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Expression of love72 total reviews
Comment from Amy Comstock
A great 5-7-5..you are making a statement..then saying what you got out of it..then asking a question! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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A great 5-7-5..you are making a statement..then saying what you got out of it..then asking a question! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks but why not the extra star just curious
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We only get a limited number of six stars to give out. I save those for poems that I wish I would have written..or ones that I emotionally connect too! Hope this helps!
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ok i just wanted to know to improve
thanks so much though
Comment from judiverse
I'm happy to see your work and hope you enjoy FanStory. Your 5-7-5 count is perfect in this. You have a well-expressed thought. Love from a distance is hard as your poem shows. The plea to "come soon my dear" is the feeling one would have after separation from a loved one. Be sure to take advantage of FanArtReview for artwork to illustrate your work. judiverse
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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I'm happy to see your work and hope you enjoy FanStory. Your 5-7-5 count is perfect in this. You have a well-expressed thought. Love from a distance is hard as your poem shows. The plea to "come soon my dear" is the feeling one would have after separation from a loved one. Be sure to take advantage of FanArtReview for artwork to illustrate your work. judiverse
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks
Comment from poetbear
This is lovely.
I wish it had an image and not of the person.
Reads and flows well.
Makes sense.
Great tecnhique and original.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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This is lovely.
I wish it had an image and not of the person.
Reads and flows well.
Makes sense.
Great tecnhique and original.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much.
Comment from FlamingSpade
Bravo my new friend! I like it alot. Ever think of adding art to help punch and strengthen your beautiful words? It free. Go to FanArtReview and sign up! Lovely. Is this your first piece? Ginger
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Bravo my new friend! I like it alot. Ever think of adding art to help punch and strengthen your beautiful words? It free. Go to FanArtReview and sign up! Lovely. Is this your first piece? Ginger
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much. I glad you enjoyed it. Tell your fans and followers.
Comment from misscookie
I'm always amazines how a writyer could use so few words to say so much.
I like the flow of your poem. You expressed your words with deep complassion.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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I'm always amazines how a writyer could use so few words to say so much.
I like the flow of your poem. You expressed your words with deep complassion.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Ok thanks
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Your welcome.
Comment from manjuneelam
A profound composition with smartly chosen words. So much said in just few words. The poem flows well and pleasure to read and review. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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A profound composition with smartly chosen words. So much said in just few words. The poem flows well and pleasure to read and review. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much.
Comment from RUMLOVE1000
Okay champ it's official, Rumlove1000 has co-signed this for you :)
This was Pretty good work I must say and Thanks soo much for asking my opinion of it because it meant a lot and another good thing you did was to take "ADEWPEARL'S" advice on changing it to the correct format because she is really good in my opinion and I very much respect and enjoy her work as well!
Nice way of expressing your inner feelings, I enjoyed because the words used were simple and deep.
Another piece of advice that I would give you is to write whatever you feel keeping in mind that not everyone will enjoy because that's what poetry is and it's just formatted to certain types of poetry meaning; Haiku, Nonet and etc.
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Okay champ it's official, Rumlove1000 has co-signed this for you :)
This was Pretty good work I must say and Thanks soo much for asking my opinion of it because it meant a lot and another good thing you did was to take "ADEWPEARL'S" advice on changing it to the correct format because she is really good in my opinion and I very much respect and enjoy her work as well!
Nice way of expressing your inner feelings, I enjoyed because the words used were simple and deep.
Another piece of advice that I would give you is to write whatever you feel keeping in mind that not everyone will enjoy because that's what poetry is and it's just formatted to certain types of poetry meaning; Haiku, Nonet and etc.
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much. That is so very nice of you to say that.
Comment from yndemand
syllable count good i could see in my minds eye the love that was needed to be close so you could draw for it , well written and good luck
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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syllable count good i could see in my minds eye the love that was needed to be close so you could draw for it , well written and good luck
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Very nice 5/7/5. You should learn to add a picture to your work. It helps with reviews. Welcome to FANSTORY. It is a fun place to learn. Good luck with the contest. They are tough. Honeycomb
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Very nice 5/7/5. You should learn to add a picture to your work. It helps with reviews. Welcome to FANSTORY. It is a fun place to learn. Good luck with the contest. They are tough. Honeycomb
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thanks for the wonderfu lrating and advise. I feel very welcome.
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Persistent - aren't you!!!
Okay... I think that finally managing to fit your poem into a 575 format is a good learning curve. It says everything I suspect you hoped it would say but for me it lacked a real punch. With practice you will be able to instil more drama, which in turn will make it magnetic.
Not bad for your first attempt.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Persistent - aren't you!!!
Okay... I think that finally managing to fit your poem into a 575 format is a good learning curve. It says everything I suspect you hoped it would say but for me it lacked a real punch. With practice you will be able to instil more drama, which in turn will make it magnetic.
Not bad for your first attempt.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Yes i am. Thanks it remains a learning experiance.
