Comment from R. J. Stewart

Excellent

Very simplistic and yet powerful. It strikes at the deepest crevasse of emotion with so little said. You strike a tone of wanting (for return) for anyone who misses or who has lost a loved one.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so very much

Comment from Paulpl52

Good

Difficult to get a powerful message across in such a short poem of these types. Just doesn't quite hit the right notes for me. Although I can feel the anticipation and longing of the character.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks

Comment from playinaround

Excellent

This 5-7-5 makes me so curious! Where did the lover go? What happened to him/her. Is it unrequited love? You did a nice job in writing this. It makes the reader want to know more!

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so very much

Comment from Dave Russell

Excellent

Very nice job with this 5-7-5. It is always a challenge to pack so much into so few syllables but you have done just that. Best of luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks

Comment from Aveindha

Excellent

veru nicely written 5-7-5. " I love you from far.." Well expressed. I enjoyed reading this. maybe an addition of a picture to make it a little more emotional? very well done

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Yea i agreee just dont know how to put it up and thanks

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admire your succinct love poem in the 5-7-5 form. I like your simple, distilled title and choice to let the poem speak for itself without a picture. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so much.

Comment from Danielb

Excellent

Hmm a really nice 5-7-5! I like how it hints at one who is distant, and how that separates the two from being together. Nice job :)

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks

Comment from DIS-illusioned

Good

--"Expression of love
I Love"
And I try my best to. :)
--Excellent 5-7-5 syllabic format.
--"you help me gain strength deserved"
Why is your strength 'deserved'?
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

It is deserved from my hard work. Thanks

Comment from autumn_pentopaper

Poor

Ummm, short and sweet... good, I guess. Keep writing and pouring your heart out!!
I like how you made it clear that the strength I'd 'deserved' ... it kinda gives a sense of high self esteem and lightens the mood.

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 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

I dont deserve a poem it is suppose to be short it was the prompt why a one

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Love from afar makes passion even stronger when we fantasize, yet when we can't have it, we want it even more. A poem of wanting. Good luck with the contest. Les

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012

Thanks so very much.