The Red Dress
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Comment from wordsfromsue
So Freak Boy's true nature finally emerges. Gotta feel like a mighry fine man treating a young girl that way. Must be why Hannah loves him so, his gentlemanly ways.
Not much I can say, except if I had an axe I'd whack his junk off just for fun.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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So Freak Boy's true nature finally emerges. Gotta feel like a mighry fine man treating a young girl that way. Must be why Hannah loves him so, his gentlemanly ways.
Not much I can say, except if I had an axe I'd whack his junk off just for fun.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Lol, love it. You somehow manage to come up with the right words every time you review! Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from joann r romei
There are some wonderful scenes here, the one with Hannah needs to be a bit tighter, there are also redundant sentences, The rape scene went to fast and the last sentence doesnt truly give the reader a deep connection with Lisa, here is this so called perfect guy and then he turns on her, shed be shocked unless this is the character.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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There are some wonderful scenes here, the one with Hannah needs to be a bit tighter, there are also redundant sentences, The rape scene went to fast and the last sentence doesnt truly give the reader a deep connection with Lisa, here is this so called perfect guy and then he turns on her, shed be shocked unless this is the character.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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The rape scene went to (too) fast and the last sentence doesnt (doesn't) truly give the reader a deep connection with Lisa,(.) (H)ere is this so called perfect guy(,) and then he turns on her, shed (she'd) be shocked unless this is the character.
I would appreciate a reviewer who gives me the lowest score out of twenty other reviewers having a command of the English language, and not having a fixation about the length of sex scenes.Please don't bother reviewing my work again.
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Unfortunatly you will never improve anything about the story if you cannot handle someone being honest, dont worry i wont bother reading your book again got better things to do.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello Alexis
Were you ever a model? You write with so much knowledge. Now then Nick is an ass. Lisa is naive, and those damn pictures had to come back sometime. Great chapter
Bear
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello Alexis
Were you ever a model? You write with so much knowledge. Now then Nick is an ass. Lisa is naive, and those damn pictures had to come back sometime. Great chapter
Bear
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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No, sadly I wasn't, but I'm really flattered that you think I might have been! I live out my five foot fantasies via the book! Thank you, Bear. Your review is appreciated, as always. Alexis x
Comment from axelbeariter
"Did you use to be a model?" Lisa asked,/Use used instead of use. The first use, that is----THis chapter is one of your best, with so much tension and questions that the reader is salivating to have answered soon. A great hook.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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"Did you use to be a model?" Lisa asked,/Use used instead of use. The first use, that is----THis chapter is one of your best, with so much tension and questions that the reader is salivating to have answered soon. A great hook.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Hopefully I can better it. There is so much going on in the book from now on, I have no excuse to get it wrong. Thank you so much for your continued support. I think you know how much I appreciate it. Alexis x
Comment from Malerie
Wow, this chapter really confirms that Lisa's life is one big disappointment after another. How could Nick treat her that way; how can she ever feel anything for him now. I knew those photos would come back to haunt her. Where does this story go now; I know Alan will come back into the picture; can't wait for the next chapter; keep writing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Wow, this chapter really confirms that Lisa's life is one big disappointment after another. How could Nick treat her that way; how can she ever feel anything for him now. I knew those photos would come back to haunt her. Where does this story go now; I know Alan will come back into the picture; can't wait for the next chapter; keep writing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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You've got it. Sadly, it gets even more complicated, but hopefully makes for a good read! Thank you for your consistantly supportive reviews. Alexis x
Comment from peggles
The rape scene though difficult was so vivid and realistic
Totally believable
I can't see how you could improve the scene
Such brutal and unrelenting violence
Gave me chills reading it
I hope she has the strength to get rid of this horrid man and does not become one of these women who remain a victim because of fear or misguided love
This was an excellent chapter and is a bitter price for Lisa to pay for those pictures
Well written with powerful images
That I am sure will keep your readers coming back to see what happens next
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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The rape scene though difficult was so vivid and realistic
Totally believable
I can't see how you could improve the scene
Such brutal and unrelenting violence
Gave me chills reading it
I hope she has the strength to get rid of this horrid man and does not become one of these women who remain a victim because of fear or misguided love
This was an excellent chapter and is a bitter price for Lisa to pay for those pictures
Well written with powerful images
That I am sure will keep your readers coming back to see what happens next
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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I really take that as a compliment, Peggles. Must admit I always prefer the less is more scenario with scenes like this but it seems to have gone down okay with everyone. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter where nick saw pictures of her and was embarassed that his friends had seen then and raped her as punishment
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter where nick saw pictures of her and was embarassed that his friends had seen then and raped her as punishment
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your great review. I must admit, this wasn't the easiest of chapters to write. Alexis
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
and the sa[p]phire and diamond necklace and earrings Nick had bought
After an hour Lisa reached up and whispered conspiritually[conspiratorially] in Nick's ear.
