A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Stomping Ground ... !"Metre ... Freeverse
10 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
Victory is not so sweet. It takes time and is kind of hollow. You wait for the sweet rush of success. There is none. Great work.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Victory is not so sweet. It takes time and is kind of hollow. You wait for the sweet rush of success. There is none. Great work.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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You must live in a very depressing part of the world my friend...many thanks.
Comment from playinaround
This is one of my favorite writes for the competition. so well worded and structured and goes with the image. i enjoyed reading!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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This is one of my favorite writes for the competition. so well worded and structured and goes with the image. i enjoyed reading!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Many thanks
Comment from MAMONIA
Very good job with this image. I think
I liked the way you presented your feelings
about life, victory and time.
I like the flow of the words in this poem
and think you have an excellent entry for
the contest.
Best of luck to you.
Marie
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Very good job with this image. I think
I liked the way you presented your feelings
about life, victory and time.
I like the flow of the words in this poem
and think you have an excellent entry for
the contest.
Best of luck to you.
Marie
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Many thanks
Comment from Sharrum
This poem was very well written. I can see that the picture fits the poem and that it met the 25 to 30 word guidelines. The format it was written in looks great. This also made me think and where I wanted to read it a few times. Good Work.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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This poem was very well written. I can see that the picture fits the poem and that it met the 25 to 30 word guidelines. The format it was written in looks great. This also made me think and where I wanted to read it a few times. Good Work.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Many thanks
Comment from Skyangel02
I like the way you relate the shoes to the concept of conquering the world and marching forward to victory.
It is a positive message of patience and endurance.
I agree it does take time to conquer the world one step at a time.
I have given you six stars because I really like the positive message in your poem. It is very encouraging and thought provoking. I also like the way you relate yourself to the boots and not to the flowers. It shows you have a good self esteem, have succeeded in the past and are determined to succeed in future.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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I like the way you relate the shoes to the concept of conquering the world and marching forward to victory.
It is a positive message of patience and endurance.
I agree it does take time to conquer the world one step at a time.
I have given you six stars because I really like the positive message in your poem. It is very encouraging and thought provoking. I also like the way you relate yourself to the boots and not to the flowers. It shows you have a good self esteem, have succeeded in the past and are determined to succeed in future.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Thanks sky you were one of the few that voted and quite right as it is meant to be upbeat and positive too much gloom and doom does no good.
Comment from Galactia
great poem.
perfect 30 words were used. you stuck to the requirements of the prompt well.
favourite stanza is....
Marching forward;
I live
Worlds conquered:
now
I
wait.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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great poem.
perfect 30 words were used. you stuck to the requirements of the prompt well.
favourite stanza is....
Marching forward;
I live
Worlds conquered:
now
I
wait.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Thanks Tia glad you enjoyed...
Comment from Peridot73
I like your style and very good imaging. Your thoughts are clearly projected in this enjoyable prose. Good luck with contest.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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I like your style and very good imaging. Your thoughts are clearly projected in this enjoyable prose. Good luck with contest.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Was not meant to be prose but a piece of free verse...many thanks.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I like this read, and the way you have set it out.
'Marching forward' conquering worlds then waiting for victory to catch up, a good one. good luck in the comp.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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I like this read, and the way you have set it out.
'Marching forward' conquering worlds then waiting for victory to catch up, a good one. good luck in the comp.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2012
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Many thanks Pearl...
Comment from catch22
This is an outstanding poem for the contest. I love the format that gives pauses to each thought and allows one to actually "wait" for the conclusion or punchline of the poem. The language is straightforward and economical, which drives your message home to the reader. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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This is an outstanding poem for the contest. I love the format that gives pauses to each thought and allows one to actually "wait" for the conclusion or punchline of the poem. The language is straightforward and economical, which drives your message home to the reader. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thank you...
Comment from lbbjm
I love the picture, it fits the poem perfectly. I'm a little confused though. Is the marching a part of waiting? I really like the last paragraph.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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I love the picture, it fits the poem perfectly. I'm a little confused though. Is the marching a part of waiting? I really like the last paragraph.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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No worries I would like to know why the three which suggests a lot of revision and mistakes, could you point some out, please...
