The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "A Visit With Susan in the Hospital"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from gazzagodbod
what a great little chapter usually hard to join something in the middle but grabbed my attention nand kept it off to read some more thanks gazzax
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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what a great little chapter usually hard to join something in the middle but grabbed my attention nand kept it off to read some more thanks gazzax
Comment Written 25-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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What a nice compliment. Starting something in the middle and enjoying it is hard to do.
Comment from hyway94
Alright, now I can get back to reading this story. I find it amazing that I can remember so much.But that's not what you want to hear. The story is very good and the way you make it so a person can sit in the room with them is how good it is.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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Alright, now I can get back to reading this story. I find it amazing that I can remember so much.But that's not what you want to hear. The story is very good and the way you make it so a person can sit in the room with them is how good it is.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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I hope to post the next chapter today. I am pleased you are enjoying this.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
3rd last paragraph: (Shed)....? She stared
As well as being dramatic, this chapter is informative. You've done a fabulous job of describing Susan's condition and once again, the feelings of her family. Giddy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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3rd last paragraph: (Shed)....? She stared
As well as being dramatic, this chapter is informative. You've done a fabulous job of describing Susan's condition and once again, the feelings of her family. Giddy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am so pleased you continue to like this story. Now that I have my computer back, I hope to post another chapter tomorrow.
Comment from RebelRose
Even though James now considers himself the head of the family, Charlie is showing signs of 'manning up' also. Sorry about your computer trouble. I hope it doesn't take long to fix.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Even though James now considers himself the head of the family, Charlie is showing signs of 'manning up' also. Sorry about your computer trouble. I hope it doesn't take long to fix.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Yes,Charlie is forced to grow up too.
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Yes,Charlie is forced to grow up too.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
I wish I had a six for all of this cause this entire story is so deserving in its completeness....I cried a lot reading this as it brought back memories that I still live with,the emotions in this read are climbing and James mother
is beginning to crack under the pressure of all the emotional fall out of the doings of a man she thought she knew and possibly loved....You my friend are so good at writing,yes so good....Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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I wish I had a six for all of this cause this entire story is so deserving in its completeness....I cried a lot reading this as it brought back memories that I still live with,the emotions in this read are climbing and James mother
is beginning to crack under the pressure of all the emotional fall out of the doings of a man she thought she knew and possibly loved....You my friend are so good at writing,yes so good....Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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I have also been diagnosed with PTSD and this was a hard chapter to write....too many bad memories.
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I have also been diagnosed with PTSD and this was a hard chapter to write....too many bad memories.
Comment from Veronica Grace
This is a heart wrenching chapter in the way you describe the girls condition. Seems out of experience. I am looking forward to future installments.
A couple of small things showed up:
"For some patients, PTSD (it) is a single
With her (faced) flushed
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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This is a heart wrenching chapter in the way you describe the girls condition. Seems out of experience. I am looking forward to future installments.
A couple of small things showed up:
"For some patients, PTSD (it) is a single
With her (faced) flushed
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. You are correct. I was diagnosed with PTSD 20 years ago and am quite familiar with it symptoms and treatments.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I hope you finally get your computer fixed. I will miss your posting until you are back on the computer. This is another well written post.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I hope you finally get your computer fixed. I will miss your posting until you are back on the computer. This is another well written post.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I hope to get it back tomorrow. At least that is the plan.
Comment from Mastery
Hi,Val. How have you been? Sorry, I have been away so very long. I cannot possibly catch up on your entire story right now, but as I read this one I was reminded of what a truly fine writer you are. Your imagery is superb. Like:
"She paused, and then laying one album on the chair beside her, opened the other, and began slowly flipping through the pages. She gently touched each photograph as though saying goodbye to a memory long gone. When she came to a picture of Dad, she removed it, opened her purse, and took out a pair of scissors, and methodically cut his image from the photograph; dropping each one onto the rug as though nothing more than garbage. Mom went through every page of both albums removing all evidence of Dad."
Outstanding write. Bob
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Hi,Val. How have you been? Sorry, I have been away so very long. I cannot possibly catch up on your entire story right now, but as I read this one I was reminded of what a truly fine writer you are. Your imagery is superb. Like:
"She paused, and then laying one album on the chair beside her, opened the other, and began slowly flipping through the pages. She gently touched each photograph as though saying goodbye to a memory long gone. When she came to a picture of Dad, she removed it, opened her purse, and took out a pair of scissors, and methodically cut his image from the photograph; dropping each one onto the rug as though nothing more than garbage. Mom went through every page of both albums removing all evidence of Dad."
Outstanding write. Bob
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you liked this chapter. Dont worry about catching up. I am so far behind, I have given up.
Comment from psalmist
I feel like a personal family friend, I have become so attached to your characters. I admire how you are able to keep all the various threads together, keeping consistency in the different personalities of your characters. Well done. Linda (good luck with your computer woes.)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I feel like a personal family friend, I have become so attached to your characters. I admire how you are able to keep all the various threads together, keeping consistency in the different personalities of your characters. Well done. Linda (good luck with your computer woes.)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thanks. I sincerely appreciate your conintued support of this book.
Comment from emmaysavage
I worked in several psychiatric facilities and you have described the best aspects of this one. It's usual to have families feel shock at how their relatives appear, no matter how well they are being treated. Good writing!!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I worked in several psychiatric facilities and you have described the best aspects of this one. It's usual to have families feel shock at how their relatives appear, no matter how well they are being treated. Good writing!!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I´ve spent a few weeks on a couple myself and used my personal experience in this chapter.