Unstoppable
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Comment from adewpearl
good alliterative pairing of the strong verbs destroy and damage
good alliteration also in watching the world/wonder
good pairing of friend and foe
Typo - Were did I go wrong - Where
A most thoughtful and thought-provoking poem :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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good alliterative pairing of the strong verbs destroy and damage
good alliteration also in watching the world/wonder
good pairing of friend and foe
Typo - Were did I go wrong - Where
A most thoughtful and thought-provoking poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Thank you correction made.
Comment from Bellringer
Keimosobie, your poem is thought provoking and well written. The only minor edit is to add an "s" after mask. I agree, we humans a real complicated lot with an uneven mixture of good and evil. Even though I've lived many years, I'm still learning about who I am...but, I've learned to accept myself (warts and all) and to accept others; acceptance tends to make all human interaction a little easier. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Keimosobie, your poem is thought provoking and well written. The only minor edit is to add an "s" after mask. I agree, we humans a real complicated lot with an uneven mixture of good and evil. Even though I've lived many years, I'm still learning about who I am...but, I've learned to accept myself (warts and all) and to accept others; acceptance tends to make all human interaction a little easier. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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yhank you
Comment from laren
A profound poem that questions where we are going, what time distort the world in which we live. Something to ponder!
Laren
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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A profound poem that questions where we are going, what time distort the world in which we live. Something to ponder!
Laren
Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thank you
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You're welcome,
LAREN
Comment from Tengeresz
Hi
Either I did not get you're meaning or there are logical inconsistencies in the first half of the poem. Punctuations would likely solve this problem. Before posting have a friend read aloud what you wrote. There are some very good ideas in this work that could be developed into something very nice.
Tengeresz
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Hi
Either I did not get you're meaning or there are logical inconsistencies in the first half of the poem. Punctuations would likely solve this problem. Before posting have a friend read aloud what you wrote. There are some very good ideas in this work that could be developed into something very nice.
Tengeresz
Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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thank you