiful haiku about the beauty of spring, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this beautiful haiku about the beauty of spring, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I'd love to have some greeting cards with this picture and poem on them. Beautiful! It's impressive how you've used alliteration and metaphor in one line--line 3. Good job
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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I'd love to have some greeting cards with this picture and poem on them. Beautiful! It's impressive how you've used alliteration and metaphor in one line--line 3. Good job
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much. I'm depending on that last line in the contest lol!
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Great pic and colour presentation - very apt for the coming time of year.
Very observant in that 'laden branches' would metaphorically 'bow'.
Witty last line too.
REALLY liked this one.
Best wishes, earl
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Great pic and colour presentation - very apt for the coming time of year.
Very observant in that 'laden branches' would metaphorically 'bow'.
Witty last line too.
REALLY liked this one.
Best wishes, earl
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Thanks Earl! I really value your opinion.
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Thanks very much for saying so, but I'm sure I'm often wrong...though not in this case for sure. ;-) x
Comment from Ekim777
I like your alliteration and your last line is startling but the first two lines are predictable. I am reminded of a famous two liner poem by one of the greatest poets in the 20th century; Ezra Pound. " White, nameless faces in the Metro./ Petals on a wet, black bough. - Ekim
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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I like your alliteration and your last line is startling but the first two lines are predictable. I am reminded of a famous two liner poem by one of the greatest poets in the 20th century; Ezra Pound. " White, nameless faces in the Metro./ Petals on a wet, black bough. - Ekim
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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I did want a sense of surprise, and thank you for the Pound quote. I like him very much, also. Thank you
Comment from Adri7enne
Sort of a neat idea to empower the blossoms with 'petal power'. Lovely presentation as well, with the super artwork and the pink background colours. Well done, author. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Sort of a neat idea to empower the blossoms with 'petal power'. Lovely presentation as well, with the super artwork and the pink background colours. Well done, author. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for this great review!