"I just love these small parties[,] don't you?"
From the look on his face[,] it was easy to work out that Hannah had once been a lot more than a friend.
If they had been lovers[,] she could understand Hannah's resentment.
"Nick didn't live in Chelmsford[,] did he?" she asked.
Lisa was caught off guard by the question, and was just about to answer[] when Hannah continued.
As Lisa approached the door[,] she felt her heart beating loudly in her chest. If Nick had seen the pictures, she could imagine what he must be thinking.
When she knocked on the door[,] there was no answer, so she took a deep breath and went in.
"I can explain[,] Nick..."
and he had sat in the same chair[] while Hannah had told everyone that the party was cancelled.
the day before[] had proved it to him[.]
When Nick felt her naked skin through the fine material[,] he groaned, feeling the familiar hardness
Liam trying to rape her flooding back[] and made her feel physically sick.
God I hate weak women. why didn't she push off from the desk and throw him back? She should have slapped him and left.
Roberta
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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and the sa[p]phire and diamond necklace and earrings Nick had bought
After an hour Lisa reached up and whispered conspiritually[conspiratorially] in Nick's ear.
"I just love these small parties[,] don't you?"
From the look on his face[,] it was easy to work out that Hannah had once been a lot more than a friend.
If they had been lovers[,] she could understand Hannah's resentment.
"Nick didn't live in Chelmsford[,] did he?" she asked.
Lisa was caught off guard by the question, and was just about to answer[] when Hannah continued.
As Lisa approached the door[,] she felt her heart beating loudly in her chest. If Nick had seen the pictures, she could imagine what he must be thinking.
When she knocked on the door[,] there was no answer, so she took a deep breath and went in.
"I can explain[,] Nick..."
and he had sat in the same chair[] while Hannah had told everyone that the party was cancelled.
the day before[] had proved it to him[.]
When Nick felt her naked skin through the fine material[,] he groaned, feeling the familiar hardness
Liam trying to rape her flooding back[] and made her feel physically sick.
God I hate weak women. why didn't she push off from the desk and throw him back? She should have slapped him and left.
Roberta
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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I can't thank you enough, Roberta. A six always makes my day, and you certainly did that. Alexis x
Comment from LisaSilva
" "Oh look it's my wonderful fianc©e - the porn queen..." he muttered sarcastically, as she stood staring back at him from the open doorway." That's the other side of adoration for virginity. His brutal response to being turned on was a perfect illustration of the kind of future she would have with such an insensitive lover. Very well written, once again, Alexis!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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" "Oh look it's my wonderful fianc©e - the porn queen..." he muttered sarcastically, as she stood staring back at him from the open doorway." That's the other side of adoration for virginity. His brutal response to being turned on was a perfect illustration of the kind of future she would have with such an insensitive lover. Very well written, once again, Alexis!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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As usual, you're spot on. I sometimes feel, when reading your reviews, that you could have written this book because you understand it so well. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from debskatz
Hi alexis,
Well, you weren't kidding. I wondered when those pictures were gonna turn up, geez. That is so sad.
I didn't find any spag.
I'm looking forward to seeing how you're gonna deal with this situation. Really powerful writing, alexis. Good job, my friend.
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Hi alexis,
Well, you weren't kidding. I wondered when those pictures were gonna turn up, geez. That is so sad.
I didn't find any spag.
I'm looking forward to seeing how you're gonna deal with this situation. Really powerful writing, alexis. Good job, my friend.
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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I just know your going to love the next chapter! Lots of twists and turns coming up, and not a dull moment to be found (I hope!) Alexis x