Comment from oNray

Excellent

Good luck with your entry to the contest. This little 5/7/5 tells its own story. You have done well. I am no fan of a 5/7/5 but that's my problem not yours.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Oh thanks so very much

Comment from bowls

Excellent

A very soft, sweet poem that says a great deal in just a few words. Obviously there's a very strong tie between the speaker and the person spoken to. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

no Thanks you

Comment from axelbeariter

Excellent

I love you from far
you help me gain strength deserved
please come soon, my dear/Your offering is well written, and the plea is well understood. You may have a winner. Good job.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so much

Comment from debsjubilantpoetry

Excellent

Your poem is beautiful but just one tiny note: far should be afar or from far away, the better choice is afar. I love the poem and it conveys great emotion is a few lines. good luck to you. hugs. debs

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks

Comment from Dustybones

Excellent

Very good, I would change the word far which is not a complete thought to
afar and reword that using that like this maybe

we loved from afar
you help......
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 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks for that advice i make that change

Comment from Frances Jean

Excellent

A nice little love poem poem expressing your emotions well in a few short words and obeying the requirements of the form. Thank you for sharing. Frances

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

no Thank you

Comment from Rama Rao

Excellent

A fine short poem which expressed vividly your feelings for your partner. You have managed to pack all your feelings in just three lines.
A great job.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so very much

Comment from steevie

Excellent

Welcome to FanStory, Wonder. Its always nice to meet new faces here.
I really enjoyed your poem. It speaks of love longing to be rejoined again after beibg apart for some time.

We're looking forward to reading more of your writes.
Take care
steve

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks and thanks and thanks

reply by steevie on 19-Feb-2012

You're welcome,welcome,welcome :0)
take care
steve

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hello Wonder, These 5-7-5 freestyles are difficult because every word has to count. Your message is clear, concise and has a ring of truth to it. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so very much

Comment from Herb

Excellent

I love you from far
you help me gain strength deserved
please come soon, my dear

A nice poem in the 5-7-5 format. I liked the use of 'deserved' I don't really understand these little ones so can't say much more.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012

tahnks it is a contest.